Describe the world you come from ― for example, your family, community or school ― and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
A blank piece of paper will represent my world. I draw a stick man who will represent myself. I start writing significant things in my life and I draw a line between them; my world is full with connections. The connections I have with people, my community and this earth itself. The connections I built shape my dreams which is marketing, law and fashion and, color my world with numerous colors.
The connections I evolved with people are like lands in my world; they are different and necessary. Every one of them affected my life in someway but some of them shaped my dreams and aspirations more than other people such as my father and my boss at a company I work for. My father explained to me how marketing is the basic of every business. He teaches me marketing skills such as branding when we are just shopping. Even if marketing is back office job and not a glamorous job, he helped me to discover marketing as my fascination.
My boss at a company where I am interning recently shaped my dream as well. I work at the Business Development/ Marketing Department at a law firm called Baker&Mckenzie. She is the who one who connected me with a new field of business; legal marketing. Many people do not connect some businesses with marketing such as law firms and hospitals but she taught me how marketing and law are necessities for every business in this world and it is also a creative side of business. Also working at Baker&Mckenize effected me to want to work in an international firm more because it is not male domination comparing to Japanese firms. I am not sure how many people I met in 19 years of my life but all of them influenced me and I find the connections I have with people are priceless.
The connection I make with my community is like an ocean in my world; it is deep and different. I am from an International school community. Like ocean waves have different sizes and shapes,my community are diverse in races, religion and backgrounds. we all strive to be different individually yet function together as a group. My life changed the moment I entered to an International school. It helped me to spot what I want to value in this world and that is diversity. It expanded my outlook on life and I can proclaim that I would not be who I am now if I did not attend International School; it is my basis. I believe that it helped me to grow as a person. It developed various perspectives about history, culture and traditions. I can see histories as third person, I can adapt different ways of greeting people such as I bow for my Japanese teacher but shake hands with my English teacher and I understand about Ramadan and other Islamic beliefs. I believe that diversity does not only mean people with different nationalities but to have your own character and be original. To be unique, to have your own opinion and to be yourself make this world diverse.This is why I want to work in an International firm. I want to use my bilingual skills, share different perspectives and prove how diversity makes this world extremely entertaining.
A colorful piece of paper will represent my world and it is filled in with various colors. I am still missing some but I am going to add those colors from now on. There are countless people who shaped my dreams. However, not only the people I have met, everything in every moment is somehow influencing my life. My dreams, aspirations and my world is never-ending and beyond imagination. I can turn anything into something I never imaged and I am going to keep initiating connections with numerous people to help this world become amusing.
English is my second language so I am sure that there are so many grammar mistakes and I feel like it's too long so if you find something unnecessary, please tell me!
Thank you!
I like stick man instead of stick figure. It is cool to say stick man. The intro has a strange rhythm, and I like it!
I think "myself" is supposed to be "me" if you want to be grammatically correct, but your way sounds better and is okay, I think.
my life in someway some way but some of them
I can see histories as third person from an objective point of view, I can adapt different ways of greeting people such as I bow for my Japanese teacher but shake hands with my English teacher, and I understand...
My dreams, my aspirations, and my world is are never-ending and beyond imagination. I can turn anything into something I never imaged, and I am going to keep initiating connections with numerous people to help this world become amusing.
Oh, yeah... I see that the end lacks focus. What is the one message you want the reader to remember? That is most important. The reader is not a genius, not able to remember every idea from the essay... at the end, reinforce the main idea. Meaningful connections as you network in the world... connections in the field of marketing... specific goals for the first year you will spend at this school... Reinforce the most important message or messages.
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