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|The number of house husbands has been increasing while some mothers are becoming the breadwinners
2 - Hi, in your first paragraph, I cannot understand what is your main point. It seems to me that you...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Oct 21, 2018 / vietduccan - Oct 22, 2018
|Government should control our lives and cities - IELTS essay!!
3 - Dear @BaoBaoHG, I think you need to include the prompt of this essay so others could give the...
Writing FeedbackBaoBaoHG - Oct 21, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 22, 2018
|Ielts Writing part 2 - As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely ...
2 - Nguyen, actually, you will not get a very low score for this essay, you will automatically get a failing...
Writing FeedbackMaruMaru - Oct 21, 2018 / Holt - Oct 22, 2018
|The place that I recommend in Taiwan
4 - Dear @yiyunm6, In describing a place, we need to encourage readers to feel the same as ours. As...
Writing Feedbackyiyunm6 - Oct 18, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 21, 2018
|Online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus - Ielts2
Writing FeedbackQuyenPham - Oct 19, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 21, 2018
|ANIMAL EXPERIMENT - DISCUSSION AND OPINION ESSAY
2 - @trangmuel your opening paraphrase lacks a reference to the discussion instruction. What you did was give your opinion at...
Writing Feedbacktrangmuel - Oct 20, 2018 / Holt - Oct 21, 2018
|Single sex schools vs mixed schools. Writing task 2 - opinion/argument essay
3 - thanx i will take an account your opinion, i wrote this with samples from worldwide because i was taught...
Writing FeedbackTeymurov - Oct 19, 2018 / Teymurov - Oct 20, 2018
|Writing IELTS task 2 - should we increase the age of retirement?
2 - Nguyen, let's start with the parts of this essay that you got right. The two reasoning paragraphs in the...
Writing Feedbacknttv - Oct 19, 2018 / Holt - Oct 20, 2018
|Some people believe the range of technology is increasing the gap between people. Argument essay
3 - Thank you. your opinion is very important for me, i will consider it and will try to improve my...
Writing FeedbackTeymurov - Oct 15, 2018 / Teymurov - Oct 19, 2018
|IELTS task 2 - 'The Internet' and smartphones essay
4 - @Elvin First I wish you to get higher score in your real exam. Secondly your this essay has poor...
Writing FeedbackElvin - Oct 3, 2018 / Teymurov - Oct 19, 2018
|Comparing two maps in constructed tourism island
NEW - changes in some areas of an island The figures compares the previous condition to the developed area of...
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|Violent Video games affect children by psychologically desensitizing them, also trigger aggression
2 - I don't understand why you want to ban violent video-games ONLY in Canada, you can mention the entire world...
Writing Feedbackarianataylor - Oct 16, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Oct 19, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1 : the percentage of women in poverty and poverty rates by sexs and ages.
2 - Reni, first up, you must make sure to identify the type of charts that are provided in the summary...
Writing FeedbackReni Ratna Sari - Oct 19, 2018 / Holt - Oct 19, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1: The pictures show the conventional manufactured chocolate production.
2 - While you did write more than the minimum 150 word count, a task 1 essay always scores best when...
Writing Feedbacksznnis25 - Oct 19, 2018 / Holt - Oct 19, 2018
|Writing IELTS Task 1 : Process of Chocolate
2 - 3th sentese: The first is manual process which usually use(s) a farmer skill and secondly processed by machine and...
Writing Feedbackayyubjbr - Oct 19, 2018 / Rudi Nirwantono - Oct 19, 2018
|Investing in schools and teachers or supplying computers and Internet access? IELTS2
Writing Feedbacktrancongminh997 - Oct 18, 2018 / trancongminh997 - Oct 19, 2018
|Marriages and divorces in the USA - Writing Task 1 for IELTS (Graph)
NEW - Hi Everyone! I need your feedback in term of writing ielts task 1 (Task Achievement, Lexical Resources, Cohesion and...
Writing Feedbackannisaelda13 - Oct 19, 2018 / — -
|IELTS Task 1: Geothermal Power Plant
NEW - Hai guys, I need your FEEDBACK IN TERM OF WRITTING TASK 1 (TASK ACHIEVEMENT, COHERENCE AND COHENSION, LEXICAL RESOURCE,...
Writing Feedbackerlanggaid - Oct 19, 2018 / — -
|Common App essay about my experience volunteering in a hospital and how it influenced me
Writing FeedbackGuest - Oct 17, 2018 / rupsajina - Oct 18, 2018
|Fish and meats consumption - Preparing to take IELTS for school requirement - Task 1 essay
4 - @Holt Thank you. I have noted your suggestion and will redo it again in next essay to get better...
