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|GRE Argument essay: Recall on pet food
Writing Feedbackjustooridoori - Apr 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 19, 2016
|IELTS TASK2:Some people think personal happiness is directly related to economic success...
3 - Hi suxiaojing, your writing seems good. Here there are some suggestions to improve your score: Instead of saying: I...
Writing Feedbacksuxiaojing - Apr 19, 2016 / mormontre - Apr 19, 2016
|I do really appreciates for all comments and suggestions for my abstract draft.
Writing Feedbackakbartaufiq25 - Mar 26, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 19, 2016
|Local People Have Less Interest to Museum ___ IELTS Task 2
4 - Hi, ANSOR: You can mention some examples in this essay: like Louvre museum, which has thousands of famous...
Writing FeedbackANSOR99 - Apr 8, 2016 / suxiaojing - Apr 19, 2016
|Ielts T2 - space programmes. Is funding those activities a wise choice?
4 - Hi,Mormontre: I would like to offer you some ideas: 1.exploring the universe satisfies the curiosities and interests...
Writing Feedbackmormontre - Apr 18, 2016 / suxiaojing - Apr 19, 2016
|Essay about learning languages - English precisely - which is the primary language in many countries
3 - I agree with the above that you have some issues in your writing. I recommend you to simplify your...
Writing FeedbackArej - Apr 19, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - Apr 19, 2016
|The percentage of young people in the UK who choose to eat vegetarian diet over the past fifty years
2 - Hi Nabila, as seen in this analysis, you received a very comprehensive modification from our EF contributor and I...
Writing Feedbacknabila05 - Apr 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 19, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1: A construction in the island to improve the tourists facilities
3 - Anaguna, I did some contributions and corrections to your essay, especially on grammatical issues, punctuation, and word formation. You...
Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 10, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 19, 2016
|IELTS T2 on birth rate and predominance of aging people in the demographics
2 - Hello mormontre I applied some adjustments to the text so that it sounds better: According [...] According...
Writing Feedbackmormontre - Apr 18, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Apr 19, 2016
|The given charts represent the consequences of the questionnaire of teen erudition
2 - Hi, Dilnoza. Your writing is good but it will be perfect if you correct some phrases in your essay....
Writing FeedbackDilnoza_32 - Apr 14, 2016 / nabila05 - Apr 19, 2016
|The 60-year period brought some massive changes at the West Park Secondary School
2 - Hi, Baso. Here I want to give you some suggestions and corrections relating to your writing. Please mind the...
Writing FeedbackLa Baso - Apr 11, 2016 / nabila05 - Apr 18, 2016
|Some offices has put ban on smoking in workplace. What do you think?
6 - Hi there ! These are my few suggestions: 1. Additionally, smokers in public environments encourage the youngyouth to...
Writing Feedbackbehieli - Apr 14, 2016 / Tedd - Apr 18, 2016
|TASK 1 :The changes that have occurred in selected area, around school area
3 - Hi Rangga, here's additional entries from my end. - The changes that havehas occurred - in the selected...
Writing FeedbackHengki Yonathan - Apr 18, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 18, 2016
|IELTS_What do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and the society?
4 - Sophie: Hi, your essay is really understandable and realistic, but please dont use "I" more frequently, please try...
Writing Feedbacksophie77 - Apr 18, 2016 / suxiaojing - Apr 18, 2016
|The cycle of hydro-electric power generation classified by two important concepts - IELTS
3 - HI Rangga, I would like to share additional insights to your analysis. - generation is classified - ...
Writing FeedbackHengki Yonathan - Apr 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 18, 2016
|Some think that children should be obedient to the rules and do what the teachers want them to do
5 - Hi Sophie, it's good to hear words of appreciation, it's actually one thing that we look forward whenever we...
Writing Feedbacksophie77 - Apr 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 18, 2016
|It's crutial for students to understand concepts and ideas - faster learning, better understanding.
3 - @Ssakshijain It is great, finally I got a comprehensive review on my writing. Thanks a lot. I will...
Writing FeedbackCons13411 - Apr 17, 2016 / Cons13411 - Apr 18, 2016
|İs international languages important?
2 - 1. Also,same people believe that it is important to have a single language as an international official language while...
Writing FeedbackAsya12 - Apr 17, 2016 / sophie77 - Apr 17, 2016
|The diagram illustrates the process of rainwater circulation in order to be used for human's needs
3 - in fact, your task is less than 150 words. actually, 145 words I've checked it. you can extend...
Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016 / Hengki Yonathan - Apr 17, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors
5 - The pie charts depict the selling online shopping in terms of retail in New Zealand classified by four...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Apr 10, 2016 / Hengki Yonathan - Apr 17, 2016
|Task 1: spending income on three fast food categories in 1990
4 - The UK spending income on three fast food categories classified by high, average, and low income in 1990...
Writing FeedbackMimi07 - Apr 17, 2016 / Hengki Yonathan - Apr 17, 2016
|Task 1: Extended facilities in a college are demonstrated in the map.
3 - extended facilities in the next period planned by seven buildings including residential accommodation, sport complex, lecture halls,...
Writing FeedbackMimi07 - Apr 17, 2016 / Hengki Yonathan - Apr 17, 2016
|The differences in the arrangements of Woodward University over thirty one years from 1985 until now
3 - Maya, composing an IELTS task 1 writing is somewhat challenging, especially when it comes to map or diagram process....
Writing FeedbackMaya29 - Apr 17, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 17, 2016
|GRE - young people to not be advised to "follow your dreams," but to go for" worthy goals"
2 - Hello Robin, you writing is good and I can catch your idea inside it. However, you have to becareful...
Writing FeedbackROBINPHILIP - Apr 16, 2016 / tria25 - Apr 17, 2016
|The way in which chewing gum is made in terms of manufacturing process is presented in the diagram
2 - Hi Tria, please allow me to give you some suggestion chewing gum is boiled in high temperature water...
Writing Feedbacktria25 - Apr 17, 2016 / Mimi07 - Apr 17, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - Some alteration in Queen Mary Hospital
Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016 / Mimi07 - Apr 17, 2016
|IELTS TASK2: more children are accessing the internet unsupervised.
3 - Hello tugyts The text is quite understandable but you could use rephrasing some sentences as follows: The...
Writing Feedbacktugyts - Apr 17, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Apr 17, 2016
|Leisure time among different age groups - elderly people rarely undertake any sports or exercises
Writing Feedbackrahmat248 - Apr 6, 2016 / Mimi07 - Apr 17, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: The preferable job is better for the humans' life
4 - your opinion is very well and being seperated regularly each paragraph but you did not reach the point of...
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 11, 2016 / tugyts - Apr 17, 2016
|University or college is the key for us to get a good job - great environment to learn soft skills
Writing Feedbackwhatever20 - Apr 3, 2016 / Lunazimnavi11 - Apr 17, 2016
|Task 1: The manufacturing process for making paper
Writing FeedbackLunazimnavi11 - Apr 17, 2016 / Maya29 - Apr 17, 2016
|Is the happiness of people life depend on their job or others factors?
5 - Hi writer, I saw in your essay, several words about subject and verb agreement that already have been corrected...
Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 1, 2016 / Lunazimnavi11 - Apr 17, 2016
|The internet has become a need people, do you agree?
Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 2, 2016 / Lunazimnavi11 - Apr 17, 2016
|Task 1: The comparison of five favourite sports between two age groups of school aged boys
4 - Hello Maya, As a learner, I attempted to analyse your essay and I found some confusing sentence. ...
Writing FeedbackMaya29 - Apr 15, 2016 / Lunazimnavi11 - Apr 17, 2016
|IELTS on art and kids - not sure what to check here. It seems the opinion is not so clear, isn't it?
2 - I beg your permission to give some suggestiona for your writing improvement. if forced to do painting...
Writing Feedbackmormontre - Apr 16, 2016 / tria25 - Apr 17, 2016
|Offences that are commited using a computer are more and more common this days..
4 - Hello tugyts, I red your essay and found several misspelling words, also about the punctuation. - against -...
Writing Feedbacktugyts - Apr 15, 2016 / Lunazimnavi11 - Apr 17, 2016
|The recorded and forcasted population data and percentage of people aged above 75 years
4 - Hei Hengki. I will give a suggestion to paraphrase: The statistics of population and percentage of people...
Writing FeedbackHengki Yonathan - Apr 15, 2016 / Lunazimnavi11 - Apr 17, 2016
|The production stages of chewing gum are illustrated by the process flow diagram.
3 - Hi Nabila, You have a great potency on writing since your writing is easy to understand. Here I want...
Writing Feedbacknabila05 - Apr 16, 2016 / Maya29 - Apr 17, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - The chart below gives information about Southland's main export
4 - Hi Rere, I would like to say that there are few things you should consider in composing Writing Task...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Apr 10, 2016 / nabila05 - Apr 16, 2016
|The most popular transport in Edmonton. Cars represent more than 2/5 of all transportation types.
