Hello guys, I'm applying to University of Rochester. Here are my two supplements.
Any criticism or suggestion will be very appreciated!! Thank you!
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Essay 1
You have already explained why you are applying to the University of Rochester. Now please elaborate on your interest in and your qualifications for the combined - admission program you selected above in less than 300 words.
As I comprehend, business is a dynamic and flexible system, and I need to be well-rounded in order to catch its flow. I'm therefore inevitably attracted to Rochester's REBS program, because it provides a stage that allows me to access to exclusive events, mentoring, networks and other opportunities with academic and business leaders and encourages me to explore other subjects based on my interests, which in my mind are psychology and sociology. Such liberal combined-admission program can certainly enrich my college life and benefit my future career.
Because of the food processing business my family runs, I was introduced to the world of business since I was nine. Reading relevant books on business management and biographies of successful entrepreneurs, such as The Predictably Irrational and the story of Gordon Moore, further impassions me. In addition, during the four years in high school I've done a good job completing the algebra, calculus, and microeconomics courses while teaching myself statistics. On the other hand, I'm strong at distilling information from reading materials and analyzing my own learning methods, through which I've performed better and better on English and History. In the previous summers, I've not only helped my parents with the quarter-end closing but also worked for a local security company in order to develop a more comprehensive understanding of the business world.
With passion and certain work experience, I am confident that I am a prepared and qualified candidate for the REBS combined-admission program and can infuse new blood into the Rochester community.
Essay 2
Please explore the distinct educational philosophy, area of study, or research project of a faculty member teaching in the graduate program to which you are applying. Tell us why you would enjoy working with this person. Rather than contacting a faculty member, please research the variety of print and online resources available. Limit to 300 words.
I'm always interested in managerial accounting and how the accounting information is used by managers within organizations to provide the basis to make informed business decisions that allow them to be better equipped in their management and control functions. Through research, I've learnt that Professor Jerold Zimmerman is a very involved lecturer as well as researcher, who has a teaching experience on managerial accounting for more than 30 years. Professor Zimmerman has published his articles on various eminent periodicals and magazines, including Journal of Accounting and Economics and Journal of Accounting Research. On the other hand, he has close connections and several joint research with some distinguished universities, such as M.I.T., University of Colorado, and even Hong Kong University, depicting his global influence and vision. Under Professor Zimmerman's direction, I can not only access to richer resources but also connect to a broader network. Moreover, Professor Zimmerman is a member of the Board of Directors of CPAC, Inc., suggesting that he has a deep and comprehensive understanding on managerial accounting and is able to provide a conceptional and practical education on managerial accounting. Professor Zimmerman's "exciting ideas" and "well-organized" teaching style can definitely "lay out the attractiveness of managerial accounting," which is revealed by a students' comments on textbook he wrote, Accounting for Decision Making and Control.
An avid business administration student, I would love to do undergraduate research with Professor Jerold Zimmerman so I can establish a strong scientific foundation and a solid social network for my future studies and career.
Essay 1
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(While)In the previous summersduring my previous summers , I've not only helped my parents with the quarter-end closing but also worked for a local security company in order to develop a more comprehensive understanding of the business world.
With passion and certain work experience, I am confident that I am a prepared and qualified candidate for the REBS combined-admission program and can infuse new blood into the Rochester community.
