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Why UPenn ("during my 3rd year of high school that I heard that name")


Tootley 4 / 10  
Dec 30, 2008   #1
Prompt: Describe the courses of study and the unique characteristics of the University of Pennsylvania that most interest you. Why do these interests make you a good match for Penn?

It was during my third year of high school that I heard the name; UPenn. I always was interested in finance, but my passion truly developed in my third year and because of it I was talking to anyone who had anything to do with the finance business. I asked my parents, I asked the parents of my friends and I asked my teachers. I talked to analysts, to bankers and to stock brokers. In the end I learned about the experiences, the hardships, the successes, the stresses and finally the joy these people felt; I was mesmerized. When I asked them what I could do to become immersed in this world many of them replied UPenn. Despite their own backgrounds and diverse schooling they all believed UPenn had something special and after my own pursuit of what that is, I think I've found it.

I realize that the faculty at UPenn is amazing. With professors like Nicholas Souleles, Lorin Hitt and Jesus Fernandez-Villaverde I know I will be challenged to a great degree, while at the same time inspired.

Coming from a high school where I indulged in many research and laboratory experiments I know the importance of the quality of the research labs and the equipment. At UPenn this environment is provided to all students in addition to its wealth of information from its libraries and esteemed professors.

However, the defining aspect of UPenn that attracts me the most are the students. These peers, these classmates and these friends will be the people I interact with the most. They will be there to help me or to be helped. They will be there to talk to or to argue with. They will be there when I start my first business or when I fail my first test. And ultimately they will be the ones who will be closest to me when I enter the business world. I know that UPenn will attract and admit the best people and it is my dream to be one of them.

Being an international student, the quality of the residencies and the availability of extracurricular activities are very important to me. Throughout my time in high school I have been a part of (as well as leading) many different clubs in math, film, music and business. At UPenn the importance of these activities are emphasized and I hope to be a part of this community as well as a contributing member to it.

The interdisciplinary aspect of UPenn is also extremely important to me. Through my experience in expanding a community currency, fundraising for charity or leading my lab group, I realize the importance of having a well rounded knowledge base.

The path I want to take at UPenn is finance at the Wharton School of Business. Everything in the world boils down to finance. Without the work of people in the finance industry companies like Google and Yahoo would never have had the chance to grow. Without people in the finance industry the little man who is willing to risk his life on an idea would never get the capital to make it happen. At Wharton the quality and rigour of its coursework coupled with the amazing opportunities to meet and network with people makes the difference between any old finance guy and the top investment bankers on Wall Street.

Though I wish to be in Wharton I have also realized the importance of having both the ability to manage people and to understand the technical aspects of any project. At UPenn the dual degree options in addition to the flexibility of the One University policy allows for this to happen. With its world class professors, its intellectually diverse student body as well as its emphasis on interdisciplinary studies I know UPenn is a place where I will not only study, but flourish and grow.


Suggestions and corrections on grammar. I have to write a seperate essay on M&T so i was not sure how much into detail i should get into the actual program.
jennc09 4 / 64  
Dec 30, 2008   #2
Hello.

I am not a moderator, but I would be happy to help you.

Well you should definately spell out "3rd."

Instead of "the parents of my friends," you should say "my parent's friends."

Comma should go after "Being an international student"

Overall, I like your essay. UPenn is a very good school, where I visit a lot. I hope to go to their graduate school to be a vet.

Jenn
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Dec 31, 2008   #3
It was during my third year of high school that I heard the name of UPenn. I had always been interested in finance, but my passion truly developed in my third year, when I was talking to anyone who had anything to do with the finance business.

Despite their own backgrounds and diverse schooling, they all believed UPenn had something special, and after my own pursuit of understanding I think I've found it.

Coming from a high school where I was privileged to experience many research and laboratory experiments I know the importance of the quality of the research labs and the equipment.

With its world class professors, its intellectually diverse student body, and its emphasis on interdisciplinary studies, I know UPenn is a place where I will not only study, but flourish and grow.

Good luck at UPenn !!!


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