UCF Admissions Essay- how my environment has influenced who i am today.

After the passing of my mom, I moved in with my aunt and uncle who had always lived about 10 minutes away. They had two daughters of their own, one about to graduate high school and the other a sophomore in high school. It was generous of them to take us in when they did, but it didn't feel like home. I wasn't comfortable at first and felt very on the outside. They had this tight-knit family, and I felt so much on the outside. They had this tight-knit family, and I felt so much on the outside. I knew they all loved me but I just didn't feel right. This experience helped make me the person I am today.

I met new friends in a new Girl Scout troupe, in a new elementary school. I became very outgoing and still have this quality today. Not only did I make new friends, but I gained a quick ability to adapt to a new environment. I learned how to live with two other girls, and how to make relationships with them; how to get along in a new environment and how to make myself comfortable. But to be honest, the most important thing I have gained from this experience is the idea of having pride in me, and the people I associate with. Being proud of the person I have become and not putting myself in shady situations, or around shady people, is the main thing my aunt and uncle have taught me. Because I associated with people with higher standards for themselves I have the confidence and ability to make good decisions in my life.

PROMPT:
How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?

"they had two daughters of their own," I would change had to have unless they have died.

thank you. i didn't even notice that

Good morning.

They have two daughters of their own ... It was generous of them to take us in when they did, but it did not feel like home. I was not comfortable at first and felt very " on the outside."

I knew they all loved me but I just didn't feel right.
I became very outgoing and still have this quality today. Not only did I make new friends, but I gained a quick ability to adapt to a new environment. You should put something in here about having the new home being the reason for all of the new changes; it will help keep your flow. I learned how to live with ...

... or around shady people, is the main thing...
Because I associated with people with higher standards for themselves I have the confidence ...

Nice job.