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|Total percentage of children ever born to older women aged from 40 until 44 years in Australia
Writing Feedbackkurniarahmi - Jun 18, 2016 / Titus14 - Jun 27, 2016
|Youngsters with lower artistic skill aren't mandatory to engage in art syllabus
3 - HI Aulia, below is another take on your essay. - lower artistic skills are not - mandatorymandated to...
Writing Feedbackculprit23 - Jun 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|I strongly support the idea of charging the foreign tourists higher
3 - Hi! I would like to suggest you to replace some of the 'historical' with 'ancient', this will make your...
Writing Feedbackknhusone - Jun 25, 2016 / Titus14 - Jun 27, 2016
|Mankind hinges today on the advancement of technology and most people are lost without it
3 - Hi Virel, indeed, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope this is just the beginning of a great...
Writing Feedbackvirel - Jun 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|Fewer languages in the world has its merits; How to write an opinion essay about languages?
3 - Hi Mansurbek, I would like to help by adding a few suggestions to the other half of your essay....
Writing FeedbackMansurbek19 - Jun 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 27, 2016
|Life in a small village makes people more enjoyable doing their daily activities than in a huge city
5 - Hi! I have some suggestions for you, though I'm not a native English speaker, I'd still like to point...
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jun 18, 2016 / Titus14 - Jun 27, 2016
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Solutions to low birth rate in developed countries
3 - @ichanpants89 I really appreciate your helpful suggestions! But I still have two questions. 1.How do I replace FANBOYS? Especially...
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jun 26, 2016 / Titus14 - Jun 27, 2016
|Happy Moonlight Festival- create your own festival
2 - Hi Maibellinenguyen, I highly appreciate your description of the festival, but I think you should use vocabulary more carefully....
Writing FeedbackMaibellinenguyen - Jun 26, 2016 / knhusone - Jun 26, 2016
|Internet is something that people use to make their live become easier. IELTS TASK 2
4 - Dear Grahyta, In my opinion, you focus on the quality of information available through the internet excessively. Note...
Writing FeedbackGrahyta24 - Jun 18, 2016 / VadimKlimenko - Jun 25, 2016
|Should government invest more money in a city infrastructure instead of public transportation?
2 - Matt, I would like to deliver my feedback in the detailed descriptions below. I hope this would be helpful...
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Jun 24, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 24, 2016
|A COMPARISON OF TRIPS UNDERTAKEN BY CARS BASED ON GENDER - WRITING IELTS TASK 1
3 - Hi Ilham, it is nice to read another IELTS essay practice of yours. I would like to point out...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jun 24, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 24, 2016
|Debate about whether to teach children competitiveness or create a spirit of cooperation in them
4 - HI Tran, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope you find this website credible, useful as well as...
Writing Feedbackknhusone - Jun 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 24, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 The internet makes human lives more convenient
7 - Human/Daily activities become easier more comfortable due to the existence of the cutting-edge internet. While the internet tend /...
Writing FeedbackLahfah Afifah - Jun 19, 2016 / KarunaTruong - Jun 24, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 THE POSSIBLE CHANGE AMONG SOCIETIES DUE TO THE SOPHISTICATED COMMUNICATION TOOLS
5 - Hi Muhammad, Overall your essay is well-qualified I think you should change Taking a smart phone as an...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jun 23, 2016 / KarunaTruong - Jun 24, 2016
|The FAMILY. As a beginner, I need your help so much. More importantly, my examination is coming
2 - Hello thanhlac98 Overall, your text is nicely written, but a few things could be improved. The suggested adjustments...
Writing Feedbackthanhlac98 - Jun 23, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Jun 23, 2016
|Information about the comparison density in several areas from 1900 to 2000.
4 - Hi Putu, I would like to give additional remarks and modifications in order to make your essay develops better...
Writing FeedbackPutuariska - Jun 18, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 23, 2016
|Mining is tearing up our environment!
4 - Hi Katelyn, I can see that you have gathered a very comprehensive feedback from one of EssayForum contributors. I...
Writing Feedbackih8writing100 - Jun 21, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 23, 2016
|"teaching children at home is best for a child's development" - do you agree with this statement?
3 - Hi Vadim, below are my observations on your essay; - the length and physical presentation of the essay...
Writing FeedbackVadimKlimenko - Jun 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2016
|It is not necessary to attach the teacher's payment to the student's learning capacity
3 - Hi Bidhan, I would like to contribute in the enhancement of your essay. I focused on the last 2...
