Do you think these are good enough, too vague, poor vocabulary, grammar, doesnt relate to the topic/my subject of choice?
*What experiences and skills might you bring to this field? (100 words or less)
I have the advantage of being an international student; I had the unique opportunity to adapt a whole new culture, combined with my native culture and language, and which gave me various different perspectives. This provided me unique challenges throughout my life; I had to battle through the racial prejudice that was placed upon me. For example, my English writing and speaking skills were always questioned; I was determined to prove them wrong. These challenges made me self-motivated, competitive, and persistent in all my goals. I became opportunistic, always looking for the benefits in challenges as well as welcoming them.
*Why are you interested in this program? (100 words or less)
UTSC offers a strong network of academic excellence and business connections, in the business centre of Canada. Co-op offers the best combination of multi-cultural communities, academics, business networks, and challenges that will set the foundations for my future. I wish to be in a diverse community, where I can interact with students from different cultures, and discover new challenges and values. Co-op, not only offers all these traits, but offers me the opportunity to develop my skills as a leader and I believe this program is my first step to future success in the field of business.
*What is your favourite subject and why? (100 words or less)
According to Plato, "The highest form of pure thought is in mathematics." Mathematics is vast and its application limitless, but, the complexity and analytical aspects are what interest me the most. The intricate problem solving concepts and skills needed to solve just one math problem is always challenging. Also math is a language that every culture can understand and communicate through regardless of their country. Everything connects in mathematics, a relationship, and it feels complete. When I am challenged by a mathematically problem, I know that it can be solved, and this motivates me to persistently attempt to solve it.
*Please describe your writing and communication skills, indicating particular strengths or weaknesses (100 words or less):
What should i write about? , I was going to say that i can communicate with other cultures, i know a second language, and my skills are being able to efficiently communicate my thoughts and emotions. I was going to treat it like a resume, listing my accomplishments and my weakness and how i have made progress, my example being i was unable to write a clear and concise thesis in an essay but now i am able to efficiently express my opinions. What are your thoughts.
This is what i wrote, for my last question.
I am skilled at presenting my thoughts and opinion efficiently while accurately expressing my emotions, but my writing can be colloquial. This was brought to my attention when my teacher told me to write more concisely in my essays. I worked at improving my thesis writing and formatting my paragraphs. In pursuit of this I learned how to effectively format my sentences and paragraphs so that my ideas are clear and succinct. This improved the fluidity of my writing and my oral communication skills as I am now able to apply profound and descriptive vocabulary to my speech.
*What experiences and skills might you bring to this field? (100 words or less)
I have the advantage of being an international student; I had the unique opportunity to adapt a whole new culture, combined with my native culture and language, and which gave me various different perspectives. This provided me unique challenges throughout my life; I had to battle through the racial prejudice that was placed upon me. For example, my English writing and speaking skills were always questioned; I was determined to prove them wrong. These challenges made me self-motivated, competitive, and persistent in all my goals. I became opportunistic, always looking for the benefits in challenges as well as welcoming them.
Well ... as I feel, I guess that this prompt needs you to discuss your skills and experiences that you are going to bring to the field. So, I feel you need to align your answer more with the prompt by discussing your particular skills in this area and also some experience you gained in relevance to the field.
What is the field it refers to? Is it management and accounting?
If your field is management, you can talk about one of your previous managerial experience. You can tell them about certain already gained practical exposures in management . Also you can talk about certain skills you have, such as communication skills, peoples skills etc. you can talk about them and show how they are going to help you with the studies.
it is management and accounting with economy so i should be more specific, say that i can communicate with different cultures, my teacher told me uni love people who have multi cultural perspectives. Im not too sure what to do though. More examples? but 100 words is so small. I havent had any managerial experiences, so what talk about a manager ive learned from?
How about the rest are they alright? grammar mistakes?
Well.... in that case you may mention about your multicultural exposure and talk more about your skills that go with management and accounting discipline.
Your teacher is correct if the prompt ask you to write about what can you contribute to their student community because there cultural diversity exposure matter a lot... I just can't figure out a direct link of cultural diverstiy with this kind of prompt. However, you can have that point in the answer, but don't consume many lines for elaborating this factor. I feel you can have more emphasis on your skills .
Mathematics is vast and its applications are limitless
that is true, what kind of skills should i mention i was also told to consider these paragraphs almost like a resume, almost exaggerating your skills. But what kind of skills can i put in an eloquent paragraph? Skills ive learned in school ,like strong problem solving, analytical, communication - diverse multicultural as well as second language ? - and i like to be challenged maybe? That was what i was trying to pull off maybe it just wasnt clear or doesnt fit the bill
My love for mathematics has enhanced my ability to thoroughly analyze and solve problems. It has also taught me to analyze any challenges thoughtfully and to be persistent in the search for a solution. My persistence has enabled me to become a better leader and has developed my verbal and written communication skills. Also, my experiences as an international student gave me the unique opportunity to learn how to adapt to different cultures and social groups. In pursuit of this I became extremely social and encouraged me to always welcome a challenge and be persistent in all of my goals.
How is this one? Worse, better, the same?
For the skills and experience question.
