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"I am from a village in Macedonia" - A letter to your future roommate!


1mPeRvI0uS 1 / 5  
Dec 27, 2010   #1
Dear Roommate
My name is Nikolche Kolev and I am from a village in Macedonia, called Erdzelija. I know that you may have never heard of Macedonia before, but Macedonia is a small country located in the Balkans, in the southeastern part of Europe. I could write about my love for sports, rock music and science fiction, but I believe that we already might have that in common. So I'll try to give you a unique aspect of mine.

One of my favorite pastimes is making paper airplanes. As I grew up, I took my passion for making flying crafts to the next level. I created my first hovercraft model when I was eleven. There is no greater pleasure for me than seeing something I created with my own hands working perfectly.

Another thing is that I love computer games. I love playing strategies like Stronghold Crusader and Red Alert. If you like, these games also, we can have a little one on one when we meet.

I am sure that you haven't heard about my favorite card game Kant. This game is specific to my hometown, and is especially difficult to master due to its tactical aspect. Kant is all about guessing your teammates cards from the way he or she is playing. Masters of the game are able to guess their cards just after a couple of hands!

I can't wait to show the dynamic of Kant in person!
Sincerely,
Nikolche

Please comment on any grammar or structural mistakes!
Thanks in advance
chalasasha 3 / 5  
Dec 27, 2010   #2
"If you like, these games also, we can have a little one on one when we meet." Take that comma out. Other than that, this is a good response because it is more personal. Good job!
jstorm 4 / 8  
Dec 27, 2010   #3
My name is Nikolche Kolev and I am from a village in Macedonia called Erdzelija. Macedonia is a small country located in the Balkans, in the southeastern part of Europe. I could write about my love for sports, rock music and science fiction, but I believe that we already might have that in common.

know that you may have never heard of Macedonia before, So I'll try to give you a unique aspect of mine.

One of my favorite pastimes is making paper airplanes. As I grew up, I took my passion for making flying crafts to the next level. I created my first hovercraft model when I was eleven. There is no greater pleasure for me than seeing something I created with my own hands working perfectly.

Another thing is that I love computer games. I love playing strategies like Stronghold Crusader and Red Alert. If you like, these games also, we can have a little one on one when we meet.

*Check verbs and how the sentences start

I am sure that you haven't heard about my favorite card game Kant. This game is specific to my hometown, and is especially difficult to master due to its tactical aspect. Kant is all about guessing your teammates cards from the way he or she is playing. Masters of the game are able to guess their cards just after a couple of hands!

I can't wait to show the dynamic of Kant in person!
Sincerely,
Nikolche

Good overall! Just a few things I thought sounded a little odd, but that's just my two cents. Hope it helped a bit!


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