"work at wegmans" - work exprience..common app..150 words

Being sheltered and having to go from one private school to another did not give me much of a social life. I am and always have been shy. And so my first week of work at wegmans did not go very well. As a cahier, I would have to greet and converse with people on a daily bases. The ability to talk to strangers did not come naturally for me. Their were times where I would stutter or lose my train of thought when a customer asked me a question. After a year of working with the best people I've ever met, I felt like a new and transformed person. I was loud, talkative and I really got to enjoy meeting new people everyday.

this is for my common app..it has to be about 150 words of work exprience..please give me any feed back.

Use a basic spell check software, you're got a bunch of typos.
"Being sheltered and having to go from one private school to another did not give me much of a social life. I am and always have been shy."- KIND OF weak beginning. Try to start with a bang, not with a weak word like 'being.'

I think you need to capitalize 'wegmans'.
"on a daily basesbasis "
"The ability to talk to strangers did not come naturally for me. ": you only have 150 words, and this wastes it. Use the active voice, like 'I could not naturally talk to strangers.'... also this is redundant, understood when you said you are shy.

"After a year of working with the best people I've ever met, I felt like a new and transformed person.": Completely a matter of style, but I'd say go for drama here. And that's achieved by conciseness. Try:"A year of working transformed me; I know am loud, talkative..."

You don't talk about the net gain for you from thins experience. ou became more outgoing, but I think your concluding sentence should talk about how being an outgoing person has affected you.

Good luck:)

ok, i did feel like i was being repetitive.."The ability to talk to strangers did not come naturally for me. "- i will discard that.

I dont how to explain being a cashier and still make it less boring

Thank you so much. If you have anything else, please dont be afraid to add.