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|TOEFL: a large number of celebrities are not equipped with skills necessary for a politician
4 - Celebrities dive into politics for the sole reason of using their popularity and "people image" to increase their vote...
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Jul 8, 2016 / Eric_Rom - Jul 25, 2016
|IELTS Academic Writing task 2 - The Person Who Should Teach Children
Writing FeedbackRadhiyahFahra - Jul 23, 2016 / Laraib - Jul 25, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 essay practice - Population Distribution in two different countries, two different year
4 - Both forecast and forecasted are correct. I think it is more appropriate to use either elderly people or simply...
Writing Feedbackfatmajanna - Jul 24, 2016 / Daniel1998 - Jul 24, 2016
|IELTS; To read or not to read: That is a question - can we learn that way about a foreign country?
2 - but this approach is really suitable for everyone : However is this the best way for... yet for someone...
Writing FeedbackVictoria1015 - Jul 23, 2016 / madmoiselle - Jul 24, 2016
|IELTS: VIOLENCE SHOWN ON TV AND IN THE CINEMA MIGHT EXPLAIN YOUNG PEOPLE'S VIOLENT BEHAVIOUR
4 - ... this unpleasant phenomenon ought to be taken so that to reduce the amount of violence faced by our...
Writing FeedbackDaniel1998 - Jul 23, 2016 / giangnt248 - Jul 24, 2016
|[ielts Task 2] Increasing global demand of oil and gas, should continue explore?
2 - Hi yon959, your essay is very well for both skeleton and supporting ideas. However, I have some minor comments...
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Jul 23, 2016 / Freeman_ps1983 - Jul 23, 2016
|It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm the friendship. Do you agree?
3 - Hi, Payal, I think you did not directly answer the question properly (maybe I am wrong). The question...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 22, 2016 / yon959 - Jul 23, 2016
|We can't affirm that the living certain place is better.
3 - Dear Hien, I think that comments and remarks above have mostly summed up the changes and enhancements, you need...
Writing Feedbackhohien - Jul 6, 2016 / Sunrise011 - Jul 23, 2016
|GRE Argument:"WWAC radio station..."
2 - ... likely to choose the Internet rather than the radio station to meet their needs. ... radio station which...
Writing Feedbacksunshinelyb - Jul 23, 2016 / Victoria1015 - Jul 23, 2016
|IELTS: WHETHER TRAVELLING AND WORKING ABROAD ARE THE ONLY REASONS TO LEARN A FOREIGN LANGUAGE OR NOT
2 - Hi, Here is my feedback: Consequently, it significantly increases their chances of getting a well-paying----. well paid and...
Writing FeedbackDaniel1998 - Jul 22, 2016 / payal1982 - Jul 22, 2016
|First hand smokers must not be allowed to smoke in public places. I agree with that statement
NEW - Smoking should be banned in public places The people, who smoke, are increasing/growing day by day through the...
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|In a modern world people always face the dilemma to own a car. Perspective for the next 20 years.
3 - Hi Khaleed, I can see that you received a comprehensive feedback from one of our EF contributors and I...
Writing Feedbackkhaledd - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 22, 2016
|Talk about the pros/cons of this era as is full of daily inventions.
4 - Hi Smith, first of all, your essay is very relevant to todays world. You made sure that the information...
Writing Feedbacktwid - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|IELTS: People live in small family units rather than big family groups. Is it positive or negative?
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 12, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|Payment Disparity in Sports: Sexist or Economic
3 - Hi Julian, indeed WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family. We hope that this is just the start of this...
Writing Feedbackcrzydude42 - Jul 10, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents
4 - Hi Chiang, first of all, I find your analysis very accurate to the graph, it is not only using...
Writing Feedbackyunana - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|Is the improvement of schools the most important factor in creating a progressed, thriving country?
4 - Hi Hector, no worries at all, we are happy that you acknowledge our efforts here on EF, we do...
Writing Feedbacksinahector - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|More enhancements in security system due to the recent upsurge in the number of offences
6 - Hi Minh, thank you for acknowledging our insights here on EF. We do strive to provide you with the...
Writing Feedbackhuynhngocminh99 - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|People should speak a global language in a global word
4 - I mean you should show your idea in the first paragraph so the reader could easily get your points...
Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - Jul 20, 2016 / nguyendinhtuong - Jul 20, 2016
|People are never satisfied with what they have; they want something more or something different
Writing FeedbackSunrise011 - Jul 10, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 20, 2016
|The percentage of average food budget family for eating in restaurant is depicted in the pie charts
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 20, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 20, 2016
|Learning a new language early is good or bad? It's definitely a wise decision.
2 - Hi Peter, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we are greatly pleased to welcome yet another...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Jul 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 20, 2016
|You have received a gift of money. What would you buy from these options?
4 - Hi Payal, thank you for acknowledging our feedback. While you're at your revision, mind the following; - the...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 16, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 20, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - The diagram reveals how to use an automatic photo booth
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 20, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - More and more measures to improve the security in the urban area
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 20, 2016 / kantyjang - Jul 20, 2016
|pursue a career, new experiences, knowledge; attending a college or university can fulfill all of it
4 - Hi Payal ! Is this an ielts essay? If it is,I think the first pagragraph must be an introduction....
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 19, 2016 / huynhngocminh99 - Jul 20, 2016
|Governments spend a lot money on improving Internet access. Why? Is it the most appropriate use?
7 - Hi An. You presented your ideas in a very clearly way. I really like the way you arrange your...
Writing Feedbackannguyen - Jul 17, 2016 / huynhngocminh99 - Jul 20, 2016
|At universities and colleges, sports and social activities vs. Classes and libraries
Writing FeedbackSoniasa - Jul 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 19, 2016
|This is a religious meditation. It talks about our received graces.
5 - No worries at all Nguyen, I hope the remarks were helpful and even more so, useful in your revision....
Writing Feedbacknguyenvannam - Jul 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 19, 2016
|The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
Writing Feedbackmuathuthattuyet - Jul 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 19, 2016
|IELTS: Is it the only effective way to reduce crime that increasing the number of police officers?
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 19, 2016 / Lansium - Jul 19, 2016
|Students learn better when they are not threatened with possible failure. Do you agree or disagree.
3 - Some students might get better off with learning when they realize about... Not every individual in the universe...
Writing Feedbackessen - Jul 18, 2016 / kantyjang - Jul 19, 2016
|To better myself and progress in life... Essay about the story of my life.
3 - Hi Juan, thank you for sharing the story of your life in this essay. It is indeed an inspiration...
Writing FeedbackJuanSebastianR - Jul 18, 2016 / fatmajanna - Jul 19, 2016
|IELTS: mathematics and philosophy are too difficult, so they should be made optional by students.
5 - I think it's better to spend equal room for argument in both sides. You could contribute more on supporting...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 18, 2016 / nguyendinhtuong - Jul 19, 2016
|What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? (wheat)
5 - Hi Payal, it's absolutely great to hear that you are practicing everyday in order to improve your writing. Indeed,...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 18, 2016
|Pros and cons of taking year off and traveling as a backpacker or working in a small company; IELTS2
8 - I think your first paragraph should be utilized to introduce the thesis sentence, which is the general advantage and...
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Jul 14, 2016 / fatmajanna - Jul 18, 2016
|Writing Practice: USA Summer Camp job application (Need Correction)
3 - Hi Wilson, please find find additional help below; - I'm a College student in college from Taiwan, -...
Writing FeedbackWilson_Chen - Jul 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 18, 2016
|In about 140 words write a paragraph about the importance of doing exercises
4 - Hi Quyen, indeed, WELCOME the the team, it's always good to welcome yet another member of the team and...
Writing Feedbacklethibichquyen - Jul 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 18, 2016
|IELTS task2: Global warming and deforestation? Which has more devastating impact on our world?
2 - Phonepasong, I can see that you have gained a lot of improvements relating to the flow of ideas and...
Writing FeedbackPhonepasong - Jul 17, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 17, 2016
|Daily tasks without meeting people face to face - effects it may have on individuals and the society
2 - Hello There are a few stylistic/grammar adjustments that can be applied to your text. They are as follows:...
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 17, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Jul 17, 2016
|These days young people are less reliant on their parent's advice to make important life decisions.
4 - spending more time alone and accessing to internet platform. who are'tnot familiar with internet. I think It is...
Writing Feedbackseconddaniel - Jul 12, 2016 / madmoiselle - Jul 17, 2016
|Television, newspapers, magazines - fake and manipulating news out of this reality?
