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|High school graduates are encouraged to start working or traveling rather than entering University
5 - Hi Fuad, I was given special permission to come back and respond to your questions. Your reasoning is good....
Writing Feedbackfuad hadi - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 20, 2018
|IELTS writing task 1. Different genres of transport used to commute in a European city.
3 - Hai @sillyman2000 I think that your essay is well-developed. but I want to give few advices, hope it...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 16, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Aug 19, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: A plan for changes to a school site over 20 years.
2 - Moon, you did a good job in discussing the changes that will be forthcoming to the school. Even your...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 19, 2018
|MY random writing to improve writing mainly Grammar and sentence structure
2 - Sunii, as far as creative writing goes, this is a pretty decent written presentation. I can feel your heart...
Writing Feedbacksgc908 - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 19, 2018
|Task 2: Traditional culture with money-making purpose. Discuss both views and give opinion
2 - Linh, your opening paragraph made my head spin. It was so wordy and needlessly complicated that you ended up...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 19, 2018
|Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below
3 - The given line graph illustrates reveals You should remove one of them, because they are both verbs between...
Writing Feedbackphamkhatu - Aug 17, 2018 / fuad hadi - Aug 18, 2018
|The graphs compared Japan and Malaysia in terms of five categories of average family expenses - 2010
3 - Phuc, you have not written enough words to portray a complete analysis of the pie charts. Do not aim...
Writing FeedbackVan Phuc Bui - Aug 17, 2018 / Holt - Aug 18, 2018
|IELTS Writing task 2- Should newcomers follow new country's traditions?
4 - I think your tone is more proper with creative essay, not academic one. And you need to explain deeply...
Writing Feedbackcarolinenguyen18 - Aug 14, 2018 / Linh Dieu - Aug 18, 2018
|Once children start school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social developmen
2 - Hi Bach I find your essay is quite potential about lexicon, but you are lacking detail topic so it...
Writing Feedbackbach53h - Aug 17, 2018 / Linh Dieu - Aug 18, 2018
|Some people prefer to keep on their job while others change it often without much hesitation
3 - Ngo, it appears to me that you were uncertain about how to approach this type of essay writing. I...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Aug 17, 2018 / Holt - Aug 18, 2018
|Vacation or vacations to school children? Discussion essay.
4 - @Shurui and @Holt, thank you for the pieces of insightful advice! I will put those words into practice....
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Aug 16, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 17, 2018
|UK graduates and postgraduates participating in four different kinds of jobs after finishing college
3 - @Minh2903 Paraphrase: number of UK graduates and postgraduates in terms of ( work they did /4 different...
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 16, 2018 / emilakam - Aug 17, 2018
|Plenty of authorities in the world consider economic progress is their first priority. IELTS2
5 - Hi Red Moon Your essay is quite sufficient about both reasoning and structure, but I think when you shift...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Aug 13, 2018 / Linh Dieu - Aug 17, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 - Art education in high school?
3 - Tam, your paper has not properly discussed the prompt requirements. This is an agree or disagree essay that you...
Writing Feedbacktamcsp - Aug 16, 2018 / Holt - Aug 17, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: A BAN ON ALL FORMS OF ADVERTISING? SHOULD OR SHOULD NOT?
4 - Ngo, your prompt paraphrase is not proper. I say that because a properly paraphrased prompt will explain the subject,...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Aug 16, 2018 / Holt - Aug 17, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: number of girls enrolled per 100 boys in different level of school education
3 - One way to limit your word count is to avoid the repetition of information throughout the essay. You often...
Writing Feedbackemilakam - Aug 16, 2018 / Holt - Aug 17, 2018
|Ielts task 1: The population and its birth rate and death rates in an area in the UK.
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 16, 2018 / tamcsp - Aug 16, 2018
|IELTS writing task 1. Survey about suitable age for granting certain rights.
4 - I have some suggestion for your essay: Firstly, the overview seems to be missing, you should conclude more...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 15, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 16, 2018
|IELTS writing task 1 Description of a town centre and making comparsion after a development plan
3 - Here are some of my suggestion: _You should avoid using " a bunch of...", it might sound informal to...
Writing FeedbackJohnNg - Aug 14, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 16, 2018
|The line graph represents the measure of elder people aged 65 and over in USA, Sweden and Japan
3 - Here are some of my suggestions: _"Overall, all three countries demonstrate an upward trend" instead of "..show increasing...