4 - Hi, Ester. I would like to say that you actually have a great potential in writing because your writing...
Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016 / nabila05 - Apr 16, 2016
|IELTS writing Task 1 : The Employment of Both Sexes by Occupation in UK in 2005
3 - Lily, let me try to give you some feedback regarding to your Task Achievement, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resource,...
Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 16, 2016
|Task 1: The global water consumption and the comparison of water usage in Brazil and Congo
2 - Maya, I would like to say that you actually have a great potential in writing. You need to improve...
Writing FeedbackMaya29 - Apr 16, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 16, 2016
|The number of movies description in India, Ireland, New Zealand, and Japan categorised in four types
Writing Feedbacktria25 - Apr 15, 2016 / OSM - Apr 16, 2016
|West Park changes: buildings repaired, science block in housing area, sport field, larger car park..
3 - Hi Rere, for this particular analysis, I must say that you nailed, it, you made sure that the sentence...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Apr 10, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 16, 2016
|In the rainwater reusing process water treatment place and the tank supply water to a household
3 - Wiwik, first of all, I would like to remind you that you are obliged to upload the picture for...
Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 16, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: Living alone is an essential issue recently
Writing Feedbackichanpants89 - Apr 7, 2016 / mormontre - Apr 16, 2016
|The table and pie chart show the both sexes consumer satisfaction of a new shopping location in NZ
3 - Lily, there are many things that you should consider. Fortunately, one of them was already given by wahyu regarding...
Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Apr 9, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 16, 2016
|The Oldest People Love To See Cinema ___ IELTS Task 1
Writing FeedbackANSOR99 - Apr 4, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 16, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : Question type agree and disagree - solution for health problems and illness
3 - Thank you so very much :) That's the reason in last attempt I scored just 4.5 bands in writing....
Writing FeedbackAisha2 - Apr 16, 2016 / Aisha2 - Apr 16, 2016
|Task 1, aming to score 8 - sedimentary coastlines forming process
2 - Hi Mara, I think it will be useful if you also attach the images of the process you described....
Writing Feedbackmormontre - Apr 15, 2016 / Maya29 - Apr 15, 2016
|Arts-based subjects should be considered in the curriculum to enhance their academic performance
2 - Hi Fudla.. Your writing is a good job. However, I would give you suggestions to improve this. I found...
Writing FeedbackHadiyati Fudla - Apr 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Apr 15, 2016
|Task 1: Differences coal consumption among four sector in UK from 1975 to 2000
4 - Hi Mimi, please allow me to give you some suggestions: the was a dramatic (There was a dramatic)...
Writing FeedbackMimi07 - Apr 15, 2016 / Maya29 - Apr 15, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 - More people are complaining about obesity, particularly the consumption of junk food.
7 - hello :) if you prepare for ielts essay , you could be carefull at each paragraph and you should...
Writing Feedbackmark pro - Apr 11, 2016 / tugyts - Apr 15, 2016
|Task 1: The percentage of seven leisure activities; needlework not as popular as watching TV/DVDs
2 - Hi Ivan, WELCOME to Essay Forum, as I read your analysis, I must say that it is written fairly...
Writing FeedbackLunazimnavi11 - Apr 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 15, 2016
|How the extensive migration affects the world?
3 - Hi Elahe, here's a few additional insights from my side. - is far from evenreaching throughout -...
Writing Feedbackbehieli - Apr 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 15, 2016
|Solving for children concentrate in school
Writing FeedbackMelisakaln - Apr 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 15, 2016
|Young drivers should complete a safe driving education course before being licensed to drive
7 - Thanks @justivy03, I'll do my best. It will be great to receive your suggestions on my further essays. ...
Writing Feedbackbehieli - Apr 14, 2016 / behieli - Apr 15, 2016
|There is a tendency of disinterest toward museums and historical sites by local people
4 - @JanFan and @behieli Thank you very much for your answers and suggestions) now i can see all drawbacks in...
Writing Feedbackasyaaa550 - Apr 14, 2016 / asyaaa550 - Apr 15, 2016
|One set fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient.
5 - Hi Tugba, I may not be sure of my answer, as I'm nowhere near an EILTS inspector, however, if...
Writing Feedbacktugyts - Apr 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 15, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2- Avoid the negative effect of the electronic invention
2 - Hi Ester, some additional help from my side. 2nd paragraph - Nowadays, becomebecoming healthy - is not...
Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 14, 2016
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