Yale only gives 500 characters for this. :( I just don't know if I'm able to get across everything I love about Yale in such limited space. I'm not sure if what I have written so far would suffice. Feedback would be greatly appreciated!
What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply? Please limit your response to the space provided.
Not only does Yale hold a legacy of more than three hundred years, but also holds its place in modern times with its world-renowned facilities and award-winning faculty. The school has everything I want: castle-like buildings, a library with an extensive collection of books, emergency phone booths every few blocks, an atmosphere of intellectual excellence, and amazing residential colleges. Everything about this school: its academics, its campus, and its body of residents, resonates excellence.
I can see that you are being very honest here, yet I still smell something superficial...o.Oa
Because I'm talking about how great the school is? =/ I feel anything that praises how great a school is seems somewhat superficial. :(
Okay, even though my why essay is very very superficial, your prompt needs to be a little more creative to cater to Yale if that makes sense. There are sooo many schools with award-winning faculty, world-renowned facilities, castle-like buildings, a library with an extensive collection of books, etc. Why would you choose Yale over those schools?
Hmm, I think you might want to consider talking more specific things about Yale (academic, school culture, geographical location, etc) instead of the general things (which makes it sound superficial)..
mmh, I'll try to rewrite it by targeting one or two things instead of all these things. It's just that there's so much about Yale that I love. haha.
Thanks for your feedback! I'll try to post a new one tomorrow.