a.We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)100 words or fewer
I like to watch videos on MIT OPEN COURSE WARE and take courses on coursea.org in my free time. I usually watch few videos and make my own slides and take notes.I have always learned a great deal from these lectures, and got unique perspective about the subjects,Since I come from financially challenged background I couldn't afford to appear for extra A level subject exam so took advantage of these rich sources. In the time span of two years I studied many courses like economics, sociology,mathematical thinking,astronomy and many more, every time I get bored I just go on-line get a course and just after few mouse clicks kick start wisdom filled videos.
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critique this one pls
I come from a financially..
A level subject exam so I took advantage..
Also, you make punctuation errors, be careful..and I would shorten the last sentence..put a full stop after "many more".
Since I come from a financially challenged background I couldn't afford to appear for extra A level subject exam so I took advantage of these rich sources.
i dont get what you mean by appear for
I just go on-line get a course --> this has 2 verbs: go and get but no link
last sentence is a bit weird
maybe you can say Everytime I get bored, I enter my own imaginary lecture hall with just a few clicks, hoping that one day, I will be able to sit inside a real lecture hall.
I think you should talk more about your pleasure of watching the open courses. Like your curiosity is satisfied. This tells the admission officer more about your personality. And it will make the short answer more impressive.
My Imaginary lecture halls are my safe havens.These are nothing but MIT Open COURSE WARE and coursea.org video lectures.After hectic school work and homework I venture into these wisdom filled motion pictures,that thrills my curiosity and make me carve to get into physical MIT CLASSES.since I always wanted to study extra A level subjects, but couldn't afford to do so, watching these video lectures on different range of subjects satisfy my curiosity of obtaining deep erudition in range of subjects.Hence,every time I get bored, I enter my own imaginary lecture hall with just a few clicks, hoping that one day, I will be able to sit inside a real lecture hall.
how is it now ?
make sure you emphasize "the pleasure". it sounds a little mechanical the way you describe it
you should put some more emotion and not just tell the person what you've been doing..it's a bit bland.
Hi every body! i'm a new member, but i like this topic and what you said above, just like you, my hobby is reading book, learning english .And some of topic i want to expose is develop personal, financial, convint, marketing, selling, leadership, managerment. If you were like me, i have the good information for you! the good way to improve your english and your knowledge about what you love at the same time!
That's best thing i know when i watched video" 5 steps to speak a new language" author by Pham Quang Hung, in this fill, he told me a lot, for example: to speak and hear well, you ought to learn core words, in English is appropriate 3000 words, and learn by the measure Massive input, means you read a lot of books in what fill you love in target language with the help of dictionary name" Click n see" just read and if you you meet a new word, use that dictionary click and see the meaning, and continue reading, remember that don't try to remember any word, the concept here is the commond word will be replay again and again, after you read many, many paper, many book, you will remember core word, phrase, grammar structure automatic, and your knowleadge also bettter! you will never fell boring.
In next essay, i will tell you more about the way to speaking and listening well just like native speaker
i'm writing here just aid to practice my writing skill, and i don't want to slow down your progess in learning english, if you impressed by that idea, you can seach on youtube with title above,
see you next time and thankyou for your attention!
