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|All over the world, children and adults are facing an increasing problem with excess weight.
3 - Hi Komoliddin, welcome to the EssayForum team :) This is the right place to develop your writing skills, especially...
Writing FeedbackKoma - May 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 30, 2016
|TOEFL independent writing:A Leader should have strong opinions and should not change his/her opinion
2 - Hi Huang, welcome to EssayForum :) I hope you can find this website is fruitful towards your development in...
Writing Feedbacknoalawyer - May 29, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 30, 2016
|TASK1-The table below compares the average number of vehicles using three roads.
3 - Dear ichanpants Thank you so much for your very constructive comments about both overview and complex sentences ;)...
Writing Feedbackmersad - May 28, 2016 / mersad - May 28, 2016
|What is the most important thing in a relation?
3 - Hi Hamed, frankly you are good at writing, but you need more practice. Bear in mind the practice makes...
Writing Feedbackhamed54321 - May 27, 2016 / mersad - May 28, 2016
|TOEFL essay - New theater in the neighborhood. Sugesstions?
Writing FeedbackJoydoc - May 24, 2016 / Joydoc - May 27, 2016
|Children should be allowed to do paid work or not
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - May 27, 2016 / rozhnaz - May 27, 2016
|Attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals
5 - For many years ago, an outstanding discovery by psychologists has revealedis that colour has been possible tocan influence people's...
Writing Feedbackichanpants89 - Apr 17, 2016 / abhay4556 - May 27, 2016
|IELTS 2. We have become depended upon bad news and the mass media are aware of this.
2 - Glad to read your essay again, Maxim! None of the strengths of your previous writing are lost in this...
Writing FeedbackMaximKlopunov99 - May 27, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - May 27, 2016
|In my way of thinking, children attending to private schools is reasonable idea. IELTS 2
4 - Xiao, I notice that there is no thesis statement in your essay. This is dangerous, and therefore you will...
Writing Feedbacksuxiaojing - May 5, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 27, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 (PRACTICE) - THE DANGERS OF CHEMICAL COMPOUND USAGE
4 - Nurul, I would like to try to assess you based on IELTS writing task 2 public band descriptors. ...
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - May 26, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 27, 2016
|Unhealthy lifestyle has been an increasing trend. Who should guide kids in the right direction?
Writing FeedbackSDan - May 26, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 27, 2016
|Debate Essay Morality and Legalality of Abortion Paper
3 - I agree to every thought of yours. Abortion should not be permitted unless its unavoidable. Killing fetus is a...
Writing Feedbackabhay4556 - May 26, 2016 / cleokmoore - May 27, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 ; Unemployment is a big disaster.
6 - Hi Furqanda, glad to read your essay, here are some suggestions for you Paragraph 4 Secondly, government should...
Writing FeedbackBtihbk11 - May 24, 2016 / Novi - May 26, 2016
|Inventors and doctors, both are important to our society and both are play their role wisely.
7 - Hy, Ram. It is a great chance to give some suggestions for your essay. Inventors are not as important...
Writing Feedbackppdev - May 26, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 26, 2016
|If the world was ruled by female leaders, it would have been peaceful. Is it true?
3 - Subi, I can see that you got a very-comprehensive feedback from one of EssayForum contributors. I hope you can...
Writing FeedbackSDan - May 26, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 26, 2016
|Factors of unemployment and steps to solve it
6 - Hey, your essay is quite refreshing. You certainly have alot of ideas and creativity. I found some minor mistakes...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - May 25, 2016 / SDan - May 26, 2016
|The teenager's decision for having a paid work is not a poor decison at all. IELTS TASK 2
3 - Hi Patric, here are my thoughts on your concerns. 1. In discussion and give opinion type, do we...
Writing Feedbackpatricrioo - May 25, 2016 / justivy03 - May 26, 2016
|IELTS Task 2- Computers should never have been invented
4 - hello novi, this is my suggestion for your introduction :) The computer is a valuable discoveryinvention that has...
Writing FeedbackNovi - May 23, 2016 / Meirama91 - May 26, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - In some societies, fashion is becoming more and more important
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - May 24, 2016 / justivy03 - May 26, 2016
|Some people believe that food adverts should be banned.Do you agree or disagree?
3 - Indeed, welcome to the big family of EssayForum, Zehra! You are very lucky to join us because we provide...
Writing Feedbackzombibezelye - May 26, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - May 26, 2016
|The usage of chemical materials in food-making and maintenance has become a debatable issue.
