USNA Candidate essay - to achieve my dreams of serving in the navy

Why do you want to attend the Naval Academy?
What are your long term and short term goals? (250 words or less)

Growing up with parents of Nepali descent who moved to America for opportunity allowed me to realize what this country has to offer. One can only imagine living in a country without freedom and possibility. I grew up in a small town with minimal diversity. My first exposure to diversity was when I traveled to Nepal; I saw the poverty, economic downfall, and child labor. The major differences between Nepal and America allowed me to appreciate the liberty I have at home.

Since I have had the privilege of growing up in America, I feel that it is my duty to devote my life to one of service. I desire to protect my family, my country, and my home. Unlike most civilian universities, service academies challenge their students and give them a sense of purpose and dedication to this country.

I am passionate and enthusiastic about attending a military academy because it prepares one morally, mentally, and physically and I am up for that challenge. Attending the academy will allow me to extend my dedication to this country in order to serve to the best of my abilities. Becoming a Naval Officer would allow me to show my integrity, as it is essential in the military to show one's strength amongst the others. I believe that I have what it takes to achieve my dreams of serving in the navy and reaching my ultimate goal of securing this country.

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Candidate, your essay is lacking a few more paragraphs that will tell the admissions officer that you are fit for the academy and the mission that they live by. I understand your undeniable love and patriotism to your country however the academy will need more than physical strength and drive in order to see you fit for the institution. They require utmost intelligence too, discipline, and the willingness to learn and continue spreading the word about security, unity and loyalty to the nation that never waver to welcome you with open arms.

I suggest that you research and study the mission and vision of the academy, the rules they live by and the qualifications that they require to consider you in the pact. Good luck.