Hi, Yvette. I'll give you a few suggestions on how to shorten your piece:--------------------
Memories from my childhood lay within the smaller part of Burnet, Texas, a tiny run-down neighborhood consisting of old dingy homes and lifeless plants seem quite depressing.
Suggestion:
My childhood was spent in Burnet, Texas, a tiny
, run-down
, depressing neighborhood consisting of
old dingy homes and lifeless plants
seem quite depressing .
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Lacking diversity, one would find only Hispanics within the area.
Suggestion:
The area lacked diversity; only Hispanics lived there.-----------------------
Some people often refer my neighborhood as "ghetto" or one of those bad neighborhoods you would not let your child walk alone in. I can somewhat agree, but I personally believe it just needs improvement much like other things in this world.
Suggestion: Some
people often refer my neighborhood as "ghetto"
or one of those bad neighborhoods you would not let your child walk alone in . I can somewhat agree, but I
personally believe it just needs improvement much like other things in this world.
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Most children, as well as teenagers in my neighborhood, tend to follow in their parents' footsteps of not finding education important.
Suggestion: Most children
, as well as teenagers in my neighborhood
, tend to follow in their parents' footsteps
,of not finding education important.
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I hope this has helped you a little!