3 - Hi Patric, aside from the corrections above that focused on your grammar, I would like to add that your...
Writing Feedbackpatricrioo - May 26, 2016 / justivy03 - May 26, 2016
|IELTS Task 1; Describe the diagram about nuclear reactor
4 - Furqanda, you need to complete the way that you present the information in the overview / introduction of your...
Writing FeedbackBtihbk11 - May 17, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 26, 2016
|People should be allowed to work as long as they want? Agree or disagree
6 - I agree with this point Punctuation Aiding to this many researches conducted globally ... Aiding to this, many researches...
Writing FeedbackAdeel80 - May 24, 2016 / 13williamsm - May 25, 2016
|World has changed speedily from manual era to digital era because of computers
Writing FeedbackUvyL26 - May 24, 2016 / Novi - May 25, 2016
|Tourism is an excellent way to develop a country, but it can also cause harm. How can countries ensu
3 - Azamat, if you wish to know what is your approximate band score for this writing. I would like to...
Writing FeedbackAzamat98 - May 22, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 25, 2016
|The range of visitors who travelled Brighton attractions in England between 1980 and 2010.
3 - Lily, I notice that you still need to elaborate this essay further, since it only has 154 words. This...
Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - May 25, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 25, 2016
|IELTS 2 - An increase the production of consumer goods results in the damage
2 - Hi Rere, here are some additional insights and corrections to your essay. -The highly increase ( increase is...
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - May 25, 2016 / justivy03 - May 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - Some support development in agriculture, such as farming industry
2 - Hi Rere, as much as I applaud you in noting the suggested approach on your essay, I would also...
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - May 25, 2016 / justivy03 - May 25, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 ; GLOBAL WARMING one of extremely serious problem
NEW - Our world encounters global warming as one of extremely serious problem. Global warming is a consequence of several factors....
Writing FeedbackBtihbk11 - May 25, 2016 / — -
|Should computer be invented? They have made a very vital impact on society.
4 - Hi mei, I have a several suggestions to your essay. Hope it helps. Over two decades, computer has...
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - May 24, 2016 / patricrioo - May 25, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - People lived in small villages or big cities
2 - hi nurul, glad to read your essay, gere are some sugestions for you specifically for your introduction :...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 23, 2016 / Novi - May 25, 2016
|I strongly agree that gender could affect on the job position based on certain abilities.
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - May 24, 2016 / madmoiselle - May 25, 2016
|"Choosing between a house and a business" - TOEFL Essay
4 - ... house show us the responsibility of us withfor our family. A house creates a stablesafe place for your...
Writing Feedbackwaterforce1205 - May 24, 2016 / madmoiselle - May 25, 2016
|Internet marketing of four different business retails in New Zeland is depicted in the pie chart
2 - Nurul, I notice that you've been using similar pattern of writing Task 1 like I usually write. This is...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 24, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 24, 2016
|Technology is very much a part of modern life. Check usage, structure and convention (Cbest writing)
2 - Erwin, it is nice to see your revision of this essay. I do realize that you've made some adjustments....
Writing FeedbackExt7484 - May 22, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 24, 2016
|The 20th century saw great change. In your opinion, what is one change that should be remembered?
2 - ... I found that the more most important change (...) is the different way of the communication by...
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - May 24, 2016 / Joydoc - May 24, 2016
|Comparison Three universities BU, USC and UB.
4 - Hi Hang, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope you find this website a credible source of information...
Writing Feedbackminicover93 - May 23, 2016 / justivy03 - May 24, 2016
|Foreign language study by children in the first education level is more effective than in second
3 - Hi Nurul, I definitely agree that learning a second language, in this case, a foreign language at an early...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 23, 2016 / justivy03 - May 24, 2016
|The transition of the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy between 2000 and 2050
2 - ... Yemen and Italy between 2000 and 2050 and theas projected year 2050. Overall, it is noticeable that the...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 24, 2016 / Btihbk11 - May 24, 2016
|Pupils should be trained how to become a precedent parent. IELTS
3 - On the other hand, becoming well-qualified parents does not require such parenthood ... Children can learn it naturally throughout...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 20, 2016 / madmoiselle - May 24, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Nature vs Nurture in Sharping People' Personalities and Developments
3 - Hi Febri, your essay is understandable, however i have some suggestions for you. ... they parents were genius...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 24, 2016 / madmoiselle - May 24, 2016
|People tend to have a limited time in doing face-to-face communication with their friends
2 - Zelly, welcome to EssayForum :) This is a valuable place to enhance your writing skill by giving peer-corrections to...
