UVA Supplement-Doodling- 'the artistic girl who doesn't like to doodle'

All critiques are appreciated!
I'll be sure to read yours as well.

Discuss something you secretly like but pretend not to, or vise versa.

Half the class is asleep, the other half is mindlessly staring at their paper doodling. I am doing neither. Sleeping leaves me susceptible to embarrassment, and doodling requires me to draw idly while simultaneously diverting half of my attention to the lecture currently being given. This is an issue since I have always prospered in focusing my attention on one task at a time.

Doodles don't have to have deep concrete meaning, they can just be abstract shapes. Unfortunately, I cannot let my mind drift and let my hand blindly move across a corner of my notebook. After spending many years honing my artistic skills, I cannot help but automatically construct a composition even if my intention is to merely doodle. Even more frustrating, I feel obligated to refine all my doodles. If they aren't pleasing to the eye, I toil until they are.

When the flaws in something that is supposed to be filled with imperfections taunt me to improve them, I cannot keep them in such a state when the bell rings. The doodles are no longer something to pass the time; they become a laborious task that seeps over into my other classes. Having such a pull to fix something so silly, hopefully it is understandable why I prefer not to doodle at all.

It may seem juvenile to pretend to like doodling, but if word gets out, I would be known as not just 'the Asian girl who doesn't like rice', but also 'the artistic girl who doesn't like to doodle'. Who knows, perhaps the teachers will delight in knowing at least one student will most likely not be doodling during their class.

Wow, I would have never thought that someone would write an essay about pretending to like doodling! Very creative and unique.

Please! I know that there is an abundant number of other essays needing peer review, but I would really appreciate critiques and thoughts. Thank you

This is a run-on sentence here:
Half the class is asleep, the other half is mindlessly staring at their paper doodling.
Let's make it:
Half the class is asleep. The other half is mindlessly staring at their papers, doodling.


Oh, you are making a statement AGAINST the concept of multi-tasking, and this is ery interesting! Often, multi-tasking is explained as a good thing, but the Buddhist practice of mindfulness says otherwise. Maybe you want to mention multitasking and mindfulness in this essay.

Please consider making the last paragraph the intro paragraph! It is great.

:-)

Thank you for your input. :)