I was stoked to perform in the Troy Savings Bank Music Hall, andwhere every premiere concert of the ESYO season is especially unique
Nothing can compare to performing,playing the final movement and knowing your inspiring others with the music you create; the adrenaline of playing the final movement .
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Music has shaped my high school career and ,my life, and now brought me toreceiving education from Steinhardt at NYU where i canwould further my intentions as a musician.
Conjointly, since a young age I've been very artistic. I'm the kid with bundles of drawings in their desk; the house littered with countless paintings and supplies. The visual arts are another academic interest. With NYU's broad spectrum of classes, I could fulfill both passions and opportunely incorporate them as I become the artist I aspire to be.
-seems unnecessary. You add in a minor topic near the end which , though it hits the prompt, deviates from the rest of the essay.
Overall it's nicely written. You hit the point of "what are your own academic interests?"
Read my cultural background essay please :)