4 - Hi Payal, I like your clear opinion, however your essay is not structured well as Ichan explain above. Good...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 13, 2016 / madmoiselle - Jul 17, 2016
|Information technology subjects should be focused instead of unusable subjects such as music or art
3 - Hi Jakkapong, welcome to the EssayForum :) although it is quite late to respond your essay. I hope that...
Writing Feedbackcantaloup - Jul 7, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 16, 2016
|Topic: Leading countries must contain a majority of elderly people. Do you agree with?
2 - Hello Your text does make certain sense but it could use being improved stylistically. The suggested adjustments are...
Writing Feedbackfazilcansizoglu - Jul 15, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Jul 15, 2016
|Human activity have posed a serious threat to the environment.
4 - Thanks so much ichanpants89. You have motivated me to write more as I am learning a lot. I will...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 14, 2016 / payal1982 - Jul 15, 2016
|The goverment should reduce the amount of money spent on local environment problems
3 - Hi Aldi, I can see that you have gathered a very comprehensive feedback from one of EssayForum members and...
Writing FeedbackALDI - Jul 10, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 15, 2016
|Water used for different purposes in six wide territories all over - IELTS. ACADEMIC WRITING, TASK 1
3 - Dinara, I would like to try to asses you based on IELTS writing band descriptors of Task 1. I...
Writing Feedbackdolcedi - Jul 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 15, 2016
|IELTS: In many countries, there are 24 -hour TV programs. Is it a positive or negative development?
2 - Keely, I would like to suggest you to write based on IELTS writing band descriptors of Task 2. It...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 15, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 15, 2016
|IELTS: Does Advertising encourage people to buy in quantity rather than promoting its quality?
6 - Hi Mochtar, I have posted new writings. I am so glad to receive your corrections because they are...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 13, 2016 / kantyjang - Jul 15, 2016
|The way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology; IELTS writing task2
3 - Hi Phonepasong, Please find my feedback and I hope it will be useful The introduction is little...
Writing FeedbackPhonepasong - Jul 12, 2016 / payal1982 - Jul 14, 2016
|IELTS: Social Networking Good or Bad to children? The high rate of internet usage concerns people.
5 - Thanks for your guidance! I will take care of my careless mistakes on both spelling and grammatical error...
Writing Feedbackahfish - Jun 27, 2016 / ahfish - Jul 13, 2016
|Technology versus art - what is an essential subject for children at school
3 - Swati, welcome to EssayForum :) I believe that this is a good place to improve your writing skill. I...
Writing Feedbackdgr8swati - Jul 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 13, 2016
|Would you rather be a leader or a member of a group? Leaders also learn a lot / experience asset
2 - Mingyu, the detailed descriptions below are my contributions toward your essay. I hope you find it helpful. 1st...
Writing Feedbackseconddaniel - Jul 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 13, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98
Writing Feedbackyunana - Jul 12, 2016 / ALDI - Jul 12, 2016
|In under developed countries, touriusm has disadvanages and can be said the opposites
Writing Feedbacktwid - Jul 12, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 12, 2016
|Help me with this essay. Essay about "Teaching method"
3 - Nowadays, new technology is increasingly being incorporatedused to teach students instead of traditional method: lectures. I think that...
Writing Feedbackchomchom - Jul 11, 2016 / twid - Jul 12, 2016
|The earth: a living place where neat sceneries and nature's beauty are only part of people's fantasy
2 - ... and industrial zones due to the exceedingly hurtful noxious gases of manufacturers being tossemitted into the air ...
Writing FeedbackSunrise011 - Jul 11, 2016 / lacusclyne - Jul 12, 2016
|Six categories of energy consumed / predicted to use - in the US over a period of 50 years.
4 - HI Mandy, below are my suggestions for your analysis. - It's clear that the total amount - of...
Writing Feedbackmandy51425 - Jul 8, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 11, 2016
|People usually choose their jobs which offer a higher salary than others
3 - Hi Eggshell, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we hope that this is just the start...
Writing Feedbacklqmsf100 - Jul 9, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 11, 2016
|People have different views on when to let children learn a foreign language. (IELTS)
2 - ... learn a foreign language is better for children. (this is correct but ''them'' is more correct usage...
Writing Feedbackmandy51425 - Jul 8, 2016 / zombibezelye - Jul 9, 2016
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