UNC essay - the result of my curiosity

Topic: Tell us about a time when your curiosity let you to someplace you weren't expecting to go.

One summer vacation, my mother told me that we were going for a trip to the Himalayas with a few family friends. It was a good 14-hour drive and we left soon after sunrise. By the evening, all the excitement died down and everyone fell off to sleep.

Having slept enough the previous night I started chatting with the driver. Suddenly I saw flames emerging from something that seemed like a cave. I had heard a story that sometimes flames would start emerging from the Himalayas and was supposed to be an indication to God's presence on earth. At that time I had dismissed the story saying that it was apocryphal. But my curiosity took over and I decided that since we were nearly there, a short detour would not take much time. I started directing the driver towards the cave and he did so very hesitatingly.

The road to the cave was not made properly and there were no streetlights. But soon we were there. I could see many flames emerging from the corners of the cave. Soon everyone got up and were really surprised to see this cave. I told the driver to stop so that I could see it from inside. My mother was very angry with me but on seeing this sight she was totally in awe of it.

I had never imagined that a mystical tale would actually turn into reality. Though I had delayed the trip by almost 2 hours, it was completely worth it and it felt like I was living a dream.

As I don't know what the prompt it, it is difficult for me to say whether this is a good answer to it or not. As a standalone narrative piece, it is very effective. This is a very good descriptive snapshot of an event.

Hi, thankyou so much for your time and opinions.
i have written the topic before i began the essay, if you can please let me know if its relating to the topic or not.

Ah, I didn't catch it the first time! Thanks!

I think this is a great answer to the prompt; you clearly discuss the event, and why it was unexpected. You use great details and it is easy to read. I think it's a very good piece.