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UPENN Essay - Someday, I want to things and go places


esther364 2 / 2  
Nov 15, 2012   #1
Ben Franklin once said, 'All mankind is divided into three classes: those that are immovable, those that are movable, and those that move.'
Which are you?
(Please answer in 300-500 words.)

When people ask me what I did over the weekend, I would always state, "nothing." This is my response every time but if I could, I would do everything. Like my dad, I always feel restless and I need to do something or be somewhere. I always plan a trip whenever my parents do not go to work. Even going down to Philadelphia can make me happy. I am a person who likes to move.

Although I like to go to places, I live in the suburbs where there is nothing to do. The nearest place to me is a small park where there is only a basketball court. I do not have a car so I cannot go anywhere. I live near a train station but I do not have money.

I always imagine myself in different places. I can imagine myself in downtown where there are all these stores, museums and restaurants. I want to get to know the city like I am a native to the urban area. I want to go shopping and find unique clothes which I have never seen. I want to go to Phileo Yogurt and eat their delicious yogurts.

I imagine myself in my native country of South Korea and eating real authentic food made and grown in Korea. I want to visit the palaces that are thousands of years old. I want to go shopping made by real Korean brands.

I can see myself in Venezuela to look at the biggest waterfall in the world, Angels Falls. I want to go to Russia to hear the wonderful singing of the boy's choir. I want to go to New York City and gaze at all the bright, colorful lights of Times Square. I want to visit Hokkaido, Japan during the Winter Festival to witness the giant snow sculptures. I want to go to Harujuku in Tokyo and take a glance at the different clothes found nowhere else in the world and the people dressed in the most unique clothes. It has always been my dream to visit places I have only ever read about and not only do I want to go to different places, I also want to learn new things.

I always thought it would be cool to learn kendo, the art of Japanese sword fighting. Through the form of art, I saw the code of honor instilled into samurais hundreds of years ago. Although I am not much of a dancer, I contemplated that break dancing would be fun to learn. I just would have to put a lot of effort into it.

People can say my life is pretty static because I do not do much, but if given the chance to, I would do things and go places people would have never thought of. As I dream of doing these things, someday, I know I am someday going to do them.
Mario8a 1 / 3  
Nov 15, 2012   #2
I think is pretty good but you should write at the end of how Upenn could make you move an accomplish the dreams that you have( in this case how can they help you move)

Also at the start you are stating that you practically not do anything because you live in the suburbs. That may be the case but the university is may think that you dont do anything. Put like you always find ways to do something but will like to do more. Thtas my opinion and sorry for the english
Debbycorner /  
Nov 15, 2012   #3
I imagine myself in my native country of South Korea and eating real authentic food made and grown in Korea .
* Try not to use the word, or letter, I as much.


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