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|People think wearing stylish clothing is important. Positive or negative development?
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Aug 7, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 9, 2018
|INTRODUCE MY JOB AND FAMILY
3 - you're right, my English is very simple. Thanks for your corrections and recommendations. @jalp The family is something...
Writing Feedbackasepmylocal - Aug 9, 2018 / asepmylocal - Aug 9, 2018
|Study of genetics recently has enormous role in this era - IELTS 2
2 - Intro: paraphrase of the prompt and your opinion. You did not mention your opinion on this. The 'key'...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Aug 6, 2018 / jalp - Aug 8, 2018
|Having Children Later in Life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Aug 7, 2018 / TriceLiu - Aug 8, 2018
|Ielts task 2: should charity organizations only help their citizens or anyone who in need?
5 - Min, in actuality, your essay is considered partially correct in response. It is partially correct and would be scored...
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 7, 2018 / Holt - Aug 8, 2018
|The majority of UK students speak at least one other language in addition to English
3 - Hello @Holt Thank you so much for the feedback. It's extremely helpful and I'm so glad that I found...
Writing Feedbackmsyoshino - Jul 26, 2018 / msyoshino - Aug 7, 2018
|IELTS WRITNG TASK 1: The process of producing coffee and preparing for sale
3 - Moon, you can present a cleaner, concise, and thorough opening summary if you do not separate your statements into...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: The graph shows the information about the UK birth rate from 1973 to 2008.
4 - Thank you all for the details review, I would correct and define my writing based on your feedbacks....
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 6, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 7, 2018
|The downsides of purchasing various products at cheaper prices - Ielts2
3 - Thank you so much for your detailed review, my aim for Writing is around 7.5, but it seems that...
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 6, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 7, 2018
|Writing task 2 IELTS. Rising temperature globally on the Earth
3 - Hoang, this is a direct response essay. So your thesis statement at the end of the 3 paraphrased sentences...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|Writing task 2: economic growth - environment protection
3 - Hi Bui, you failed to address the prompt partially. The better version of the first paragraph would be: ...
Writing Feedbackthuhabk - Aug 6, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 7, 2018
|TOEFL: the ability to maintain friendships with old friends vs. the ability to make new friends?
2 - Hi Natasha, the question offers you the option to choose one of two responses. You either write a response...
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TECHONOLOGY DEVELOPMENT (POSITIVE/NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT)
3 - @TriceLiu thankyou for your advise and i am looking forward for your advises on my upcoming writing :)...
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018 / zahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018
|Social network usage has caused a variety of contradictory effects on the whole community
3 - Hi chubby! Here's my advises related to your writing. 1. This statement of your essay seems to indicate...
Writing Feedbackchubbyngo07 - Aug 6, 2018 / zahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018
|Production off Co2 and other greenhouse gas has a heating effects on the atmosphere
3 - Tam, you have written only 240 words indicating that you are short of the minimum word count by 10...
Writing FeedbackVu Tammm26 - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|Argument between funding new railway lines and existing public transport
3 - HI AWESOME! Here's some suggestion for your writing: 1. You better eliminate Some societies in and directly say...
Writing Feedbackfauzansdr - Aug 6, 2018 / zahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018
|Big controversy whether employees should switch their jobs regularly or not
3 - Dear Holt, a great thanks to you! You give me extremely valuable comments. Would you mind giving me additional...
Writing Feedbackdongnguyenrobo - Aug 5, 2018 / dongnguyenrobo - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 : Discuss about physical activities and logical subjects
Writing FeedbackPhoenix Nguyen - Aug 5, 2018 / Phoenix Nguyen - Aug 6, 2018
|It's a big argument regarding opinion if a part-time job while study at university is worthy or not
4 - @TriceLiu I really thanks for your help. I read it carefully. You gave me some words to describe my...
Writing Feedbacklehuuquyen - Aug 1, 2018 / lehuuquyen - Aug 6, 2018
|Maps indicate the modifications Queen Mary Hospital has undergone since its establishment in 1960
4 - @TungfromVN my teacher said that was the academic structure, aim to lengthen your essay =)))) you shouldn't understand the...
