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|Most Americans Think Burgers Are Healthy
3 - It is my suggestion: ... Americans who had ordered a tasty burgertasty burgers instead of healthful ... As...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 15, 2016 / swr10 - Sep 16, 2016
|The Old Issues : Gender and Education as Opposite of Globalisation Era.
3 - Yo! here are some feedbacks i got for your essay 1)The the discrimination is an irrelevant in...
Writing FeedbackFirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 15, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 16, 2016
|Potential positions which are being inspected for the construction of a new supermarket in Garlsdon
2 - The given mapthe map show compares two potential positions ... ... the first site (S1) is was located...
Writing FeedbackWindvalley - Sep 15, 2016 / Terminal23 - Sep 16, 2016
|Some people say that words have stronger power than actions
2 - Namely, people need to havesome experience to be aware ... ... why his words are so impressive is...
Writing FeedbackYuyahhhh - Sep 15, 2016 / Terminal23 - Sep 16, 2016
|Animal Rights : a contradictive perspectives about The Rule
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 15, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 16, 2016
|Too much, too young should schooling start at age
Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 15, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 16, 2016
|Rita Pierson: Every kid needs a champion
3 - Hi, You did a good job in your writing. You start it with an opening sentence(Creating bond with all...
Writing Feedbackbung ilham - Sep 15, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 16, 2016
|Five - second rule revealed (summary)
3 - Hi Hujjatul. I left the comment for you, hope it can help. Overyone surely is familiar with this...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 15, 2016 / ibal28 - Sep 16, 2016
|Writing Task 1 Student Cambridge Books- Travelling to work in Houston, Texas
4 - Hi Fadhil! Sharing is fun, right? The followings are my humble comments: - The table gives information (besides...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 15, 2016 / Fitri12 - Sep 16, 2016
|Writting Task 1 the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in ten years
2 - Hi Shandy.. I am delighted to read your writing. In this moment, let me help you to finalize yours....
Writing Feedbackarisandy14 - Sep 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 16, 2016
|Successful performance is not merely physics, it's also a multitude combination of supporting skills
3 - Hi Dhyla.. These are a few suggestions for you to finalize this summary Check my notes and deal with...
Writing Feedbackdils - Sep 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 16, 2016
|Contrasting of energy production in France between 1995 and 2005
2 - The pie charts shows compareS kinds of energy THE PERCENTAGES OF FOSSIL FUELS PRODUCED in Ff rance between...
Writing FeedbackBAMS14 - Sep 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 16, 2016
|Bill Gates tried to elaborate several problems that humanity is faced all over the world
2 - Hello @fadhilmd25, I would like to give some suggestion for your writing. Here my advice: 1. .......
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 15, 2016 / abdasyari93 - Sep 15, 2016
|Quickly scanning and noticing tracking objects - an athlete's recipe for success
2 - aloha Bams, here are my thoughts: Being a good athlete just does not only depend on muscles, but...
Writing FeedbackBAMS14 - Sep 15, 2016 / bung ilham - Sep 15, 2016
|The least popular transportation chosen by the workers is cycling or walking
4 - Hi Kiki. These are my thoughts about your writing. In this moment, I only focus on content of your...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 15, 2016
|Nowadays, people assume that muscles are the main factor which determine athlete performance
5 - hy nice summarys, there are few suggestion for you Until up recently Right now, people (...) athlete performances...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 15, 2016 / BAMS14 - Sep 15, 2016
|TED Summary: The Art of Free-Stress Productivity by David Allen
2 - when productivity gets low and everything turns unstable. It is called crisis zone. = new sentence = it is...
Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 15, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 15, 2016
|HERE'S HOW MANY APPLE CORES IT WOULD TAKE TO POISON YOU
2 - Hi Terminal123, below are my thoughts on your essay, this is very straight forward, in order for you to...
Writing FeedbackTerminal23 - Sep 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 15, 2016
|Writing Task 1; Comparison of five are mining sector categories in France during year 1995 and 2005
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Sep 15, 2016 / arisandy14 - Sep 15, 2016
|There is no reason to show some special attitude toward people based on their age
3 - hello, I would like donate my thought about your work. the first, I concern that your grammar...
Writing FeedbackDmitryB - Sep 14, 2016 / arisandy14 - Sep 15, 2016
|Bill Gates' presentation about diseases, education and technology evolution
4 - ... number of children died who (have not been 5years) before ages 5 Caused (the cause) of malaria...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 15, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 15, 2016
|There are several ways of transport with different CO2 emissions (measured in kilograms). IELTS
2 - Hello Ryan31, firstly, I think you spent more word at writing task 1. you wrote approximatel 262 that...
Writing Feedbackryan31 - Sep 15, 2016 / PHA2016 - Sep 15, 2016
|It Cannot Be Denied, There are the Pros and Cons of Using Internet for People Appearing in This Life
3 - i give some correction for you.. The Internet is has completely fulfilled individuals ... do business and other activities...
