could somebody please look over this essay?
I wrote it after having a debate with my father about the topic, and i'm hoping that the essay is good enough. feel free to be harsh
You have just completed your 300-page autobiography. Please submit page 217.
As I cradled my newborn son in one arm, I picked up the letter with my free hand. I trembled as I read it out loud.
" Your Excellency Mr. Majaly,
President of the Jordanian Parliament,
I am writing to you as the First Secretary of the Parliament, as a woman, as a Jordanian citizen, and most importantly as a mother. I respectfully ask that you grant me permission to hold a meeting to discuss and possibly amend the Nationality Law of 1987.
The Nationality Law of 1987 states that a Jordanian man can pass on his identity to his non-Jordanian wife granted she has lived in the country for 3 years if she is an Arab national or 5 years if she is a non-Arab, as well as passing on his nationality to his children. On the other hand, a Jordanian woman marrying a non-Jordanian man can neither pass on her nationality to her children nor grant them residency permits.
Unfortunately, I have not come to understand the impact of this law until I had a child of my own. I was previously assigned as a Jordanian ambassador to discuss international marketing and international policies and regulations overseas. While abroad, I found the man of my dreams. I happily married him. However, I was unaware of the complications brought along by marrying a non-Jordanian.
As you know, my profession limits me to Jordanian grounds; I am proudly residing in my country of birth, and would like to continue to do so. However, I must now consider the newest member of my family, my son. My son cannot be granted a Jordanian citizenship, or any citizenship at this point for that matter. This means that he may not enjoy any privileges that are rightfully his by birth on Jordanian soils. Therefore, he may not have access to a proper education, receive social entitlements and health benefits, or own political rights. Although born on this glorious soil, he will live like a foreigner, needing to renew his residency permits every year.
I assure you that with further inquiring, there will be more women facing this challenge. Therefore, through calling a meeting, I would like to form a committee to investigate this matter, and find a way to amend this legislation. Not only is this law outdated, it is also considered to be discriminatory against women, and it could eventually end up violating human rights.
Rayah Haidar Al-Farah"
"I'm proud of you" he said, as he kissed me on the forehead, and gently picked up his son from my arms.