Writing Feedbackbidhan - Jun 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Estimated percentage of car trips by purpose and gender of drivers, 2005
6 - Hi Irvin, Here are some corrections: -This is a breakdown of the figure for the number -that W...
Writing FeedbackIrvinhi - Jun 1, 2016 / MaximKlopunov99 - Jun 23, 2016
|I strongly advocate that it is more preferable for students to study together, instead of alone
4 - Thanks for the compliment, justivy03. However, I think my vocabulary is not so strong and far from enough. ...
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Jun 18, 2016 / able_Person - Jun 23, 2016
|Writing task 2: Modern technology in work place. Disadvantages to relying too much on technology?
5 - paragraph 2, "a computer" change to" the computer" paragraph 3, "work to" change to "work with" . "a problem"...
Writing FeedbackKarunaTruong - Jun 22, 2016 / Wendy Li - Jun 22, 2016
|IELTS TASK1 percentages of students' attendance in four different secondary school categories
3 - Hi Huang, its good to have yet another member of the Essay Forum Family. In this analysis, we would...
Writing Feedbackyoucandoit - Jun 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2016
|Technological dependence - Social Science final exam
Writing FeedbackWendy Li - Jun 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2016
|Some causes of adults to get education and comparison of courses costs - in the charts
3 - Hi Nora, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website truly helpful...
Writing Feedbacknoura88 - Jun 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2016
|Movies and TV have a cumulative impact by unconsciously shape people's insights and behaviors
3 - HI Phoenix, first of all, thank you adding this website as your credible source of feedback in your writing...
Writing Feedbackzyber2222 - Jun 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2016
|Learning foreign language as early as possible for children future - ielts Task 2 Writing
3 - Hi Yon, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I am happy to WELCOME yet another member...
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Jun 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2016
|The Process of Produce Cement and Concentrate
3 - Hi Puja, thank you for making sure that you have included the diagram in your analysis. Below are my...
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jun 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2016
|Football World Cup and other sports allows people to release their patriotic emotions in a safe way.
3 - Hi Maxim, below are additional help that will hopefully enhance your essay. I will focus on the first 2...
Writing FeedbackMaximKlopunov99 - Jun 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2016
|Cement manufacturing process and produce concrete from cement
Writing Feedbackkurniarahmi - Jun 19, 2016 / souhail123 - Jun 22, 2016
|Florida. Someone correct for me this paragraph, i want to know the mistakes i had made.
Writing FeedbackAtchane - Jun 16, 2016 / souhail123 - Jun 22, 2016
|Comparison of children born by women in age from 40 to 44 in Australia
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jun 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 21, 2016
|The number of elderly people in several different states in the United Kingdom between 1985 and 2035
3 - Hi Adi, please find the corrections below and oh before I forget, for future writing reference, please post the...
Writing Feedbackadip - Jun 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 21, 2016
|What shows statistics about people aged over 64 years old in the United Kingdom?
2 - Hi Puja, below are additional help from my end. - The chart illustrates the proportion - It comparesabout...
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jun 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 21, 2016
|'To make concrete. First, we make an amalgam of materials' - IELTS Task 1 Process
Writing Feedbackfaisalrachmn - Jun 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 21, 2016
|Most people have been used to use those electronic gadgets to get in touch with their friends. Task2
Writing Feedbackscoutrabbit - Jun 12, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 21, 2016
|Writing task 2: using disciplinary in school to solve problems. Teachers or parents responsibility ?
2 - HI Truong, I would like to share a few insights to enhance your essay. - bullied unbelievably increased...
Writing FeedbackKarunaTruong - Jun 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 21, 2016
|Here's brief summary about me. I have lots of habits such as reading books, hang out with friends.
Writing Feedbackvyvyy_sfnr - Jun 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 20, 2016
|The most important thing the government should do to improve health care is to clean the environment
3 - Hi Natasha, I would like to provide additional insights on the first two paragraphs of your essay. -...
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Jun 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 20, 2016
|Computer can easily do basic math. Should children spend their time to learn advanced calculations?
3 - Hi Jaff, indeed WELCOME to the forum, it's always good to welcome yet another member of this very valuable...
Writing Feedbackmjafarpk - Jun 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 20, 2016
|The amount of hardness on television can be a worrying concern of people who care about children
2 - Hi Rahmi, here's additional help from my end. - Television has a negative impact on childrens growth. -...
