Okay, so these are my short answers for UChicago. Any feedback would be more than appreciated; I'm pretty nervous. ^-^' Mostly I want to know 1. Do my essays stand out (in a good way) and 2. Does my personality show through?
Question 1. How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to UChicago.
After my first good test score, I was hit with a deluge of pamphlets from colleges with various statistics next to pictures of the most photogenic students on campus. But one letter was different. The letter I received from University of Chicago had a picture of a hot dog on it, with the caption, "Item 57: make a Mandelbrot fractal out of hot dogs". There are three things I have always valued in life: being different, being intelligent, and being humorous. That letter fulfilled all three and inspired me to find out more about the University of Chicago. The more I found out, the more I fell in love.
By the time I visited the campus, I knew UChicago was my first choice. The interdisciplinary "Common Core" told me this was a school for those who valued learning in-depth in a variety of different fields, perfect for a girl who craves learning but has never even been able to pick a favorite class, let alone a future major. The city of Chicago told me I could enhance my education not only with unparalleled museums and cultural sites, but with new experiences and interactions with people of all types and classes. Finally, the Scav Hunt told me the community of UChicago was uniquely clever and quirky, and consisted of students serious about learning but still able to laugh.
I want to attend a unique university with first-rate academics, a community that shares my passion for knowledge, and an atmosphere distinct from anywhere I have ever lived. I want to attend the University of Chicago.
Question 2 (Optional): Share with us a few of your favorite books, poems, authors, films, plays, pieces of music, musicians, performers, paintings, artists, blogs, magazines, or newspapers. Feel free to touch on one, some, or all of the categories listed, or add a category of your own.
My favorite songs tend to be pieces of music few have heard of, though many have heard. When I watch a movie, game, TV show, or even commercial that moves me my very next step is to Google the soundtrack. The first song I discovered in this manner is "Itsumo Nando Demo", the ending song of the beautiful animated film Spirited Away. As soon as I heard it, I knew I needed to find it. This happened for a couple more songs, like "Baba Yetu" from the trailer for Civilization IV, and "Short Hair", an instrumental piece from Mulan. Finally, I realized that behind almost every cinematic moment that I loved, there was an amazing song.
My music taste is of course not only limited to soundtracks, it is just that by already having an emotional connection through a story, I already have an instant affection for it. Also, they are usually amazing pieces of music that just happen to be designed to intensify an emotion. I connect with it because of the situation I first heard it, but I appreciate each song on its own merits and listen to them independently. Some more favorites include "I Am the Doctor" from Doctor Who, "Overworld Theme" from The Legend of Zelda, "A Drop Filled With Memories" from Paprika, "Dead Hearts" from an episode of Chuck, "Space Lion" from Cowboy Bebop, "Accidentally in Love" from Shrek 2, and the theme from Chariots Of Fire.
In the first essay I can tell these things about your personality: That campus life excites you, you get good grades, you are indecisive when choosing classes, and you have a "passion for knowledge."
That letter fulfilled all three
Maybe you should use some other word than fulfilled? "Reflected" perhaps?
The second essay is well done, has a good flow and is descriptive.
Your writing skills are great and it is evident in these essays.
When I watch a movie, game, TV show, or even commercial that moves me my very next step is to Google the soundtrack
This sentence sounds a little wordy.