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|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Why Taking Part-time Job for Teenager are Beneficials?
4 - Hy, Febry. I would like to give some suggestions :) ... effective ways for young adult to prepare...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 22, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Who Should Take Responsibility for Juvenile Attitude
3 - Febri, by doing many readings on many of your essays, I do realize something. The problems which made your...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 22, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 23, 2016
|Many advertisements are greatly exaggerated, thus, causing some untruths in the products
3 - Hi Teck Hui, it is a pleasure to read your essay. It is imperative to mention your standpoint in...
Writing FeedbackTheodore - May 23, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Competitive or Cooperative? Is competition the key to survive?
3 - Hi Febriyani, here's some additional remarks to your writing practice. - In summaryconclusion ( I think this is...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 23, 2016 / justivy03 - May 23, 2016
|Argumentative Essay - "Does Technology Make Us More Alone or More Connected to the World?" Comments?
3 - Hi Michael, well, you hoped that your readers enjoy reading the essay and I must say, I did enjoy...
Writing Feedbackmwentworth18 - May 19, 2016 / justivy03 - May 23, 2016
|Health Concerns and the Zika Virus
3 - Hi Becky, I believe this writing tasks is more of a research paper, I hope I'm right, anyway, for...
Writing Feedbackwabewebejole01 - May 21, 2016 / justivy03 - May 23, 2016
|It appears that the youth crime rate have experienced a significant increase to the alarming level
2 - Hi Ilmy, glad to read your essay, here are some corrections for you, keep on writing. Cheer! Undoubtedly,...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 22, 2016 / Novi - May 23, 2016
|IELTS - Writing Task 2 The characteristic we are born will have many much more influence on our pers
4 - Ilmi, your efforts to get a high score in IELTS writing is remarkable. I saw that you almost upload...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 22, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - May 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Having Enjoyable Life or Earning Much Money, Which One Do You Prefer?
2 - ... good life will be determined by the quantity amounts of money that people they earn through a fine...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 22, 2016 / Ext7484 - May 22, 2016
|What do you do for good health? People's awareness is rising.
3 - Hi, Yuting! Here i want to give several suggestions to your writing. Paragraph 1 there are more and...
Writing Feedbackyuting80 - May 22, 2016 / pebzna12 - May 22, 2016
|Different views about whether children experience competitions or not to be a well-qualified adult.
2 - Hello, Ilmi! Again, I'm going to share several points to you. 2nd Paragraph ... work harder and improve...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 22, 2016 / pebzna12 - May 22, 2016
|These days, advertising for commercial use appears to boost the volume of sales. IELTS
4 - Hi, Ilmi! Here are my suggestions. Paragraph 1 A huge number of people vaying to buy such kind...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 20, 2016 / pebzna12 - May 22, 2016
|IELTS - Technological advances in learning methods
3 - hi zarnovi paragraph 1 I would argue that directly attendattending the general lecture directly will deliver much more...
Writing Feedbackzarnovi - May 22, 2016 / aviniwirastri - May 22, 2016
|Opinion Editorial - The Rise of a Phoenix
9 - Wow, those are all great points. Some of those grammatical errors I didn't even notice. I'm taking everything suggested...
Writing FeedbackLlamaGod - Apr 22, 2016 / LlamaGod - May 21, 2016
|TOEFL essay for rating - why attend University?
6 - In the third paragraph, find another word for "diversities" as it probably should not be used as a noun....
Writing FeedbackJoydoc - May 16, 2016 / AndrewT97 - May 21, 2016
|The annual expenditures for five purposes in a British school in three different years
4 - Greetings, Yichieh Lee. Overall, I can follow the descriptions since you have written. However, there are some slightly correction...
Writing Feedbackyichiehli - May 16, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 21, 2016
|The percentage of kinds of transport used and the reasoning behind the use of a vehicle in Edmonton
3 - Good afternoon, PEBZNA12. Thank you for sharing your analysis. I enjoyed reading it. To improve the flow of the...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 15, 2016 / EditorPal - May 20, 2016
|Main causes contributing to make farmable land degraded; three continents were adversely affected
3 - Hy Mersad, I would like to suggest you to use transitional expressing, it will eases to read and understand...
Writing Feedbackmersad - May 20, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 20, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - Nowadays, a lot of charities and organizations have set up a number of days name
3 - Hi Rere, with this particular essay, I must say that I enjoyed reading it, aside from the very minor...
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - May 5, 2016 / justivy03 - May 20, 2016
|To have several careers and then further education will be something that continues throughout life?
Writing FeedbackMaximKlopunov99 - May 5, 2016 / justivy03 - May 20, 2016
|Classes in Education - who should do the talking? Edit my TOEFL writing
3 - Hi Qin, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope that you find this website credible...