Writing Feedbackkurniarahmi - Jun 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 20, 2016
|Cement making: limestone and clay are included in crusher and then pass through into three stages
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jun 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 20, 2016
|The historic (1985) and projected data (2035) of the population age in the United Kingdom
4 - Hi Rahmi, I would like to add a few modifications on your analysis. Before anything else, I would like...
Writing Feedbackkurniarahmi - Jun 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 20, 2016
|Elderly people in the British society - bar chart info.
5 - Hello Faisalrachmn In the bar chart shows the information about UK population prediction in 2035 and compared with...
Writing Feedbackfaisalrachmn - Jun 19, 2016 / pujakurniawan19 - Jun 19, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: THE SHOWING OF VIOLENCE ON TELEVISION HAS BAD INFLUENCE ON CHILDREN
2 - Grahyta, with regards to your essay, I would like to point out some of weaknesses that can possibly be...
Writing FeedbackGrahyta24 - Jun 19, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 19, 2016
|Nowadays, both the government and citizens are laying more emphasis on public health
5 - Thanks a lot for your quick reply. I understand your suggestion now. Hope to communicate with you soon....
Writing FeedbackAclily - Jun 18, 2016 / Aclily - Jun 19, 2016
|Parents less skilled, but are the best teacher, agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackzakitauhid25 - Jun 18, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Jun 19, 2016
|What do you think about advantage and disadvantage of living in a small community?
4 - In the past, peopl e who live in small community society are peacefullthe majority of extraordinary commune spent all...
Writing Feedbackzakitauhid25 - Jun 18, 2016 / pujakurniawan19 - Jun 19, 2016
|Effect of the Internet in human's live - information anytime and anywhere; IELTS TEST 2
2 - Putu, I would like to point out some of your weaknesses in your essay in order to strengthen your...
Writing FeedbackPutuariska - Jun 18, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 18, 2016
|'Appearance is a liar'. SAT-Writing: Style versus substance.
3 - Hi Natasha, first of all, your essay is quiet long for what is asked of the prompt. You seemed...
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Jun 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 18, 2016
|The graph applicates the gathered statistics of children born by women aged from 40-44 years old
2 - Hi zaki, these are some of my suggestions; The graph applicates() the gathered statis In 1981, four...
Writing Feedbackzakitauhid25 - Jun 18, 2016 / Nahid87 - Jun 18, 2016
|In the past, people who lived in a small society were peacefully, now they become more selfish
4 - Hi Faisal, I wiil try to help you with the correction your essay. They only know little about...
Writing Feedbackfaisalrachmn - Jun 18, 2016 / kurniarahmi - Jun 18, 2016
|Societies argue that the internet is a cutting-edge method to make their routines more comfortable
Writing Feedbackadip - Jun 18, 2016 / Putuariska - Jun 18, 2016
|In this modern era, money can buy anything, including individual gladness. Happiness vs money. IELTS
4 - In this modern era, money can buy anything=> you shouldn't use extreme words (anything, can)-> money would play a...
Writing Feedbackwahyu - Jun 17, 2016 / Helenbui - Jun 18, 2016
|Popularity of London attractions per month in summer 2013 (in thousands)
4 - Zaky, I agree with the Ichanpanst89's statements, so I would try to add some sentences ... Museum decreased...
Writing Feedbackzakitauhid25 - Jun 16, 2016 / pujakurniawan19 - Jun 18, 2016
|The line graph compares the contentment level of people on health care system in different countries
2 - What app Helen, your essay still need some reparations, i have suggestions to your introduction paragraph. you could...
Writing FeedbackHelenbui - Jun 17, 2016 / wahyu - Jun 17, 2016
|I'm convinced that parents aren't the best teacher; they are less professional than qualified tutors
4 - whats app mas kurniawan your essay is going to better than before, i have a suggestion to your conclusion...
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jun 16, 2016 / wahyu - Jun 17, 2016
|HE USED HIS LEGS TO WRITE HIS OWN DESTINY
Writing FeedbackKyominguyen1410 - Jun 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 16, 2016
|In the recent time, every business conducted by humans is easier because of technology.
3 - Hi Meireza, below are my suggestions with the focus on the last two paragraphs of the essay; -...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Jun 16, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 16, 2016
|The internet should be more tightly controlled by governments. Do you agree or disagree?
5 - Hi Le, welcome to the team :) Apart from above suggestions, I would like to point out your weakness...
Writing Feedbacktoiyeuco - Jun 16, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 16, 2016
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