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WELLESLEY 100 essay: A Hugely Ambitious Sisterhood


ki182 1 / 2  
Mar 1, 2016   #1
PROMPT: When choosing a college community, you are choosing a place where you believe that you can live, learn, and flourish. Generations of inspiring women have thrived in the Wellesley community, and we want to know what aspects of this community inspire you to consider Wellesley. We know that there are more than 100 reasons to choose Wellesley, but the ''Wellesley 100'' is a good place to start. Visit wellesley.edu/admission/100 and let us know, in two well-developed paragraphs, which two items most attract, inspire, or energize you and why. (p.s. ''Why'' matters to us.)

One of the most admirable aspects of Wellesley College is that hugely ambitious projects are not only encouraged by the institution, but are assisted and funded by Wellesley. Ever since I was a child, I have been told that my dreams are unrealistically ambitious. When I wanted to try out for the softball team in seventh grade despite only having a strong passion and no experience, my parents told me I would never make the team, but I did. When I told my friends that I wanted to read eight novels in a week, they told me that it would be impossible, but I did it. These are some of the more triumphant moments -- I have most likely failed more times than I have succeeded. While these are minuscule ambitions and achievements compared to large-scale research projects or service trips, I realized through these experiences how much easier and motivating it would be to have an encouraging community supporting my goals. As a person who has had countless insane dreams and will have many more in the future, I find the supportive community at Wellesley incredibly attractive and inspiring.


A sisterhood is one of the purest forms of a supportive community. The mere thought of being a part of the Wellesley sisterhood -- being surrounded by powerful, intellectual, compassionate women -- is extremely exciting. I initially entered college longing for a strong sense of community and support, but unfortunately did not find it. I know that at Wellesley I will find what I have eagerly been searching and hoping for. Women having each other's backs is some of the strongest and most important relationships I could have throughout my life. I appreciate how highly Wellesley regards these relationships because in order to truly achieve my goals, whether they be simple and modest or hugely ambitious, I need a community that has my back, as I have theirs. I believe that through this sisterhood, I will not only make lifelong connections, but I will grow immensely as a person and stronger as a woman.
Ssakshijain 28 / 146 87  
Mar 1, 2016   #2
Hi Kiana, I also went through the link you provided. For your first paragraph, you chose ambitious high projects but its of no use until or unless you don't mention your goal/dream here. What you said was general that they fund and assist. But if you check the link, the three women had a dream and with their hard work and with the help of college, they were able to fulfill it. But whats your impossible dream that made you chose this college? And made you chose this quality? I could not see any inspiration in your first paragraph. Reading novels and soft ball might be big at that time but now you are looking into a bigger picture. Mention the dream, your victories in the past will not make your essay good rather will eat up your word limit.

Second paragraph is good, but which quality from the link are you referring to here? Can you give me the number, so that I can go through the link and your answer.
OP ki182 1 / 2  
Mar 1, 2016   #3
Hi, thank you so much for your feedback! I do have a highly ambitious project I want to pursue (it might be kind of stupid but I would like to start an art/film collective where we make films/student films that puts an emphasis on all female and/or PoC cast, crew, etc. Kind of just to have more representation in art/media. And I was thinking about how with film, the software and equiptment isn't always acceI just feel like it's super inferior to research projects and service trips, which is why I didn't really incorporate it, but I think I will include it).

For the second paragraph, I was referring to number 13, "the way in which we have your back".
OP ki182 1 / 2  
Mar 1, 2016   #4
Okay, I edited the first paragraph and added this:

One project I have always hoped to be a part of is an art and film collective where different mediums of art created by women and people of color are appreciated. However, art can be an expensive passion to pursue, with the several equipment, supplies, and training they require. Many women and people of color not only lack the funds to pursue art, but can also feel discouraged with the severe underrepresentation of this demographic in art and film. At Wellesley, I believe that I will be able to start such a collective with the support of the institution and fellow students.


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