Video games make me want to do Engineering. Brown Academic Interest short essay.

Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated in our Member Section, earlier in this application? If you are "undecided" or not sure which Brown concentrations match your interests, consider describing more generally the academic topics or modes of thought that engage you currently. (150 word limit)

I grew up watching my brother play video games. One day, my brother made the mistake of leaving his game idle and I snatched that opportunity to play the game instead. Long story short, my brother could no longer touch that video game again.

It wasn't long before my growing fascination with video games expanded beyond playing it. I followed updates on video game technology religiously-from the growing popularity of motion-gaming with the introduction of the Wii to the recent implementation of gaming technology like the Kinect and Oculus Rift in the controlling of a robot arm by NASA-and am intrigued on how far we have come in the industry for the sake of 'immersion'.

'How much further can we go?' is the main question that I wish to answer by foraying into the world of engineering.

Your paragraph is kind of confusing because it gives off the assumption that you have never played video games until that one day. Also, what do you mean by your brother no longer able to play that video game ever again? In my opinion, I don't think that your second paragraph effectively shows your passion in engineering. Everyone follows improvements in video game technology whether they like games or not. You should talk more about the specific technological improvements in Kinect and Oculus Rift. Restructure your last paragraph so it doesn't sound forced and awkward.