Dear Roommate,
I am a morning person.
This is one of the first things that I tell people if I will be living with them. Now, I have only lived with a roommate a few times, just the typical camp cabins and college visits, but when I do I never fail to tell her that I am an early riser. I tell people this for two reasons. The first being my hope that if I tell them in advance, they won't be too surprised to find that I have already gotten ready for the day before they are even awake. The second reason I tell you this is because I feel like this early rising habit has completely shaped my outlook on life as well as who I am as a person today. I like to think that the early morning is the simplest time of day. Imagine waking up to no distractions, no interferences, nothing to disconnect you from the natural world. You can see your surroundings without any influence from people. Seeing the sunrise, listening to the world stir as it begins to awake, feeling the crisp morning air, the sensation of cool fresh dew touching the bottoms of your feet. From this perspective, the world is uncomplicated. There is no homework to worry about, no traffic to sit through, and no place to be other than in the present. Once the day begins and the sounds change from birds chirping to cars speeding down the street, as I'm sure happens fairly quickly in Boston. The sights change from the sun slowly creeping over the horizon to people hustling on the sidewalks trying to get to their next endpoint. Once the morning glory fades, I can quickly snap back into the daily swing of things and remember what the day has in store for me. However, despite the position of the sun in the sky, I always try to live in the moment and not let things pass me by. Just from waking up a few hours earlier, I gain a sense of positivity that I continue to use it throughout my day. So, I apologize in advance if I accidentally wake you up at an ungodly hour, but I hope that one day you will wake up with me, to see the world from my point of view.
Is all of my grammar/punctuation correct? How is the letter itself? I know a lot of these types of essays list a whole bunch of stuff, but I didn't really want to go that route. Harvard is definitely a stretch for me and I'm not sure that this would necessarily help my chances, but do you think it would hurt my chances? I know I should write about something truly amazing, but I really want to get this application sent!
That was very good! If you want your essay to be the thing that gets you in, I think you should as you said, 'write about something truly amazing' but this is pretty good, too! If you have time, try reading other essays (not necessarily the same prompt) and try learning from them, or finding a theme/ main idea that you like.
But this definitely wouldn't hurt your chances. You seem like a decent writer- care to take a look at my essay?
Thanks
