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|In the past, people who lived in a small society were peacefully, now they become more selfish
4 - Hi Faisal, I wiil try to help you with the correction your essay. They only know little about...
Writing Feedbackfaisalrachmn - Jun 18, 2016 / kurniarahmi - Jun 18, 2016
|Societies argue that the internet is a cutting-edge method to make their routines more comfortable
Writing Feedbackadip - Jun 18, 2016 / Putuariska - Jun 18, 2016
|In this modern era, money can buy anything, including individual gladness. Happiness vs money. IELTS
4 - In this modern era, money can buy anything=> you shouldn't use extreme words (anything, can)-> money would play a...
Writing Feedbackwahyu - Jun 17, 2016 / Helenbui - Jun 18, 2016
|Popularity of London attractions per month in summer 2013 (in thousands)
4 - Zaky, I agree with the Ichanpanst89's statements, so I would try to add some sentences ... Museum decreased...
Writing Feedbackzakitauhid25 - Jun 16, 2016 / pujakurniawan19 - Jun 18, 2016
|The line graph compares the contentment level of people on health care system in different countries
2 - What app Helen, your essay still need some reparations, i have suggestions to your introduction paragraph. you could...
Writing FeedbackHelenbui - Jun 17, 2016 / wahyu - Jun 17, 2016
|I'm convinced that parents aren't the best teacher; they are less professional than qualified tutors
4 - whats app mas kurniawan your essay is going to better than before, i have a suggestion to your conclusion...
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jun 16, 2016 / wahyu - Jun 17, 2016
|HE USED HIS LEGS TO WRITE HIS OWN DESTINY
Writing FeedbackKyominguyen1410 - Jun 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 16, 2016
|In the recent time, every business conducted by humans is easier because of technology.
3 - Hi Meireza, below are my suggestions with the focus on the last two paragraphs of the essay; -...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Jun 16, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 16, 2016
|The internet should be more tightly controlled by governments. Do you agree or disagree?
5 - Hi Le, welcome to the team :) Apart from above suggestions, I would like to point out your weakness...
Writing Feedbacktoiyeuco - Jun 16, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 16, 2016
|How Do Movies Influence people's behavior
2 - Hi Levia, below are some corrections that will hopefully provide the needed modification for your essay. First paragraph...
Writing Feedbackemmanuellalevia - Jun 16, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 16, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 - Advertisements (problems & solutions)
2 - Hi yvonnelee, welcome to the EssayForurm team :) I am really grateful to see many new members everyday. This...
Writing Feedbackyvonnelee89 - Jun 16, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 16, 2016
|[Toefl] Should students take out student loans to avoid working while studying.
3 - Hi Phoung, i have few additional insights that will hopefully help you in your revision and future articles. ...
Writing Feedbackphanhblue2007 - Jun 16, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 16, 2016
|Having a good college roommate will unquestionably make our college life more colorful and joyful
3 - Thank you for these great advices! I did not notice this issue until you pointed it out for me....
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Jun 16, 2016 / able_Person - Jun 16, 2016
|Children should be encouraged to study a foreign language from elementary schools already
4 - Hi ahmad_zuli. I think that you should focus more on your grammar, as I did notice quite a few...
Writing Feedbackahmad_zuli - Jun 15, 2016 / phanhblue2007 - Jun 16, 2016
|Visitors Ratio for Three London Museums in Summer 2013
3 - Puja, I can see that some of your friends were conveying their feedback related to grammatical range and accuracy...
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jun 16, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 16, 2016
|An essay on reading and writing - how to improve language skills?
Writing Feedbacklacuspendragon - Jun 11, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - Jun 16, 2016
|Comparison of Visitors per Month in Three London Museum
3 - Hi Rahmi, below are additional modifications that will hopefully help you in your revision. - to September in...
Writing Feedbackkurniarahmi - Jun 16, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 16, 2016
|The London museum guest from June 2013 until September
2 - The line graph shows the London museum guest from June 2013 until September 2013 . Overall, British museum was...
Writing Feedbackfaisalrachmn - Jun 16, 2016 / pujakurniawan19 - Jun 16, 2016
|IELTS Task 2, Many employees may work at home the modern technology
5 - hallo wahyu. look at your essay i think you are not get it what question mean. you explain too...
