i kinda hope y'all don't cut out my intro
...looks like you love the way your intro is.... well, it's kind of quite unorthodox, but interesting :)
Entering high school I had a conflicting choices of what I wanted to be
which really discouraged my self-esteems
...self-esteem (no "s")
I may not have been the perfect student or the nurse instead of wallowingin my cants an cannot in my who should I be or who I'm not
This sounds a bit confusing, especially the highlighted part... I feel you better re-phrase
I am naomi wagner I considered myself a hipster an avid lover of Korean pop indie rock and vintage clothing I may be young, I cannot tell you exactly who I am but I let my actions speak for themselves.
... where's punctuation? Have the commas in appropriate places :)