Writing Feedbackqinwei0515 - May 5, 2016 / justivy03 - May 20, 2016
|The Disappearance of Nurses. Nursing Essay as to why nurses are fleeing from the medical field
2 - Hi Daylin, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website useful to...
Writing FeedbackDaylin - May 5, 2016 / justivy03 - May 20, 2016
|IELTS (ESSAY) - Education topic (universal and special education)
3 - Hi Hoon, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you keep on writing and posting your projects and...
Writing FeedbackHoon - May 12, 2016 / justivy03 - May 20, 2016
|The bar chart illustrates the figure for tourists travelling through three major airports in NYC
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - May 14, 2016 / justivy03 - May 20, 2016
|The total number of pupils in the UK who obtained qualifications for English Language Teachers
4 - Hi, Novi. Here is my suggestion for your writing. The first paragraph - in two academic years, between...
Writing FeedbackNovi - May 17, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 20, 2016
|PROBLEM RELATED TO SMOKING AND A WAY TO OVERCOME - IELTS TASK 2
3 - Slight improvements: - In recent decades - lifestyles have forced - parents spend more time working - Such...
Writing Feedbackdevi27 - May 19, 2016 / eddies - May 19, 2016
|Information about the number of students who succeed on their high school test in 2010/2011
4 - Hy, Patric Here is my feedback for your writing task The represented bar chart illustrates information...
Writing Feedbackpatricrioo - May 17, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - May 19, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1. Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily
3 - Hi Maxim, here's another take on your analysis. - founded in 1868 near the main road. - obtained(...
Writing FeedbackMaximKlopunov99 - May 19, 2016 / justivy03 - May 19, 2016
|In prevailing days, it is a ubiquitous concern that there is an ascended dependence on cars.
5 - Hi Azamat, once again, thank you for appreciating our work here on EF and when it comes to the...
Writing FeedbackAzamat98 - May 18, 2016 / justivy03 - May 19, 2016
|IELTS: Writing Task 2 : Problem and Solutions Of Motorways. (Need 6 bands)
5 - Hello, Mohammad, Here are my corrections. Hope they will be useful. -add some parenthesis in the body...
Writing Feedbackzohaib - May 17, 2016 / MaximKlopunov99 - May 19, 2016
|Number of students staying in the UK who gained TEFL and Cambridge UCLES CELTA training qualificati
3 - Hi Aulia, here's additional insights to your analysis. - Overall, it can be seen that total the proportion...
Writing FeedbackUvyL26 - May 18, 2016 / justivy03 - May 19, 2016
|Sensitive issue of smoking bans - smoker and non-smoker have strong argument about their rights.
4 - Hai Marsudi,,to understand what prompt instructed in your essay well, I strongly suggest you to address the question in...
Writing Feedbackmarsudiwjy07 - May 18, 2016 / devi27 - May 18, 2016
|WRITING TASK 2 [Problem-Solving] : More working families these days are in favor of fast food
5 - Hi needless to say, introductory paragraph is the most essential part in essay writing task two as this will...
Writing FeedbackHusnul28 - May 18, 2016 / devi27 - May 18, 2016
|TABLE - TEFL and Cambridge UCLES CELTA & other degrees for students living in the UK
3 - Hi Patric, below are my suggestions to your analysis. - The represented table reveals information - about the...
Writing Feedbackpatricrioo - May 17, 2016 / justivy03 - May 18, 2016
|Girls did better than boys in almost all of the competency exams subjects, besides geography.
2 - Hi Nurul, here's another take on your analysis. - The represented chart providespresents the information - completely done...
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - May 17, 2016 / justivy03 - May 18, 2016
|TASK 1: two main parts in the steam production: nuclear reactor and the heat exchanger. DIAGRAM
3 - Hi Aulia, here's a closer look at your analysis. - that the steam process - is producesproduced...
Writing FeedbackUvyL26 - May 17, 2016 / justivy03 - May 18, 2016
|This representative table provides info on the quantity of students qualified for teaching English
2 - Mei, your efforts in polishing your writing is a remarkable one. I noticed that you posted more than two...
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - May 17, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - May 18, 2016
|This diagram illustrates how a gas cooled nuclear reactor work to produce the steam
5 - Hello, Meirama, -I advise you to avoid using Past Simple in the desrciption of such diagrams, also try...
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - May 17, 2016 / MaximKlopunov99 - May 18, 2016
|IELTS1 - MAP - Nuclear Reactor. The making process of steam using a gas-cooled nuclear reactor.
3 - Hi Patric, here's a few suggestions for your analysis. - The represented diagram below illustrates - the process...
Writing Feedbackpatricrioo - May 17, 2016 / justivy03 - May 18, 2016
|TASK 1 ; Qualifications for English Language Teachers obtained 2007/8 and 2008/9, UK
3 - Hi Furqada, the analysis you made is written fairly well, you made sure that the information transpired in your...
