Where did you post the essay before? I can't find the other version of it. If it is on EssayForum I would like to move it to this thread so we stay organized.
Figured it must be extra terrible if no one wanted to help,
Nah, that is not why. Things have been very busy for a few months, and we could not keep up with all the essays. If you want a lot of people to help, go help with THEIR essays and ask them to return the favor.
Stephen King likens writing to a form of telepathy
, and I'm completely invested in this idea.----He also recommends Strunk and White, who in turn recommend using a comma with a compound sentence. :-)
If you share this idea of writing as telepathy, you need to explain it a little like he did. A blue bunny with a number eight... my writing transmits an idea across space and time. Any time you introduce a concept, complete it for the reader instead of leaving questions raised but unanswered.
See this? was belittled by straight and gay communities because of my sexuality. --This is another point you raised but left unexplored. If you introduce an idea to the reader, give a full brush stroke onto the canvas... and explore it a little. One paragraph = one idea.
I suggest moving that short last paragraph up to merge it with the short intro paragraph, and then make a theme: I used writing as telepathy when my self-expression was thwarted by anxiety.
:-) Whether you know it or not, you are a great writer already... the premise of this essay is emotionally powerful, and that is what is most important.
Use a hyphen: four year-old