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USC ESSAY. #Reflect on an accomplishment you achieved in an unlikely way.


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Nov 29, 2009   #1
Thomas Edison failed many times before successfully inventing the modern electric light bulb. He said, "If I find 10,000 ways something won't work, I haven't failed. I am not discouraged, because every wrong attempt discarded is another step forward." Reflect on an accomplishment you achieved in an unlikely way.

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My extreme hunger for electronics led me to never give up and explore new ways to accomplish the things I want. When I see a computer, a camera or even an electric guitar, I yearn to rip off their screws and then spot the maze hidden inside of them. At first, when I approached to their labyrinth, neither a person nor a sign I could perceive to lighten my way. Two options abruptly appeared in my mind: I could either go back or bravely accept this struggle and push myself forward. I was on the crossroads. I chose to struggle with that and be a decisive and productive person although I knew I might fail a lot.

Computers couldn't swiftly spread out in my country. I was privileged as one of the earliest owners of it. But nobody knew how to use them and what they were capable of doing. There was a button to open it and then the scary English letters of Windows would come to the screen. When my mother cooked, I secretly opened the computer and tried to learn how to use it. First thing I discovered was the famous game, Minesweeper. Until I succeed in completing this game, I remember I failed bunch of times. The discovery of that game relaxed my family and let me get my family's permission to use the computer anytime I want. The more I spent time on it the more exploration I made. I once disrupt the Microsoft Office when I was trying to change its options but I learned how to fully use the Microsoft Office in 1996 by myself and taught many people when I was six.

The Bios screen was always a mystery for me. To go beyond that black screen was my dream since I knew there was something extreme. I was able to do numerous things but never tried to reach beyond that first screen which appears when one opens a computer. There were some warnings telling if I try to go beyond that screen, it may cause my computer to break down. However, I reached that screen. I remember I saw the terms called '' FSB and MULTIPLIER ''

I carefully took the processor from its socket out even though I didn't know it was the processor and there was no one that could show how to do that. It had golden pins under it. I realized I broke one of those pins when I'm taking it out. Two weeks later, I found the small pin on the carpet and thought of welding it to the processor. My father found a goldsmith and let him do that task. In the end, the processor was alive again.

I over-clocked an 800mhz processor to 1190mhz by raising the front side bus (FSB) which carries data between the processor and the motherboard. The temperature of the overall system greatly increased and suddenly the motherboard boomed. I was working as a computer technician and making some money. So I bought another motherboard. I never let the new motherboard die; it is even alive today even though it has undergone many experiments of mine too.

I realized the thermal paste on the processor was used for the transaction of the heat from the processor to the cooling fan. So I thought maybe I could change the amount of that liquid and may lower the temperature this way. Finally, I could lower the temperature three degrees by applying the thermal paste more carefully. Next step was to raise the speed to 1230mhz. To be able to reach that speed, a better cooling system and extra voltage for the processor was needed. After many attempts, numerous failures, loss of a processor, I produced a nitrogen based cooling system and pulled the processor temperature down to -15C. This system is still alive too and can work like a 1230mhz processor although its original speed is 800mhz.

I failed many times from the beginning to the end. I had to adjust every single option and be very careful. I was alone and discovering something serious by myself. Mistakes were unavoidable. I always thought positively that I'll definitely succeed because I'm on it. My belief is that a fail is knowledge and an experience which will help you accomplish next time.

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I just could find time to write an essay and need to submit that until tomorrow. I'd greatly appreciate if anyone can help me make this essay clearer, effective and grammatically correct. Also, I want to know if you can really understand what I'm talking about since the subject I choose is not a thing that everybody knows of. Any advice is appreciated!
mcsingson /  
Nov 29, 2009   #2
My extreme hunger for electronics led me to never give up and explore new ways to accomplish the things I want. When I see a computer, a camera, or even an electric guitar, I yearn to rip off their screws and then spot the maze hidden inside of them. At first, when I approached to their labyrinth, I could perceive neither a person nor a sign to lighten my way. Two options abruptly appeared in my mind: I could either go back or bravely accept this struggle and push myself forward. I was on the crossroads. I chose to struggle with that and be a decisive and productive person although I knew I might fail a lot. [a little awkward wording. try taking out "a lot."]

try to put a better transition between these paragraphs Computers couldn't swiftly spread out in my country. I was privileged as one of the earliest owners of it. But nobody knew how to use them and what they were capable of doing. There was a button to open it and then the scary English letters of Windows would come to the screen. When my mother cooked, I secretly opened the computer and tried to learn how to use it. The first thing I discovered was the famous game, Minesweeper. I failed several times before i finally completed it. The discovery of that game relaxed my family [why did it relax your family?] and allowed me to receive my family's permission to use the computer anytime I want. The more time I spent on it, the more exploration I made. I once disrupted the Microsoft Office when I was trying to change its options, but I learned how to fully use the Microsoft Office in 1996 by myself and taught many people when I was six.

The Bios screen was always a mystery for me. To go beyond that black screen was my dream since I knew there was something extreme. I was able to do numerous things but never tried to reach beyond that first screen which appears when one opens a computer. There were some warnings telling me that if I try to go beyond that screen, it may cause my computer to break down. However, I reached that screen. I remember I saw the terms called '' FSB and MULTIPLIER ''

I carefully took the processor from its socket out even though I didn't know it was the processor and there was no one that could show how to do that. It had golden pins under it. I realized I broke one of those pins when I'm taking it out. Two weeks later, I found the small pin on the carpet and thought of welding it to the processor. My father found a goldsmith and let him complete that task. In the end, the processor was alive again.

I over-clocked an 800mhz processor to 1190mhz by raising the front side bus (FSB) which carries data between the processor and the motherboard. The temperature of the overall system greatly increased and suddenly the motherboard boomed. I was working as a computer technician and making some money. So I bought another motherboard. I never let the new motherboard die; it is even alive today even though it has undergone many experiments of mine too.

I realized the thermal paste on the processor was used for the transaction of the heat from the processor to the cooling fan. So I thought maybe I could change the amount of that liquid and may lower the temperature this way. Finally, I could lower the temperature three degrees by applying the thermal paste more carefully. Next step was to raise the speed to 1230mhz. To be able to reach that speed, a better cooling system and extra voltage for the processor was needed. After many attempts, numerous failures, loss of a processor, I produced a nitrogen based cooling system and pulled the processor temperature down to -15C. This system is still alive too and can work like a 1230mhz processor although its original speed is 800mhz.

I failed many times from the beginning to the end. I had to adjust every single option and be very careful. I was alone and discovering something serious by myself. Mistakes were unavoidable. I always thought positively that I'll definitely succeed because I'm on it. My belief is that a fail is knowledge and an experience which will help you accomplish next time.

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I like the intro, but there are a lot of terms I don't understand in the essay, like "motherboard" and "bios screen." You need to explain what you're trying to do also, because i didn't really get it. I don't understand computer jargon, haha.


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