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USC Supplement- I am a little concerned that the website might not be appropriate


alejobritos 1 / 1  
Dec 28, 2015   #1
Your browser history says a lot about you. Take a moment to think about the time you spend online. Whether it's browsing an Instagram account, listening to your favorite podcast, subscribing to the best web series on YouTube, or even addressing questions on tech-help forums, we want to know where you spend the most time online, and why. Please share your favorite online destination (via a web address, specific app, social network, etc.) - and describe why in a few sentences.(250 word limit)

Whenever I browse the internet I usually find myself on 9gag.com. 9gag is an online community where individuals are allowed to post images, memes, or even stories. Although most of these posts are meant to be amusing, they can be about virtually anything an individual feels compelled to share.

I personally enjoy the website because it offers a enjoyable setting where I can connect with people who I share interests with. Whether they be Star Wars fans, gamers or even travel enthusiasts the website's community is highly diverse and interesting. Its diversity is one of my favorite aspects as individuals around the world interact in a positive community. Over the years I have learned about a variety of cultures and countries, although not in the most traditional sense. Unfortunately, like most online destinations, 9gag does have its share of inappropriate and vulgar users. Sometimes this does take away from the enjoyment of the website, however over the years 9gag has made improvements to alienate these kinds of posts by providing NSFW (Not Safe For Work) sections.

9gag offers a break from serious and often times stressful matters such as school work or even family issues. I usually find myself on the website when I need to relax, take a break, or sometimes just to have a good laugh. 9gag helps me balance my life as it provides a place where I can be myself and enjoy my interests.
ratoberry 2 / 9 1  
Dec 28, 2015   #2
it's concise are right to the point. since the prompt is specific and required to be short and informative, i think you've done your job well. i don't think i would have added anything more or less. one tip would be try not to start your sentence with 9gag blah blah.

you do this quite a few times and gets too repetitive, so just reword some of your sentences.
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Dec 29, 2015   #3
Alejandro, you don't really need to open the statement with your current opening paragraph. Your second paragraph is actually more effective and direct to the point. You can just slip in the reference to 9gag.com within that paragraph. I would have slipped it in this way:

I personally enjoy spending time on 9gag.com because it offers a enjoyable setting where I can connect with people who I share interests with.

With regards to the redundancies in the essay, since you keep on saying 9gag, you can change the reference to other words such as "the website", "the site", or simply "it". :-) Changing the reference will not affect the content of the essay. Shortening it to 2 paragraphs will also make the essay easier to read and offer the reviewer enough of an opportunity to really pay attention to what you have written and wish to convey.


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