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Write an essay about someone different from yourself who has made an impact on your life?(My friend)

michelle1234 1 / -  
Dec 7, 2017   #1

Answering questions about a specific person

Instructions : Write an essay about someone different from yourself who has made an impact on your life. It can be a positive or negative relationship. Answer the following questions within the essay. The essay should be in narrative format as if you are telling a story to a friend. The final essay should be 2-4 pages long.

1. How did you meet this person?
2. How is this person different from you?
3. What did you learn from this person?
4. What does this person mean to you?
My essay right now: I'm having trouble answering #4 because the professor is so picky as to hoow your describing the person. any ideas? I need to elaborate more on the essay aswell but im stuck, help!!?

Throughout life I have met quite a lot of people that have impacted me in many different ways , both negative and positive. I have to say positive impacts have stuck with me the most. People will come and go but the ones that stay, well they stay and help you mold your life into the perfect sculpture of art. We run into these people and they change our views on life for the better. My friend, Maria is the person who has impacted me in the most positive ways throughout our friendship. She has been there to support me in my many decisions, whether they were smart or foolish ones. It is due to my friend that I am the ambitious, responsible, and respectful person that I am today.

Maria and I have been friends since grade school. We had the same elementary school teachers so since then we started hanging out and talking. I later found out that she lived in some apartments around the corner from mine, which brought us to be closer friends. Our friendship went throughout every school year , since we lived in the same neighborhood till this day, we went to the same school from elementary to high school, and even still go to the same college today. Although we're best friends and have grown up toether we are totally different people.

Different is defined as not alike or not being the same as each other, well we are just that. Maria is different personality wise, she's very out going , out spoken, isn't afraid to open up or talk to people about problems. Whereas I'm the total opposite of her, I'm very reserved, quiet, and totally shy when it comes to talking to people I don't know. Together we balance each other out. She has thought many tactics as to not being shy.

Growing up with this particular person has been a roller coaster. I have learned so much from her. Meaning I have learned how to be more out there. In regards to speaking out, I was always the one who just sat there very shy however she has thought me how to become more pen minded towards things and be less timid.

My friend Maria means

People come in and out of my life all the time. Those who impacted me in a positive or negative way were sent my way for a reason. They shaped how I am today and in a way have impacted how I have turned out to be.
TheMistyMolly 1 / 4 1  
Dec 7, 2017   #2
I suggest saying that Maria means a lot to you because she it a reliable friend (you have known her for years) and that she has opened your perspective to different ways of living life (and you have learned from those other aspects (example; not being as shy)). Explain how she has made you into a better person and how she has changed your life for the better.

Also, I would expand more on the differences between you two. Explain how she has leaned from you and maybe give examples on how she has taught you to not be she. Right now it is a bit vague.

Little BTW: the sentence "She has thought many tactics as to not being shy." seems to be missing the word me and you mean to use the word taught. (She has taught me many tactics on how to not be shy)
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 11,978 3867  
Dec 7, 2017   #3
michelle , you have to explain about what you learned from Maria in a deeper manner. You say that you learned so much from her, and yet do not offer any examples of experiences that would support this claim. While the essay is supposed to be a narrative, it would be helped by references to specific times in your life / friendship with Maria that could help to illustrate your narrative. Don't just keep on telling the reader, you must balance the showing with the telling. Stories of how you learned things from her or adventures that the two of you had that showcase how different the two of you are and yet you still consider each other a friend would help to increase the interest in the essay. If you can illustrate the story with examples, you will slowly come to realize what Maria means to you in the sense of being a friend, a classmate, and a neighbor. Those are the considerations that can help you analyze not only what Maria means to you, but what your friendship with her also signifies.
kukas90 3 / 4  
Dec 10, 2017   #4
Hi ! I think the essay would be more insightful if you could share some distinguished case or a life-changing story between you and Maria to show how Maria gave positive impact in your life or how you learn particular things from Maria to be a better person.

Best luck!
brucedeniger - / 4  
Dec 12, 2017   #5
I have met a person , a year before at my college.At the beginning we were not even talking with each other, but now there is not a day that we don't talk. We became very close within in a shot span of time. Still i don't remember exactly like how and when we started talking each other.We actually started talking by teasing one another, and we still do the same. We never miss any chance to tease each other.My friend is actually just opposite of me, like she is very sensitive, while I am not.Now even she become smart and is not sensitive anymore.
Michell20 4 / 10 3  
Dec 12, 2017   #6
Hi Michelle, overall I think your essay just lacks of some depth.
First of all, why is your essay so short? The prompt says that the final essay must be 2-4 pages long, which is perfect for you since you still have a lot to talk about. The reader needs to know what is so special about Maria that you decided to use her on your essay. Tell your story, which kind of experiences have you lived with her that changed you. A cliché reccomendation for writing a college essay is "show, don´t tell" and I strongly believe that´s what you need on your essay. Good luck!

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