Virginia tech - Our motto is UT Promise. How is service to others important for you?

UT Promise = growth

What the UT promise means to me can be summed up into one word--growth. And I have grown so much by volunteering for Annandale Christian community for Action, which is an organization that gives furniture to families in need. ACCA has taught me a lot, but the most important thing that they showed me was people. I saw people that were so poor that they had ten or more people living in one apartment. People working multiple jobs, so they could go to school or feed their families. The truth is, these people had the strongest connection to their family and friends because they needed to rely on each other to survive. They formed a community that was something special money or power could not buy. While I saw these generally hardworking families, I also saw the ones, who were deceitful. The type of people, who would abuse a system that is trying to help them to gain a profit by selling the furniture that we gave to them for free. Even though, I have seen the good and bad, while volunteering; they all were trying to achieve the same thing: a better life.

Volunteering is a constant reminder for me to working on myself to become the type of person that I see in others. The capacity of compassion to complete strangers, the drive to change my situation, the strong meaningful connections, and more, while rejecting mistrust that I have seen in others. Serving my community is important to me because it is how I became me.

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feel a little unsure of this essay

Nathan, Ut Prosim which is the Latin motto of Virginia Tech literally means "That I may serve". The prompt thus requires you to explain how you are of selfless service to others in your life. While you have a good premise for the essay, the discussion that you provided centered too much on the people that your organization serves rather than the actions that you take within the organization in order to help others. The essay requires a redirection of the topic from the people to you. Why do you want to serve these people? Why is serving them something that is of high importance to you? Your second paragraph carries some pretty good responses to the questions I posed. You have to further develop those thoughts in order to create a more appropriate response for the essay. So you can tell the reviewer about your organization but, rather than discussing your point of view about the people who benefit from your work, talk instead, about the personal fulfillment or satisfaction that you get from the activity. That should help to explain why this activity is important to you.