What matters to you, and why?
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What trait do iconic figures such as Isaac Newton, Albert Einstein, Duke Ellington, and Herman Melville share? Each were brave enough to assert their unorthodox spin on common practices. Colleagues thought Einstein turned mad when he proposed that light was simply something that can be bent by gravity, respected physicist such as Robert Hooke bashed Newton because the idea of an invisible force pulling everything toward one point was outlandish and mathematicians such as Michel Rolle labeled Newton's creation, differential calculus, as a "collection of ingenious fallacies." Ellington popularized jazz music and upset many people clinging to the old rhythms and melodies of the romantic, classical, and baroque periods when he wrote swung eighth notes and used innovative blues chords. Melville died disrespected when he tried to write a very deep, analytic story because the only profitable books at the time were romanticized adventure stories such as "Typee". Upon the release of deep tale, the public silently shunned Melville for writing such a dull story, and, unfortunately, he died forgotten. Only years later did the public find any value in "Moby Dick."
I raise my glass to all of these people, because they had the tenacity to overcome every distasteful comment slung from the mud and every financial hardship. All of these people, however, knew that what they believed in, what they knew to be true, would eventually pay off in the long run. Some of these people died waiting. Courage matters to me because, without courage, none of these brilliant innovations would have made it past the infant stages of the drawing board. Society might have never known why apples fall, never pondered how light behaves, never listened to the mysterious ambiance of jazz, or never read a controversial novel. When I become a scientist, and discover something amazing in a lab, I will support my findings, with a level head, with every fiber of my being and stand up for what I believe in.
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. Colleagues thought Einstein turned mad when he proposed that light was simply something that can be bent by gravity, respected physicist such as Robert Hooke bashed Newton because the idea of an invisible force pulling everything toward one point was outlandish and mathematicians such as Michel Rolle labeled Newton's creation, differential calculus, as a "collection of ingenious fallacies."
This sentence sounds funny. I really think you should read your essay out loud and erase all awkward phrases.Some of these people died waiting.
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a controversial novel
You're implying that Moby Dick is controversial? I would think Moby Dick is just a boring read.I will support my findings, with a level head, with every fiber of my being and stand up for what I believe in.
Again, I think you should re-read what you wrote out loud. But I think your essay is excellent. Just a few spots to clean up and you'll be fine.
Good luck with Stanford!
