To my future roommate,
I am looking forward to spending our youthful and critical college years with each other. But before we commence our journey, get to know me well. I lived a life different from those of my peers, under the burden of autism. However, this difference has helped shape my distinct character traits. My difficulties in verbal communication have helped me find other ways to connect to people in a positive manner by helping them. I may occasionally stutter during our daily conversations and misplace miscellaneous objects such as socks, but I am very cooperative and will gladly support you in academics and communicate with you during free time. I am as accommodating as the numerous soaring palm trees that line the quads with their abundance of shade during the summer, and as temperate as the Mediterranean climate that characterizes the typical weather at the university. I will take the time to understand your wants and needs, and will help smoothen the rough edges of your college experience. I am willing to help you with the academic challenges of college; I have already gained experience by taking a college course at Stanford and am aware of the rigor. Since childhood, I have had more obstacles in communicating with people than others, but through hard work and persistence, I have overcome them. The students who are accepted into Stanford are the ones who truly put their effort like I did into transcending complexity and help elevate expectations for everyone. On that note, I congratulate you for your distinguished efforts in the field of your interest. Our meeting will be the first of the many relationships that will be made in college, and I hope that the mutual understanding and trust established between the two of us will culminate into a healthy and lifelong friendship.
Please give genuine and useful feedback on my response. Thanks.
It makes me wanna be your roommate! It's personal and the sentence and ideas flow together... I wish I could help, but I don't seem to find any weaknesses in your essay, but I'll let you know! Nice metaphor by the way with the palm trees and the Mediterranean climate. :)
This is such a strong essay! I don't know that you would want or need to revisit any part of this essay. Awesome job!
This letter is beautiful! And to be honest, I don't think you should change a thing! Best of luck! I'm applying to Stanford too!
I also agree that I can't see anything wrong with this! Honestly. I don't think you need to change anything, and I would just like to say that you have a truly amazing story, from what I've read. Congratulations!:)