Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.
To my future roommate,
I don't think there are words to describe how thrilled I am to attend Stanford University and I'm sure you feel the same way. We've worked so hard and our efforts got us this far! Can you believe it? College is about preparing for our future as well as having fun, so let's make the best of the four years we have together. I pledge to be the best roommate and friend I can be. I will be a good roommate because I have experience in all kinds of living situations. I've lived in an apartment with a stranger who turned out to be a crazy cat lady as well as my friend's house where I had to share a bathroom with my two "sisters." Wherever I go and whatever the situation, I can adjust well. My mom was a housekeeper who taught me all the tricks and essential skills I need for a life on my own so I will keep our new home clean. I am a great sharer so feel free to borrow my clothes or makeup. The only thing I don't share is my toothbrush. I feel the need to establish this because my "sister" used my toothbrush all the time. If you respect that rule, then I'm sure we'll get along just fine. I'm an easygoing, friendly, and flexible person who rarely gets angry. I love to make people laugh and my friends tell me I am hilarious. I like to help people out and I wish I got to volunteer at our local hospital, but I never got the opportunity so I would love to volunteer or intern at the Stanford Hospital. In my free time, I like to cook (even though I'm not great at it) and go hiking. I am adventurous so I like to get outside and explore new places. I am planning on joining one of Stanford's outdoors clubs where I hope I can one day go whitewater rafting or horseback riding. I love my life and I plan on living it to the fullest each and every day during college. I may not be the typical, uptight academic student obsessed with their grades, but I work hard and nap hard. I very much look forward to meeting you!
p.s. if we see a bug in our room, you're killing it.
What do you think of my essay?
The italicized parts are phrases that sound weird to me so please tell me if I am using the right grammar!
crazy cat lady, ...
skills i need for a life on my own, ...
I like to help people out, and I wish I got to volunteer at our local hospital, but I never got the opportunity, so I would love to volunteer or intern at the Stanford Hospital.i personally think you should just take this section out because It seems like your making excuses. Express you love of helping in a different way.
In my free time I like to cook
I also do not recommend starting most sentences with I. It would be helpful and easier to read if you changed the sentence structure a bit