yenna 9 / 23 Dec 30, 2010 #1The short statement for the commonapp :)Thanks in advancePROMPT:Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum).Every Saturday I get paper cuts, get glue on my hands, cut glass and chop wood."Wait, you volunteer where?" people question.I volunteer at the MWR Frame Shop on Fort Huachuca and I help by framing artwork. My mom often disapproves of me volunteering somewhere that has nothing to do with my future career, but I have learned many valuable things that make up for it. I have learned to be cautions. I have learned how to patiently, almost perfectly complete a task given to me. I have had the honor of teaching others to frame and have had the chance to bring smiles to the faces of soldiers and their families.I love what I do at the Frame Shop. Even though I could be interning elsewhere I am glad I chose to volunteer at the Frame shop- even through all the paper cuts.
TheFreeMason11 6 / 54 Dec 30, 2010 #2Your essay has some mistakes. Read it out loud and you'll catch most of them. Other than that, I really like this essay. Shows a good volunteer activity that is unique, just work on the wording.Example:I have learned to be cautionscautious . I have learned how to bepatientlypatientBest of luck!
moealrob 3 / 13 Dec 30, 2010 #4I could be interning elsewhere, I am glad I chose to volunteer at the Frame shop- even through all the paper cuts.Nice essay, the same as TheFreeMason11 try to find your grammar mistakes.i would really appreciate it if you check out my essay please.