Writing Feedbackemilakam - Jul 29, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 16, 2018
|The rate of males and females in 6 age groups in Australia, who were engaged in physical exercises
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 15, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 16, 2018
|It is better for elder to live with their offsprings rather than in an club for old people
5 - Your essay contained so many grammatical errors as well as weird and unnatural sentences. Therefore I find it really...
Writing Feedbacklozzol - Aug 13, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 15, 2018
|Sports Playing A Role In The Civil Rights Movement
Writing FeedbackNatewoods - Aug 14, 2018 / Holt - Aug 15, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2, "Whether learning a foreign language should be a compulsory subject at school or not?"
4 - Hi. Next time, you need to provide the Task question, as it is unclear whether you were writing a...
Writing Feedbackbunnytiger01 - Aug 13, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 15, 2018
|Ielts writing task 2: why many people still go hungry although the advance made in agriculture
5 - Hi, welcome to the forum! Hope my suggestions could help: First of all, use clear, native expressions. Readers...
Writing Feedbackoanhkieu208 - Aug 14, 2018 / TriceLiu - Aug 15, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1 :The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan
3 - Shao, this is a very good assessment of the two plans that you presented. It is clear and considers...
Writing FeedbackRogerscup - Aug 14, 2018 / Holt - Aug 15, 2018
|IELT Task 2: Building function or exterior design? Which is more important?
2 - you should avoid using "we" and "you" or "us", because, in ielts writing, you have to write in formal...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Aug 14, 2018 / oanhkieu208 - Aug 14, 2018
|The proportion of modern applications' domestic utilization in the UK from 1996 to 2003
3 - Tuong, there are several missing elements in your presentation that you need to address as a part of your...
Writing Feedbacktuongvy - Aug 13, 2018 / Holt - Aug 14, 2018
|Building and its appearances - the exterior look is not so important as usefulness?
Writing Feedbackjalp - Aug 13, 2018 / jalp - Aug 14, 2018
|It is definetely a big challenge for a person to live in a country speaking with foreign language
2 - There are many grammar mistakes in your writing, I think you should pay more attention to those: It...
Writing Feedbackjoyyeh - Aug 14, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 14, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2: High sales is a result of powerful advertising, not real needs of society.
2 - Hi, I have some suggestions for your essay. Overall, your essay is very good and easy to read. Your...
Writing Feedbackdaominhhang - Aug 10, 2018 / Red Moon - Aug 13, 2018
|Ielts, Task2, Countryside or city, Discuss both sides + Opinion
4 - You did very well but ,my from my perspective, there still exist somethings that may exacerbate your essay :...
Writing FeedbackAditya0211 - Aug 11, 2018 / zhongruansg - Aug 13, 2018
|Immigrants deal with a number of undesirable issues when trying to adapt with the new society
2 - Hello @zhongruansg, good to see you I have a few feedbacks, hope that helps 1) Task response: For...
Writing Feedbackzhongruansg - Aug 13, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 13, 2018
|The questions of whether people should be paid excessive wages is controversial issue in the world
2 - Elnur, the way I teach my students to write these essays is to have them avoid writing a comprehensive...
Writing Feedbackelnur uncle - Aug 12, 2018 / Holt - Aug 13, 2018
|IELTS 2 - should teenagers do part-time jobs? Both side of the views and my opinion
3 - Hi Eddy, thanks for your comments. It is true that my opening paragraph is fail to IELTS requirement. ...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 12, 2018 / smally01 - Aug 12, 2018
|It is possible to prevent and solve the problems connected with living in a foreign country
3 - Hi Holt, Thank you so much for your feedback. I will write again and focus on speaking a foreign...
Writing FeedbackNinawj - Aug 11, 2018 / Ninawj - Aug 12, 2018
|IELTS wirting task2 subjects for university students to study
2 - 1. In the first sentence of your opening paragraph, you said you agree with this statement. But in the...
Writing Feedbacknehs311014 - Aug 11, 2018 / TriceLiu - Aug 12, 2018
|ielts writing task 2 - ILLEGAL TO REJECT JOB'S APPLICANTS BASED ON THEIR AGE
3 - @zahranatsir I think that your got the great opening ,however, there are some mistakes in the main paragraphs. 1."On...
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018 / nehs311014 - Aug 11, 2018
|The average amount of Vietnamese people who studied in France, Russia and in the USA (2000 - 2015)
2 - Dang, you have written too many words for this essay. Remember that editing time is required in order to...