Writing FeedbackKrystalCho89 - Oct 12, 2018 / KrystalCho89 - Oct 18, 2018
|Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer.
2 - Owning a business that means they could can follow their passion, find work motivation from interest be self-motivated, as...
Writing Feedbackzuzuzela - Oct 15, 2018 / rupsajina - Oct 18, 2018
|Today younger generations are getting married and have kids after the age of 30
2 - Kapil, you must learn to understand the different prompt discussion requirements of the Task 2 essays. All of these...
Writing Feedbackkapil098 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Living with your parents, the advantages
2 - Hi Faradina. It is a great essay with an apparent three reasons why people should live with their parents....
Writing FeedbackFaradina - Oct 16, 2018 / Elvin - Oct 18, 2018
|Composition 101 Informative Essay (no outside sources allowed - writing about stress management)
2 - Keyla, this is a very good topic for discussion and your approach is highly interesting. The problem that I...
Writing Feedbackeuphoric33 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others ...
2 - Jagpreet. your TA score for this essay will not be enough to help you get a passing score overall....
Writing FeedbackRandhawa294 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|A professional baseball player
2 - Rafiq, you are getting your English terms mixed up in this essay. The correct sentence is "Many people dream...
Writing FeedbackRafiq313 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Nha Trang - DESCRIBE A WELL-KNOWN DESTINATION YOU HAVE VISITED
5 - @lahoaithu I don't really find this essay interesting in a creative manner. You are just narrating your experience there,...
Writing Feedbacklahoaithu - Oct 16, 2018 / Holt - Oct 17, 2018
|Sports can be bridge to peace and understanding between countries and societes
2 - Tran, you have a good prompt paraphrase but your response to the question is missing. What is your measured...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Oct 16, 2018 / Holt - Oct 17, 2018
|There is a different approach on how the organization gives promotion to their employees.
3 - Thank you @Holt! I always learn something valuable from your comments. Hopefully I can improve my score in the...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Oct 15, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 16, 2018
|Problems with student behavior. What causes this and how to react.
2 - Nguyen, your approach to the prompt paraphrase / thesis statement is incorrect. The other problem, is that you added...
Writing Feedbacknguyenuyen450 - Oct 15, 2018 / Holt - Oct 16, 2018
|Motor use. Problems and solutions. IELTS task 2
3 - Dear @sillyman2000, I think in this kind of essay, you need to write properly the reasons completed with...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Oct 6, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 15, 2018
|Some people prefer to live in horizontal cities, while others choose a high-rise buildings
Writing Feedbackleanh - Oct 5, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 15, 2018
|Sources of energy - IELTS 2: Problems and Solutions Essay
3 - Dung, you are not being asked to justify the reasons for using alternative energy sources in this essay. The...
Writing Feedbacknhancau12345 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018
|Social media and personal information (ielts)
3 - You did not provide the full prompt of this task, so it makes it difficult to see whether you...
Writing Feedbackjolin552039 - Oct 13, 2018 / Xti02 - Oct 13, 2018
|Practical intelligence or academic intelligence? IELTS writing task 2.
2 - Hoang, the best solution to your word count situation is to stop writing run on sentences as you are...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018
|Family's closeness - IELTS 2: Problems and Solutions Essay
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Oct 12, 2018 / vietduccan - Oct 12, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2 - different perspectives on changes
2 - Zi Xuan, the reason that you failed this test is really simple. You failed to follow the discussion requirements...
Writing FeedbackAnn05 - Oct 10, 2018 / Holt - Oct 11, 2018
|Is it possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment? Ielts
3 - Trung, this is a failed Task 2 essay. The reason that this essay will receive a failing score is...
Writing FeedbackCentral6497 - Oct 9, 2018 / Holt - Oct 10, 2018
|How energy is used in Australia and the greenhouse gas emissions in total
3 - Tom, you need to learn to better separate you paragraphs in order to create a clear presentation of the...
Writing FeedbackTommyzuklin - Oct 8, 2018 / Holt - Oct 9, 2018
|Writing Task 2 IELTS: Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history.
3 - Nguyen, you lost track of what the prompt is asking you to discuss which is the measurement of your...