Writing Feedbackzelly - May 24, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 24, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Why Taking Part-time Job for Teenager are Beneficials?
4 - Hy, Febry. I would like to give some suggestions :) ... effective ways for young adult to prepare...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 22, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Who Should Take Responsibility for Juvenile Attitude
3 - Febri, by doing many readings on many of your essays, I do realize something. The problems which made your...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 22, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 23, 2016
|Many advertisements are greatly exaggerated, thus, causing some untruths in the products
3 - Hi Teck Hui, it is a pleasure to read your essay. It is imperative to mention your standpoint in...
Writing FeedbackTheodore - May 23, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Competitive or Cooperative? Is competition the key to survive?
3 - Hi Febriyani, here's some additional remarks to your writing practice. - In summaryconclusion ( I think this is...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 23, 2016 / justivy03 - May 23, 2016
|Argumentative Essay - "Does Technology Make Us More Alone or More Connected to the World?" Comments?
3 - Hi Michael, well, you hoped that your readers enjoy reading the essay and I must say, I did enjoy...
Writing Feedbackmwentworth18 - May 19, 2016 / justivy03 - May 23, 2016
|Health Concerns and the Zika Virus
3 - Hi Becky, I believe this writing tasks is more of a research paper, I hope I'm right, anyway, for...
Writing Feedbackwabewebejole01 - May 21, 2016 / justivy03 - May 23, 2016
|It appears that the youth crime rate have experienced a significant increase to the alarming level
2 - Hi Ilmy, glad to read your essay, here are some corrections for you, keep on writing. Cheer! Undoubtedly,...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 22, 2016 / Novi - May 23, 2016
|IELTS - Writing Task 2 The characteristic we are born will have many much more influence on our pers
4 - Ilmi, your efforts to get a high score in IELTS writing is remarkable. I saw that you almost upload...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 22, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - May 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Having Enjoyable Life or Earning Much Money, Which One Do You Prefer?
2 - ... good life will be determined by the quantity amounts of money that people they earn through a fine...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 22, 2016 / Ext7484 - May 22, 2016
|What do you do for good health? People's awareness is rising.
3 - Hi, Yuting! Here i want to give several suggestions to your writing. Paragraph 1 there are more and...
Writing Feedbackyuting80 - May 22, 2016 / pebzna12 - May 22, 2016
|Different views about whether children experience competitions or not to be a well-qualified adult.
2 - Hello, Ilmi! Again, I'm going to share several points to you. 2nd Paragraph ... work harder and improve...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 22, 2016 / pebzna12 - May 22, 2016
|These days, advertising for commercial use appears to boost the volume of sales. IELTS
4 - Hi, Ilmi! Here are my suggestions. Paragraph 1 A huge number of people vaying to buy such kind...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 20, 2016 / pebzna12 - May 22, 2016
|IELTS - Technological advances in learning methods
3 - hi zarnovi paragraph 1 I would argue that directly attendattending the general lecture directly will deliver much more...
Writing Feedbackzarnovi - May 22, 2016 / aviniwirastri - May 22, 2016
|Opinion Editorial - The Rise of a Phoenix
9 - Wow, those are all great points. Some of those grammatical errors I didn't even notice. I'm taking everything suggested...
Writing FeedbackLlamaGod - Apr 22, 2016 / LlamaGod - May 21, 2016
|TOEFL essay for rating - why attend University?
6 - In the third paragraph, find another word for "diversities" as it probably should not be used as a noun....
Writing FeedbackJoydoc - May 16, 2016 / AndrewT97 - May 21, 2016
|The annual expenditures for five purposes in a British school in three different years
4 - Greetings, Yichieh Lee. Overall, I can follow the descriptions since you have written. However, there are some slightly correction...
Writing Feedbackyichiehli - May 16, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 21, 2016
|The percentage of kinds of transport used and the reasoning behind the use of a vehicle in Edmonton
3 - Good afternoon, PEBZNA12. Thank you for sharing your analysis. I enjoyed reading it. To improve the flow of the...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 15, 2016 / EditorPal - May 20, 2016
|Main causes contributing to make farmable land degraded; three continents were adversely affected
3 - Hy Mersad, I would like to suggest you to use transitional expressing, it will eases to read and understand...
Writing Feedbackmersad - May 20, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 20, 2016
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