Writing Feedbackdesunkid - Aug 10, 2018 / Holt - Aug 11, 2018
|Data of Trenton-Mercer Airport, Paying Passengers in New Jersey.
3 - Hoang, you have to remember that the Task 1 essay has a standard format that you have to follow...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 10, 2018 / Holt - Aug 11, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - posting comments on product or service to the internet, is it good or bad?
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 9, 2018 / smally01 - Aug 10, 2018
|Agriculture development didn't solved the hunger problem over the world
Writing Feedbacknehs311014 - Aug 9, 2018 / nehs311014 - Aug 10, 2018
|Traditional and international music are two forms that are completely different
2 - Hi @HKad2210 For the Introduction, you should state your intention clearly (e.g: Music plays an important roles in the...
Writing FeedbackHKad2210 - Aug 10, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 10, 2018
|Banning of private cars and permitting public vehicles in city centers.
4 - Hello. I think you need to fully understand what the prompt says first, and next time, try to outline...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Aug 8, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 10, 2018
|Writing task 2 IELTS. These days people in some countries are living in a "throw-away" society
3 - You are doing yourself a disservice by not practicing under time constraints. Since you did not write this essay...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 9, 2018 / Holt - Aug 10, 2018
|Many countries spend a lot of money in the arts. Some people think investment in ....IELTS writing
3 - Kevin, you have the body of the essay correct. You used the perfect reference phrases to indicate which side...
Writing Feedbacklovearya - Aug 9, 2018 / Holt - Aug 10, 2018
|The popularity of reading news online means crisis for printed newspapers
4 - @Holt Thank you for all your helpful advice! I will try to use more transitions in my later essays...
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Aug 8, 2018 / TriceLiu - Aug 9, 2018
|Challenging life in a country where we need to communicate via foreign language
4 - @TriceLiu Thank you so much. I will be more careful about the basic rule and the organization of me...
Writing Feedbackkiki94094 - Aug 7, 2018 / kiki94094 - Aug 9, 2018
|(WRITING IELTS TASK 2) Spending too much money on national celebrations. Agree or disagree?
2 - Quyen, you have misunderstood the prompt discussion instruction. You are not being asked for your opinion regarding the need...
Writing Feedbacktuquyen1910 - Aug 8, 2018 / Holt - Aug 9, 2018
|People think wearing stylish clothing is important. Positive or negative development?
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Aug 7, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 9, 2018
|INTRODUCE MY JOB AND FAMILY
3 - you're right, my English is very simple. Thanks for your corrections and recommendations. @jalp The family is something...
Writing Feedbackasepmylocal - Aug 9, 2018 / asepmylocal - Aug 9, 2018
|Study of genetics recently has enormous role in this era - IELTS 2
2 - Intro: paraphrase of the prompt and your opinion. You did not mention your opinion on this. The 'key'...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Aug 6, 2018 / jalp - Aug 8, 2018
|Having Children Later in Life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Aug 7, 2018 / TriceLiu - Aug 8, 2018
|Ielts task 2: should charity organizations only help their citizens or anyone who in need?
5 - Min, in actuality, your essay is considered partially correct in response. It is partially correct and would be scored...
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 7, 2018 / Holt - Aug 8, 2018
|The majority of UK students speak at least one other language in addition to English
3 - Hello @Holt Thank you so much for the feedback. It's extremely helpful and I'm so glad that I found...
Writing Feedbackmsyoshino - Jul 26, 2018 / msyoshino - Aug 7, 2018
|IELTS WRITNG TASK 1: The process of producing coffee and preparing for sale
3 - Moon, you can present a cleaner, concise, and thorough opening summary if you do not separate your statements into...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: The graph shows the information about the UK birth rate from 1973 to 2008.
4 - Thank you all for the details review, I would correct and define my writing based on your feedbacks....
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 6, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 7, 2018
|The downsides of purchasing various products at cheaper prices - Ielts2
3 - Thank you so much for your detailed review, my aim for Writing is around 7.5, but it seems that...
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 6, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 7, 2018
|Writing task 2 IELTS. Rising temperature globally on the Earth
3 - Hoang, this is a direct response essay. So your thesis statement at the end of the 3 paraphrased sentences...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|Writing task 2: economic growth - environment protection
3 - Hi Bui, you failed to address the prompt partially. The better version of the first paragraph would be: ...
Writing Feedbackthuhabk - Aug 6, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 7, 2018
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