Writing Feedbackducanhdo22 - Aug 4, 2018 / ducanhdo22 - Aug 6, 2018
|Integrating countries into solving environmental problems or fixing it each one separately
3 - I think some sentences in your essay are unclear so I suggest some amendments on them. For example: ...
Writing FeedbackVanchu3108 - Aug 5, 2018 / thuhabk - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK1: ESSAY ABOUT UK BIRTH RATE IN WOMEN AT 6 AGE GROUPS
4 - I think the overall writing is very good, however, you should pay more attention to the plural form, for...
Writing Feedbackvodat1512002 - Jul 26, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TOPIC ABOUT NEWS AND QUALITIES OF JOURNALISTS
3 - Vo, your total approach to the essay is wrong. You turned a direct question essay into an opinion essay,...
Writing Feedbackvothuong - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Children watching TV instead of doing active things
2 - Duong, excellent work in merging your 2 reasons for why kids prefer to watch TV. You also did a...
Writing Feedbackdghhnh - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|Ielts Writing Task 1: The graph shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
3 - Huynh, if you review the graph notes, you will see that there is a clear indication of the measurements...
Writing Feedbackduchuynhtan - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|Experiences of official travel
Writing Feedbackasepmylocal - Aug 2, 2018 / asepmylocal - Aug 6, 2018
|Writing task 1: Illustration of Dubai Gold sales over four quarters of the year 2002
NEW - the gold demand in Dubai The given line graph exhibits the gold consumption of Dubai over four quarters...
Writing Feedbackloanyuzu - Aug 6, 2018 / — -
|Ielts, Task2 - the critical environmental problems should be worked upon by all countries united
Writing FeedbackAditya0211 - Aug 1, 2018 / Aditya0211 - Aug 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Information sharing. Should or shouldn't?
2 - Anh, the approach to this essay requires you to discuss the public opinion regarding the sharing of information with...
Writing Feedbacktieuanhanh - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|Newcomers in a foreign country - should they obey local rules and customs?
3 - Nghiep. your essay is not responding to the question being asked of you in the essay. For this extent...
Writing FeedbackNavy Captain - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|TOEFL Independent Writing-having fun playing game or doing thing with HW
2 - Lilo, you have written a level 3 essay presentation. You have some difficulty in forming sentences that have an...
Writing Feedbackliloyeh - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|The levels of unemployment among young people between 1993 and 2012 in England
6 - Hi Holt. Thanks a lot for your help. I extremely appreciate your enthusiasm. 😊❤ I'm going to note it...
Writing FeedbackLAKHANH - Aug 2, 2018 / LAKHANH - Aug 4, 2018
|A rise in price of petrol is the most effective method to tackle the growth of traffic congestion
3 - Gnyuen, for an extent essay, you do not need to discuss the opposing point of view. This exam wants...
Writing FeedbackJasonQuan - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|People's motivation to work in the state-run sector in the country of Bananala during 1995-2010.
2 - Tra, it is extremely difficult to review your paper because you did not properly upload the image. It doesn't...
Writing Feedbacktheblacktea - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Printed newspaper vs Online newspaper. What will be more important?
3 - Phuong, your response automatically failed the Task Accuracy considerations. That means your essay is not properly addressing the prompt...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|ENG 102 Final Research paper-Law enforcement leadership, why imminent change may not be the answer.
2 - Kurt, I am highly confused by the way that you are presenting this paper. Are you presenting a study...
Writing FeedbackKurtbu - Aug 4, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|Parents need to learn how to be skillful in looking after their children
Writing FeedbackTungfromVN - Aug 3, 2018 / TungfromVN - Aug 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Printed books vs Electronical books - what brings the future?
5 - Thank you Red Moon, problems with time management. After 40 minutes I have no time at all to double...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 3, 2018
|Topic relates with recycling system, could you check up my essay? Is that appropriate?
Writing FeedbackNurislam1404 - Jul 31, 2018 / Nurislam1404 - Aug 2, 2018
|More and more animal species are becoming extince by human activies in land and sea.
4 - @TriceLiu and @Holt Thank you very much for your advice. I look forward to receiving your further advice on...
Writing Feedbackthuhabk - Aug 1, 2018 / thuhabk - Aug 2, 2018
|Genetic Editing for Cystic Fibrosis Argumentative Essay for ENG 102
2 - a critic fibrosis decribe about the ruthless disease which happened in 1962. The story which explan about a young...