Writing FeedbackBtihbk11 - May 17, 2016 / justivy03 - May 18, 2016
|IELTS: The presented diagram depicts the steam production process using a gas cooled nuclear reactor
Writing FeedbackNovi - May 17, 2016 / justivy03 - May 18, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people
3 - Hi Mr. Mao, it is my feedback - there are some grammatical errors in your writing practice, but...
Writing Feedbackismawan - May 17, 2016 / UvyL26 - May 17, 2016
|IELTS-Task 1- The imprisonment percentage comparison between man and woman
5 - hi again novi. i found some noticeable mistakes here, and hopefully we can improved our skill after found our...
Writing FeedbackNovi - May 16, 2016 / Meirama91 - May 17, 2016
|Students got best results in Computer Science, Mathematics, and Foreign Languages - competency exams
4 - hello novi, i will give you some suggestion from my perspective, hopefully it'll help you. A closer...
Writing FeedbackNovi - May 17, 2016 / Meirama91 - May 17, 2016
|Energy usage in Australia; proportion of House Equipment Category / greenhouse gas emissions
4 - Hi Furqanda, a warm welcome to you from essay from. Actually, im interested in your title, so I come...
Writing FeedbackBtihbk11 - May 8, 2016 / patricrioo - May 17, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) - How many people used 3 major airports in NYC during their travel?
3 - Hi Febriyani, here's another take on your analysis. - travelers who used three - of passenger numbers...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 15, 2016 / justivy03 - May 17, 2016
|Prospective parents should be required to get licenses to have children. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing FeedbackAbdulhay - May 15, 2016 / justivy03 - May 17, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) - The Comparison of Montly Expenditures in Australia between 1991 and 2001
4 - Hi Febriyani, glad to say hello to you Here some corrections for you, lets learn each other ......
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - May 15, 2016 / Novi - May 17, 2016
|TASK 1- BAR CHART- the percentage of students who passed their exam, by subject and gender
5 - ... the percentage of boys and girls who succeed success from their high school competency ... It is noticeable...
Writing FeedbackUvyL26 - May 17, 2016 / Btihbk11 - May 17, 2016
|International communication online. Distance is not a main problem in connecting people anymore.
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Apr 19, 2016 / ismawan - May 17, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1- The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand
3 - Hi,pak Mao. welcome to the essay forum. I hope you enjoy to post your writing practice. I want...
Writing Feedbackismawan - May 17, 2016 / UvyL26 - May 17, 2016
|IELTS 1; the percentage of persons arrested during 5 years / the reasons
3 - Hi siti, I personally think that your overview and comparison are not yet clear. So, I write a few...
Writing FeedbackSiti Hatikasari - May 16, 2016 / patricrioo - May 17, 2016
|The proportion of the pass rate in the student competency test based on subjects and genders 2010-11
3 - Hi Furqanda, here's another take on your analysis. - of the pass( no need to indicate timeline )...
Writing FeedbackBtihbk11 - May 17, 2016 / justivy03 - May 17, 2016
|MIX CHART- Number of people who broke the law in the couple years ending 1994 and reasons of it
3 - Hi Patric, here's another take on your analysis. - The represented graphs reveal the - endedending in 1994....
Writing Feedbackpatricrioo - May 16, 2016 / justivy03 - May 17, 2016
|IELTS - TASK 1 - THE COMBINING CHART OF PERSON ARRESTED IN FIVE YEARS AND THE MOST REASON
3 - Hi Nurul. Welcome to Essay Forum, Nurul. you trust me that this medium will help you to improve your...
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - May 16, 2016 / akbarmappiare - May 17, 2016
|IELTS9-TASK1-ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050...
2 - Hi mersad, I personally love both essays. Still, I prefer to the first version. In the first essay, I...
Writing Feedbackmersad - May 16, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - May 16, 2016
|IELTS 1- PIE and BAR CHARTS - proportion of male and female arrested in five years ending 1994 (%)
3 - Hi Aulia, glad to have a partner for strengthen the IELTS skills together. Lets bolster each other! :) ...
Writing FeedbackUvyL26 - May 16, 2016 / patricrioo - May 16, 2016
|"Bora-Bora" - I need to impove my travel blog! How?
4 - you're welcome. I read your writing once again to put more comments but the punctuation and typo drew my...
Writing FeedbackYavinkoo - May 16, 2016 / mersad - May 16, 2016
|Some people like doing work by hand. Others prefer using machines. Which do you prefer?
2 - Osamu, welcome to EssayForum :) This is the remarkable place to enhance writing skills by doing peer-corrections towards other...
Writing FeedbackOSM - May 16, 2016 / ichanpants89 - May 16, 2016
|Nowadays computers are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes...
Writing FeedbackMaximKlopunov99 - May 15, 2016 / Sawsana - May 16, 2016
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