Writing Feedbackwahyu - Jun 14, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 15, 2016
|The media should prefer to show ordinary people's life than celebrities's life
3 - hallo @Grahyta24 welcome to essay forum. I think your essay is writing task 2 for ielts based on the...
Writing FeedbackGrahyta24 - Jun 14, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 15, 2016
|The best way to reduce the number of traffic accidents is to raise age limit for the younger drivers
Writing FeedbackAlara - Jun 11, 2016 / able_Person - Jun 15, 2016
|Toefl: Television, specially movies, as a first innovative technology, impacts people's life
2 - Nahid, undoubtedly that your essay organization is still good. You are able to maintain well-structured sentences. Yet, it seems...
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - Jun 15, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 15, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - minimalize car usage, why and how?
5 - #CONCLUSION whats app Meirama your essay is good, i have a suggestion to your conclusion paragraph : you can...
Writing FeedbackMeirama91 - Jun 2, 2016 / wahyu - Jun 14, 2016
|Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday tha
4 - Although a certain conclusion cannot be made, many people think that similar tasks are better due to increasing of...
Writing FeedbackDorsa20 - Jun 11, 2016 / Grahyta24 - Jun 14, 2016
|Composition: No future for public transport? It will become a big issue in the future.
3 - Hi Yu, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I have some additional insights that will hopefully help strengthen your...
Writing Feedbackerica0922tw - Jun 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 14, 2016
|Toefl: Being at concert or sport event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television.
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - Jun 8, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 13, 2016
|Help proofread on a section of my Toefl essay "teachers should attend courses every 5 years."
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Jun 6, 2016 / natasha_139 - Jun 12, 2016
|Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do y
NEW - Although a certain conclusion cannot be made, many people think that students should not rely on money, while others...
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|Same curriculum across the nation will have detrimental effect upon the economic and human growth
Writing Feedbackanurag21 - Jun 9, 2016 / anurag21 - Jun 10, 2016
|TOEFL - Writing based on knowledge and experience - TOEFL in 2 days
Writing FeedbackitsElia - Jun 8, 2016 / itsElia - Jun 9, 2016
|Money is the key to buying things so that having a good job is extremely necessary for all people
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important aspect of a job is the money...
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|Computers are increasingly used in education, in which area computers more important
Writing Feedbackwahyu - Jun 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 9, 2016
|Scientific activities should be implemented and managed by the governments, humans cloning at least.
2 - Hey Vanessa, you did write very well in few sentences but however, you lost track in some. If you...
Writing Feedbackvanessa131 - Jun 8, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Jun 8, 2016
|IELTS Task 1. The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad bet
2 - Hi Zarina, welcome to the EssayForum! We are here to give you accurate and constructive feedbacks toward all members...
Writing Feedbackkzvrinv - Jun 8, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - Jun 8, 2016
|IELTS Task 2, school life is stressful and tiring hence after their graduation.
2 - Hello wahyu To make the text more refined, I suggest you apply the following adjustments/corrections: tiring [...]....
Writing Feedbackwahyu - Jun 8, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Jun 8, 2016
|Task 1: The proportion of goods exports in EU countries
2 - Maya, it is nice to see your writing again after a long absence. The descriptions below are my contribution...
Writing FeedbackMaya29 - Jun 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 8, 2016
|Task 1 : The root causes of getting broken-heart
Writing FeedbackKholil - Jun 6, 2016 / Kholil - Jun 7, 2016
|Essay About the Benefits of the Autonomous Cars- Help Proofread
Writing FeedbackKyle5275 - Jun 7, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 7, 2016
|Agricultural sector has the largest consumption of water in 5 continents except North America
Writing FeedbackHeaven1 - Jun 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 6, 2016
|SUPERMAN VS BATMAN: DAWN OF JUSTICE AND AMERICAN CAPITAIN: CIVIL WAR - TWO FILMS THAT YOU HAVE SEEN
Writing Feedbackhanzy48 - Jun 6, 2016 / lylreaganmac - Jun 6, 2016
|Essay about generation Y or millennials
Writing FeedbackAof - Jun 6, 2016 / Aof - Jun 6, 2016
|Only governments and large companies can make a difference; Task 2
2 - Lily, I can see that you have similar problems with your previous essay, and I would like to help...
Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Jun 5, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 6, 2016
|Direct communication is better than indirect communication such as letters, emails, and phone calls
3 - Lily, I would like to try to help you by assessing your essay based on 4 scoring criteria that...
Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Jun 5, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 6, 2016
|Increased the average human life span is the main reason of population aging.
3 - Thank you Ichan, yes unfortunately it takes about 50 minutes which is not appropriate for toefl exam...
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - Jun 5, 2016 / Nahid87 - Jun 5, 2016
|Teenagers know what is best for them
2 - Cara, welcome to the EssayForum team! I hope you can find our feedback is fruitful towards your development in...
Writing FeedbackCARApck - Jun 5, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 5, 2016
|A comparison of people's sense towards crime and actual likelihood to be a victim - IELTS1
4 - Meireza, aside from others' feedback, I would like to suggest you that instead of separating "A comparison of ........................
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Jun 4, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jun 5, 2016
|NARRATIVE essay: A MISTAKE THAT TAUGHT ME AN IMPORTANT LESSON
Writing Feedbackhanzy48 - Jun 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 5, 2016
|The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised - a lot of species come under threat.
NEW - The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised as increasing numbers of species come under threat. What can...
Writing Feedbacksalam97 - Jun 5, 2016 / — -
|A leader should be a good speechmaker to convince people and a good listener of different opinions
Writing Feedbackmean_n90 - Jun 2, 2016 / hanzy48 - Jun 5, 2016
|Imagination is a more valuable asset than experience (GRE topic)
8 - No worries at all Sang, i hope you do follow through with the corrections We suggested here on EF....
Writing Feedbackdudtkd85 - Jun 2, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2016
|When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is point
3 - Is it an essay for IELTS of TOEFL? Please, edit your post and add this information. Also, include the...
Writing FeedbackAzamat98 - Jun 4, 2016 / rods2292 - Jun 4, 2016
|I agree with the statement that art and music should be learned in school
5 - This can be a very good paradigm of writing! However, you could fortify it even further, in case, you...
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - Jun 2, 2016 / Azamat98 - Jun 4, 2016
|GRE prompt ( argument ): Sufficient evidences for a small scale business loan ?
2 - ... the jazz music club cannot expect that much numbersmanyof jazz music fans, since an indigenous music club mostly...
Writing FeedbackROBINPHILIP - Jun 3, 2016 / lylreaganmac - Jun 3, 2016
|In my opinion foreign visitors should be given the choice to follow the local customs or behaviours
4 - hello theodore ! here some correction for you Tourism has become significantly vital to the variouscountries' economy ...
Writing FeedbackTheodore - May 31, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 2, 2016
|The United States became the most frequent winner of the hot-dog eating contest within two years
5 - Dear beauty17, The bar graph provides information about Nathan's hot dog eating contest which is conducted in Brooklyn's Coney...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Jun 1, 2016 / SHanafi - Jun 2, 2016
|EFFECT OF VIOLENCE ON TELEVISON TO CHILDRENS - IELTS 2
3 - Hi Meireza, here's additional assistance form my end. - The advancement of - technology ea ffects -...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Jun 1, 2016 / justivy03 - Jun 2, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (PROBLEM OF FAST FOOD FOR CHILDREN AND HOW TO COPE THAT PROBLEM)
2 - Helo @rasedasda24 welcome to essay forum! For the first time i will remind you about the rule in this...
Writing Feedbackrasedasda24 - Jun 1, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 1, 2016
|Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher.
Writing FeedbackNahid87 - May 30, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 1, 2016
|Should drug addicts be jailed or rehabilitated? discuss both views and give your opinion
2 - hola levictore19, welcome to EssayForum team! :) This is a remarkable place to share all about essay writing, especially...
Writing Feedbacklevictoire19 - Jun 1, 2016 / Fadli_14 - Jun 1, 2016
|Four countries: US, Japan, Mexico and Germany scored big in the Hot Dog Eating Contest
4 - Hallo fadli, welcome to essay forum! It is nice to read your writing task 1. Especially your grammatical...
Writing FeedbackFadli_14 - May 31, 2016 / Beauty17 - Jun 1, 2016
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