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The wind turbine machine and its optimal location; Process Diagram for IELTS Task 1


broerjuang 5 / 6 1  
Sep 16, 2015   #1
Given the diagrams that illustrate a wind machine for generating electricity and the optimum location where it can be placed. In general, while the wind turbine can employ the renewable energy that seems straightforward, its installation area can make a huge difference related to electricity output.

The turbine machine consists of steel tower, wind sensor, power generator, and three blades; which can be made either from fiberglass or wood. In the first stage of the process, the wind hits and rotates the blades. Following this, the machine's sensor detects wind's velocity and direction, meanwhile, it activates the generator for producing the electricity. Finally, the sensor sends real-time data to the computer for further adjustment of the blade's angle and direction in order to optimize the power generated by the machine.

There are three possible machine locations which all are dependent on the strength of the wind. Hill side has the most optimum power which turbine can generate, and it can foster the electricity until 15,000 kilowatts. In contrast, the machine located in domestic area can only produce 100 kilowatts, which is 150 times lower than the first location. In between, the unspoiled location can produce the moderate amount power because of the medium strength of wind that it can acquire.




irfan727 49 / 68 29  
Sep 16, 2015   #2
Hello,, I'm Irfan Ardian, Let me give some corrections
which can be made either from fiberglass or wood
please check your spelling
which can be made either from fibreglass or wood

Following this, the machine's sensor detects wind's velocity and direction, meanwhile, it activates the ...
i guess u have to put dot before "meanwhile", to make it clear meaning.
so become like this :
Following this, the machine's sensor detects wind's velocity and direction. Meanwhile, it activates the ...

Based on the figure, we know if written 1.5 megawatts which is same with 1,500 kilowatts
and it can foster the electricity until 15,000 kilowatts. 1,500 kilowatts
which is 150 times lower than the first location
that become :
which is 15 times lower than the first location

overall, i reckon your writing is great even you use punctuation.

thanks



justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Sep 17, 2015   #3
- Given are the diagrams that...

- ...generator, and three blades;( the punctuation marks on this phrases is not necessary ) which...

- There are three possible machine locations which all are all dependent...
- ...power whichwere turbines can generate, and...
- In contrastOn the contrary , the machine located...
- ...in domestic areas can only produce 100 kilowatts,
- In between this locations , the unspoiled locationareas can produce...
- ...the moderate amount power of because of the medium strength of wind that it can acquire.

The diagrams are illustrated very well in your essay, however you have to be careful with your grammar and the proper input of the words in your sentences.


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