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'Our values match' - Colorado College - supplemental essay - why CC?


natpete 1 / -  
Sep 2, 2012   #1
How did you learn about Colorado College and why do you wish to attend?

I have always been drawn to the west- particularly Colorado. When I realized I had to start thinking about which college I would be attending, I knew Colorado was where I wanted to go. I started by generally looking up colleges in Colorado and Colorado College of course came up. When I started looking into it further, I could tell this was a quality school where I would get a superior education and still be able to participate in the things I love, such as: hiking, climbing, rafting, and snowboarding.

I wish to attend Colorado College because I believe it had the ability to give me everything I am looking for in a college. With a student body of about 2,000 I feel I will be able to help from professors if I need it and with class sizes of only 16 students, the professors can really get to know me as a person, not just one of the hundreds of kids in their class.

The "block breaks" described online sound perfect for what I am looking for. Being able to escape the demands of everyday life for the long weekend between classes. The block program seems like a great idea. It will give me a chance to focus on one class at a time and be able to excel in that one class without others stressing me out at the same time.

I believe that the goal when looking for a college is for my values and the college's values to mesh well. This happens for me at CC. On the website there were values listed; one of them being the adventurous spirit of the Rocky Mountain West. I hold that quality even though I do not live there now, I hope to in the very near future and for my adult life. I am still very adventurous and outdoorsy and willing to try anything. Also on the website, it says CC dedicates themselves to helping students find their passion. I am not 100% sure of what I want to do with my life but I would love a college that would be willing and ready to help me figure that out. Lastly, leadership is very important to me. I feel that being ready to help out in any situation and take on a leadership role when needed is a vital need in this life.

I am applying as an early applicant because I share the same values as the school, I am drawn to Colorado, and the school's aspects fit mine. This is why I believe I would be a good fit for Colorado College and why I wish to attend.
thaonguyen1901 10 / 29 3  
Sep 4, 2012   #2
Your sup essay is good and shows that you find out many information before applying. It displays your full of concern and enthusiasm too. However, the way you express your ideas is not yet smooth . Here is my suggestion :

I have always been drawn to the west- particularly Colorado. ( => Can you tell why? So the next sentence is more meaningful ) When I realized I had to start thinking about which college I would be attending, I knew Colorado was where I wanted to go. I started by generally looking up colleges in Colorado and Colorado College of course came up. When I started looking into it further, I could tell this was a quality school where I would get a superior education and still be able to participate in the things I love, such as: hiking, climbing, rafting, and snowboarding.

I wish to attend Colorado College because I believe it HAS the ability to give me everything I am looking for in a college. With a student body of about 2,000 I feel IT IS EASIER FOR ME to GET help from professors if I need it and with class sizes of only 16 students, the professors can really get to know me as a person, not just one of the hundreds of kids in their class.

The "block breaks" described online sound perfect for what I am looking for. Being able to escape the demands of everyday life for the long weekend between classes. The block program seems like a great idea. It will give me a chance to focus on AND EXCEL IN ONE CLASS AT A TIME WITHOUT OTHERS STRESSING ME OUT.

I believe that the goal when looking for a college is TO DISCOVER THE SUITABLE VALUES OF THAT COLLEGE FOR ME. AND I FOUND IT AT CC . IN THE LISTED VALUES ON THE WEBSITES; I HOLD the adventurous spirit of the Rocky Mountain West. I hold that quality even though I do not live there now, I hope to in the very near future and for my adult life. I am still very adventurous and outdoorsy and willing to try anything. Also on the website, it says CC dedicates ITSELF to helping students find their passion. I am not 100% sure of what I want to do with my life but I would love a college that would be willing and ready to help me figure that out. Lastly, leadership is very important to me. I feel that being ready to help out in any situation and take on a leadership role when needed is a vital need in this life. ( => the last two sentences here is the same, can you talk more about why leadership is important/vital to you ? )

I am applying as an early applicant because I share the same values( => too many VALUES, you can replace some ones by merit/ expect/ requirement) as the school, I am drawn to Colorado, and the school's aspects fit mine. This is why I believe I would be a good fit for Colorado College and why I wish to attend.

Good luck my friend !


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