Writing Feedbackthanhnguyen2508 - Oct 8, 2018 / Holt - Oct 9, 2018
|Opinions are divided on question whether noise should be restricted or not. Ielts - task2
4 - Vince, when writing the 2 POV + Personal POV essay, it is always important to highlight the ownership of...
Writing Feedbacklnan95 - Oct 6, 2018 / Holt - Oct 7, 2018
|By virtue of upgraded medical health care, individuals have longer longevity as a result...
3 - paragraph two develop their economic -> economy this modern system -> If I were you, I would use 'these...
Writing Feedbackmainguyengoc2908 - Oct 4, 2018 / lnan95 - Oct 6, 2018
|IELTS Writing task 1 - the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city
Writing FeedbackVuxlinh - Oct 6, 2018 / Vuxlinh - Oct 6, 2018
|In my opinion there is no need for immigrants to give up their living habits abroad
2 - Tseng, this is an unrealistic essay writing presentation for an English language writing test. Believe me, you do not...
Writing Feedbackfish5a4d - Oct 5, 2018 / Holt - Oct 6, 2018
|Essay about the reason for learning foreign language - for travel, work, what else?
4 - you should be more careful when writing essays because i have seen some grammatical mistakes in this essay. Moreover,...
Writing Feedbackj85619 - Oct 4, 2018 / minhxinh - Oct 5, 2018
|[TOEFL iBT Task 2]: Independency for young adults
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Oct 4, 2018 / Holt - Oct 5, 2018
|The arguments for or against the freedom of information in science and academic world
3 - Jia, your response to the prompt is incorrect and will result in a failing score during the actual test....
Writing FeedbackZOU - Oct 4, 2018 / Holt - Oct 5, 2018
|Ielts aging population topic - the average life expectancy is increasing
3 - To, this is a direct question essay. As such, you must offer an immediate discussion based on the instructions...
Writing Feedbacklanvt2811 - Oct 4, 2018 / Holt - Oct 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: the same organisation or different organisations?
Writing Feedbackmainguyengoc2908 - Oct 3, 2018 / mainguyengoc2908 - Oct 4, 2018
|My English reading (English as a second language)
2 - @liqiaoer This would have been a more profound essay on your part if you could have just remembered to...
Writing Feedbackliqiaoer - Oct 3, 2018 / Holt - Oct 3, 2018
|(IELTS Task 2) Discuss sport professionals' salaries
3 - Nguyen, In this type of essay, you should be looking to discuss both points of view from a public...
Writing Feedbacklonelyboyscc202 - Oct 2, 2018 / Holt - Oct 3, 2018
|Topic: A family has a great influence on children's development..
2 - This can could be written as: ... developed nowadays, so the kids access ... From the beginning of...
Writing FeedbackFanger2002 - Oct 2, 2018 / Teebest - Oct 2, 2018
|DISCUSS ABOUT DRAWBACKS OF FAST FOOD - it is a potential menace to our bodies
2 - Hello Nguyễn, There is a disconnect between your opening paragraph and the next one. In the first, you...
Writing Feedbackthanhhieu23 - Oct 2, 2018 / btoguntade - Oct 2, 2018
|The best way to reduce crime among young people is to teach parents good parenting skills - IELTS 2
3 - Dear @AsgardSheol Iam impressed with your good control of English. However, I have a few advise to your...
Writing FeedbackAsgardSheol - Sep 27, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 1, 2018
|IELTs Task1: The bar chart shows University subjects chosen
5 - @Dang Khoa I don't think "seem" is unusable in IELTS writing. - "seem" is an informal word: I suspect...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Sep 29, 2018 / windmooc - Sep 30, 2018
|Nowadays, obesity is becoming a global disease, which cause many serious complications
2 - Thong, how much time did you spend researching your response to the given prompt? Your writing comes across as...
Writing Feedbackgodzlotus - Sep 29, 2018 / Holt - Sep 30, 2018
|A CASUAL GLANCE FROM MY LOVE (Cambridge Ordinary Level examinations of English)
4 - I am really grateful over your critical analysis over my piece of writing. i really needed this and i...
Writing FeedbackPeachy_Hag - Sep 20, 2018 / Peachy_Hag - Sep 29, 2018
|Some think that students should study mainly science and math in order to prepare them to job market
Writing FeedbackRana Alhawbani - Sep 15, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Sep 29, 2018
|Ielts task 2. Sense of competion or teamwork? Which one is better?
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Sep 20, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Sep 29, 2018
|There is a myriad of people who believe that physically harmful sports ought to be forbid - IELTS 2
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