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'video game addiction' - Overcoming this obstacle in life has been my great achievement


mightyboosh01 1 / -  
Nov 18, 2012   #1
Prompt: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

My videogame addiction nearly five years ago was so severe that many times I stayed up playing late at night, skipped meals, endured backaches, and spent a regretful amount of money. These are just a few of the many consequences that occurred due to me playing videogames several hours a day. I began to play videogames on a daily basis during middle school when my friends first introduced me to the game, Call of Duty. This videogame addiction was self-imposed and was my own fault because I could have prevented myself from playing too much. I was academically above the average student in my grade. While I played videogames on a daily basis my academic and social life suffered. Overcoming that addiction was difficult and lengthy, but successfully overcoming it has taught me to spend my time more productively.

My life was turned upside down and Call of Duty negatively impacted my academic and social life. Before I became addicted to videogames, I was a hardworking student and was making A's in my classes. Once I began playing videogames daily, my grades dropped due to my lack of studying. I sat in class focused on videogames and was unable to concentrate on the schoolwork. My backpack was left untouched from the moment I got home till the moment I left. Instead of wasting my time after school playing videogames, I should have done something more academically enriching such as studying for History quizzes or reading for English. Not only did my grades suffer, but my social life also deteriorated. For example, I never wanted to leave my room and rejected people's offer to get together. I became less social and less involved outside of school such as me quitting baseball, which I had played for 7 years. Despite the many negative results, I learned an important lesson after defeating my addiction.

This experience has taught me to use my time more wisely. Playing hours a day showed my lack of time management. Entering high school, I realized that playing games the majority of the day was an unhealthy lifestyle. Seeing how poorly I was living, I decided to change my lifestyle, and quit playing videogames. Preventing myself from playing was very difficult but I had encouragement my mother who Now, I have a planned schedule each day of the week; whether it is studying, weightlifting, or spending time with friends. I learned that a person does not actually gain anything from playing video game, and it consumes many hours that could be used for productivity. This experience actually benefits me for the rest of my life because I will know how to spend my time being productive and accomplishing goals.

Overcoming this obstacle in life has so far been an achievement I greatly cherish. The lessons I learned from this experience I will carry on to use throughout high school and for the rest of my life. The fact that I will be living alone without my parents, I realize that there is nobody to take fault for my actions, just as there was no one to take the blame while I had a game addiction. Experiencing this dilemma, the possibility of encountering this and possibly any other addiction in the future is very unlikely.
M_Squared 3 / 8 1  
Nov 20, 2012   #2
Before going straight into your essay, start off with a sentence that really intrigues the reader to continue reading your essay. In paragraph 2, sentence 1, we know that Call of Duty negatively affected your life, so you don't have to restate it again; I would take out that sentence. Last paragraph, sentence 2 : Instead of "The lessons I learned" change to "The lessons I gained"

Overall good essay, just tidy it up and don't explain your addiction too generally. Although others may have a same/different addiction, your essay should wow the reader. Leave them with their jaws dropped!


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