Writing Feedbackhmkane - Jul 28, 2018 / asepmylocal - Aug 2, 2018
|The population of major cities is rising sharply and continually - evaluate this trend
3 - @HoaBui There is a missing element in your research presentation. You have covered the existing problems and the suggested...
Writing FeedbackHoaBui - Aug 1, 2018 / Holt - Aug 2, 2018
|The pie charts below describes how six regions in the world utilized water with unalike purpose
Writing Feedbacklynn1601 - Jul 20, 2018 / lynn1601 - Aug 2, 2018
|A Call to Action Against Pollution Essay. Concerns of the environment.
2 - Ben, your opening paragraph is confusing. What is the actual thesis statement for this essay? What sort of pollution...
Writing FeedbackBenvanhook - Aug 1, 2018 / Holt - Aug 2, 2018
|Task 2 - Reading books vs. Watching films and television
6 - Thanks @PaulthePhoenix! It's great to know that I should focus on a point in the topic in the case...
Writing Feedbackritanguyen167 - Jul 28, 2018 / ritanguyen167 - Aug 1, 2018
|ESSAY- What can human being do to help stop global warming?
Writing FeedbackRobyn_Chau - Aug 1, 2018 / Robyn_Chau - Aug 1, 2018
|Overfishing threatens many species with extinction and steals the livelihood of countless people.
Writing Feedbacksweetlife1234321 - Jul 31, 2018 / thuhabk - Aug 1, 2018
|Smoking is detrimental to the smoker and those who are nearby - smoking ban in public places
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Jul 31, 2018 / TriceLiu - Aug 1, 2018
|Should environmental problems be solved on a global scale or better to deal with it nationally?
Writing FeedbackDanielphan - Jul 21, 2018 / Danielphan - Aug 1, 2018
|The maps inform about the present changes in the town center of Islip and planned in the future.
2 - Anh, in this analytical report, you should be delivering the following paragraphs in order to meet the expected report...
Writing Feedbacktaat5991 - Jul 31, 2018 / Holt - Aug 1, 2018
|Alternative resources - an effective solution that should be encouraged to use in the near future.
3 - Nguyen, the TA score for this essay will be a 1. That is because you are not properly delivering...
Writing FeedbackNhat Px - Jul 31, 2018 / Holt - Aug 1, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - will tax on fuel ease the traffic and pollution?
6 - Hi Smally Nice essay in term of structure and vocab. As the other two pointed out you need to...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Jul 29, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: Discuss both view on whether or not to keep animal in zoo.
5 - Thank you all for your comments. I'm really appreciate your contribution. Hope you all have a good revision...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Jul 31, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Musical albums purchased in the UK according to sex and age
4 - It's fine Hien. Given in this specific topic with 3 graphs combined into one essay, I think the length...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Jul 29, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018
|Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately?
5 - @Holt Thank you very much for your help. I'll definitely try my best to write better in the following...
Writing FeedbackQuynh Nguyen - Jul 31, 2018 / Quynh Nguyen - Aug 1, 2018
|Essay about Southland's crucial exports in 2000 and predictions for the next years
2 - Please post the chart so that we could help you more :) A few grammatical suggestions: 1. ... 1...
Writing Feedbackthanhphuc2049 - Jul 26, 2018 / TriceLiu - Jul 31, 2018
|The quantity of waste generation in millions of tonnes in six nations during the 1980-2000 period
2 - Moon, your summary just needed the enumeration of the nations included in the table and the comparison type for...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jul 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 31, 2018
|IELTS 2: Zoos and Wildlife protection; Is it cruel to keep animals in zoos?
Writing FeedbackCaroline77 - Jul 27, 2018 / Caroline77 - Jul 31, 2018
|Children are educated about the right and wrong differentiation, and often by force
3 - Thank you very much for your really great comments. I will try to practice more and hope that you...
Writing FeedbackHoang Dinh - Jul 30, 2018 / Hoang Dinh - Jul 31, 2018
|Air transfer, some people agree and some disagree, discuss both views and give your opinion
2 - Medhi, one of the many problems that your essay possesses is that you did not compose an accurate prompt...
Writing Feedbackimehdisadeghi - Jul 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 31, 2018
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