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'writing lists' - one thing that I love doing for absolutely no reason


flutenerd 7 / 19  
Dec 25, 2011   #1
Suggestions please?

Prompt: We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (100 words or fewer)

The one thing that I love doing for absolutely no reason is writing lists. As strange as it sounds, writing just about any type of list relieves a lot of stress. When I write to-do lists, everything I can cross off makes me feel accomplished and ready to move ahead. My favorite kinds of list to write, though, are the lists of things I want to do for enjoyment, the most recent being of the things I want to do over winter break. While they probably won't all happen, adding to the list gives me a temporary escape from reality into a dream world, while at the same time helping me to feel in control.

desm2012 6 / 36  
Dec 25, 2011   #2
OMG. This is me!!! You are 15 words over the limit, so you should try condensing little things-
"relieves a lot of stress" to "relaxes me"
"everything I can cross off" to "everything I cross off"

"My favorite kinds of list to write, though, are the lists of things I want to do for enjoyment, the most recent being of the things I want to do over winter break."

My favorite kinds of lists to make, though, are the list of things I want to do-- the most recent being of things to do over winter break.

While they probably won't all happen, adding to this list gives me a temporary escape to a dream world.

I feel like the last sentence needs more panache.

Good luck, I love this!
desm2012 6 / 36  
Dec 25, 2011   #3
It sounds good. You still need to fix that "My favorite kinds of list to write" thing though. It should be "My favorite kinds of lists to write"

I think it sounds great except for the second phrase of your last sentence. It still doesn't sound complete to me.

Would you mind reading my EC one?
OP flutenerd 7 / 19  
Dec 25, 2011   #4
So maybe like this? "While they probably won't all happen, adding to the list gives me a temporary escape into a dream world where I can do anything and be anyone." Or what kind of thing were you thinking I should add?

And sure, I'll take a look at that!
desm2012 6 / 36  
Dec 25, 2011   #5
Yeah, something like that is perfect. Thanks!
lambo448 1 / 2  
Dec 25, 2011   #6
This is great! So original! I would take a look at the sentence "My favorite kinds of list to write, though, are the lists of things I want to do for enjoyment," Instead, i would replace " My favorite kinds of list to write" to "However, my most favorite kind of list to write are lists of things i want to do for enjoyment." Otherwise stellar mini essay!
OP flutenerd 7 / 19  
Dec 25, 2011   #7
Shoot, just realized I'm 7 words over the limit. Any ideas? Or do you think that will matter?
desm2012 6 / 36  
Dec 25, 2011   #8
I'm not sure. You should put it into Common App and check to see if it's truncated. I'm not sure how exact their word counter is.
OP flutenerd 7 / 19  
Dec 25, 2011   #9
Okay nevermind. It's actually for the MIT app, not Common App, but I previewed it as a PDF and it worked fine. Thanks for your help!


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