be careful about this topic. you really don't wanna put too many radical statements cuz it's politics.
and I had nothing else to do,
and I had free time? nothing to do makes you sound like a really boring person
they are created and if they are created by society, we, as part of society have a role in their creation.
you mentioned the same thing in your second paragraph, but what proof do you half? It's really dangerous to just spur out these big theories if you don't have any backup. remember, this in itself is very controversial, and the admin might just discard it for its dangerous pessimism.
again, how did this impact you? I can talk about poverty all i want (that's the topic i chose for this), and how poverty isn't just money, but also deals mental stuff, but SO? it's great that the reader gets that you have insights on terrorism, but the reader learns nothing about you except that you excuse the twisted minds of terrorists with the fact that the society is evil
I began to think of his transformation from innocence to brutality
Do you know his life? If not, then how can you say that? I can simply be a crazy maniac and kill people for NO reason, yet wasn't I born an "innocent baby"?
the prose is good, but the idea is very very controversial and should be avoided or else you are going to offend the admin. I have particular trouble with:
The problem is not the terrorists; it is "us", the society that breeds these villains.
even it might sound logical to you, without explanation or solution, you are purely criticizing the society and say that it's the people's fault that they get bombed by some crazy maniac.