Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
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Where do I come from? Even now, I have trouble answering that question. The world I come from can be described as a whirlwind of family, emotion, love, respect, and culture. I've always believed that the environment is what determines and shapes one's personalities and qualities, both good and bad. The influence my family has had on me provided the foundation to my life and has shaped me into the teenager I am today and the man I will become.
My world, my environment-made up of the family and friends that love me and care for me-has shaped me into who I am today and what I might become in the future. Even though my mom used to get angry with me very often, she always did it for my good. Whenever I watched TV or chatted with friends online without completing my homework, my mother would tell me to do my homework first then do other things. Slowly, I rebelled less and I would finish what's most important first without anyone telling me to do so. My dad has also had a great impact on me. He is one of the most hardworking, diligent people I've ever met, always working with one thing in mind: to support our family. My family is a low income family and, of course, times have been harsh where we had to cut down on certain luxuries but even during those times we were happy. My parents taught me to be hardworking, diligent, tolerant, and patient. With the help of these qualities that I now possess, I will continue to pursue my dream and down the career pathway linking me and who I strive to become.
But this ultimately leads to the question: Sure I can talk the talk about achieving my dreams and aspirations, but can I walk the walk? In essence, school teaches us worthwhile concepts and how to talk the talk. But that isn't enough. Somewhere in between graduating and achieving success in a fulfilling job, we need to learn to walk the walk. My passion for business and all of its characteristics was triggered as soon as I started working at my dad's café my freshman year, and I work there to this day. With my new register/waiter positions came new responsibilities and my dad's high expectations. Not only did I get proficient with handling money and balancing trays, but I also progressively learned about the various functions "behind the scenes" that kept the café thriving: managing employees, balancing money, marketing assorted menu items, and bringing new, innovative ideas to the table. Not to mention, I learned how to cook the most scrumptious omelet I have ever tasted!
There is nothing like the thrill of seeing the satisfaction on customers' faces when they take that first bite, or counting up the money earned at the end of each day, to light the fire under an aspiring businessman like myself. But simply being a lucrative top executive isn't enough for me. I need to feel that my work has the potential to have an impact on the way people live. My aim is to start putting to work the body of information I acquired in high school and college so that I can apply my knowledge to essential business innovations and make leaps and bounds in the corporate world.
However, as each day passes by, I hear it again and again. I hear the criticism; I hear the degrading remarks; I hear the negative feedback. Many people tell me that I have no skills and that my life is a waste. Others tell me that I am an over-achiever; they tell me that I will never accomplish my goals. They set limitations on my life, but I am out to prove these skeptics wrong. I hold in my hands the vision of my future, and there's not a soul on this earth who can take that away from me. But now the questions must be addressed. How do I know the vision I have for myself will become reality? How can I be so positive that things will go as expected?
Preparation is clearly one of the most important fundamentals of making a vision come alive. Preparation is simply identifying what is needed in reaching that goal. I know that in order to achieve my goals, I must first figure out a way to accomplish them. Once I have prepared, and learned what I must do in order to achieve, I must execute; I must go and do exactly what I prepared for. The third fundamental that is essential in turning a vision, my vision, into reality is the ability to overcome obstacles. Obstacles are there for our strength and growth, and every successful person has had to overcome obstacles. I know that obstacles will come, yet I have made the decision to not let them get in the way of my vision. I recognize obstacles will stand in my way, and to the extent that I can overcome these obstacles my vision will become a reality.
At seventeen years, I am armed and ready for the next challenges in my life, and am posed to rid any self-doubts. My eyes are open; my windshield has been defrosted. I no longer compare myself to others, but to the expectations I harbor within me. My heart beats with strength and vigor. I look forward to each new day and making the most of the many opportunities that I have been granted. I have a vision and I have a plan. I know that through preparation, execution, and overcoming obstacles I can turn my vision to reality. The ancient Chinese proverb puts it best, "The poorest man is not he without a cent; it is he without a vision."