Writing FeedbackAsma Raj - Sep 15, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 15, 2016
|INTERNET: The Drawback and Vantage
2 - Hello Your text is quite readable, but you could use adjusting/rewriting some of the sentences as follows: ...
Writing FeedbackJnur - Sep 15, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 15, 2016
|The proportion of energy which is produced in one decade, within 1995-2005
2 - The pie charts show the proportion of different types of energy being produced in 1 decade(over a ten-year...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 15, 2016 / gigiqarib - Sep 15, 2016
|Summary of Article, the title is "A Musician Creates an Americana Soundtrack for the Colorado River"
2 - hello almajid, it was an interesting topic and also i really appreciate with your efforts to do this essay....
Writing FeedbackALMAJID06 - Sep 15, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 15, 2016
|Do a weekday vegetarian for a better life (TED Summary)
2 - =our meat diet behavior has caused many problems. Eating hamburger routinely [need to mention how many times...
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Sep 15, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 15, 2016
|TIME FOR KNOWING BEFORE TRAVELING.
2 - hello vkwssh, it was a very interesting essay and i really appreciate with your efforts. but i have some...
Writing FeedbackVK WSSH - Sep 15, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 15, 2016
|Athlete is not only about muscles but also visual abilities
2 - hai lalsky I have some suggestions for you please check your wordstoo many use not only, but also ......
Writing FeedbackLALSKI - Sep 15, 2016 / ryan31 - Sep 15, 2016
|Poverty Among Seniors has dropped - Summary Article from Times
4 - hai classmate I have several suggestions for you there are too many percent maybe you can use it in...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 15, 2016 / ryan31 - Sep 15, 2016
|Men are more likely to sign up for the fitness membership, than women - according to the bar chart
3 - Hi Aris.. These are my thoughts to finalize your writing. I hope these can help you to improve your...
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Sep 14, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 15, 2016
|Write a paragraph ( 40 - 50 words ) telling your feeling about a traffic accident happened
3 - Hi! I have some advice for you: Avoid the repetition of "I" and add some conjunctions to make...
Writing Feedbackledungmi - Sep 15, 2016 / kiki23 - Sep 15, 2016
|The stress is the body's way of responding to any kind of demand or threat
4 - Hai deanarin i have some advice to you What is the meaning of stress? "The definition of stress...
Writing Feedbackdeanarin - Sep 15, 2016 / Alamsyah Ismail - Sep 15, 2016
|Education Is the Key to Breaking the Cycle of Violence - Summary article
3 - Hello It'll be better if you restructure some of your sentences as suggested below: "School should [...]...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 15, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 15, 2016
|When people focus on one particular object, they automatically do not notice anything else
2 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections When people focus on one particular object, they...
Writing Feedbackfaizahadina - Sep 15, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 15, 2016
|The ability to stay focused positively relates to the quality of athlete's performance
2 - Hello Your text will sound better if you rewrite some of the sentences as suggested below: Athlete's...
Writing Feedbackmawahi bussalam - Sep 15, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 15, 2016
|Summary: What's wrong with our food system?
4 - Hallo bung ilham, actually your summary essay is good, but i have some advice to you ... been...
Writing Feedbackbung ilham - Sep 14, 2016 / Alamsyah Ismail - Sep 15, 2016
|As we attempt to focus, the whole other areas has less brightness and we tolerate the blur
2 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections When we carefully noticed that as we attempttried...
Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 15, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 15, 2016
|White Gulls Dependent On Ice Are Disappearing From The Arctic
4 - Hi Andika Let me give you some advice... Life in the world is not(isnt) just humans (but) there...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 15, 2016 / Yonathan - Sep 15, 2016
|Many birds migrating very long distances to breed and feed their youngsters
3 - Hi, BAMS14 As a read your summary, here I give you some suggestions. 1. "Many bird migrationregularly...
Writing FeedbackBAMS14 - Sep 14, 2016 / dils - Sep 15, 2016
|"Reasons for study" four out of five people under 26 take part in courses because of job opportunity
3 - Hallo Windvalley, There are a little corrective, ...majority of young people study because of careerthey want to have...
Writing FeedbackWindvalley - Sep 15, 2016 / David54 - Sep 15, 2016
|Your health depends on where you live - from the TED summary
3 - At the beginning of the talks, = talk , Bill Davenhall, (...) Services Expert [need comma. an additional...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 14, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 15, 2016
|How to raise successful kids - without over-parenting by Julie Lythcott-Haims
Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 14, 2016 / dils - Sep 15, 2016
|Imposing restrictions on the acceptable amount of trash may reduce the amount of waste
3 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections ... restrictions on the acceptable amount of trash...
Writing Feedbackgigiqarib - Sep 15, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 15, 2016
|The incredible trips of Bird Migration
4 - Hi Mr. Patta. These are my suggestions for your summary. According to A passage, migration is commonly movement...
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Sep 14, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 15, 2016
|"Trauma Still Fresh for Rwandan Genocide Survivors" Summary
3 - Hi Gian16, This is little suggestion for you : 1. "... raised in Kinyanya 20 years ago, still give...
Writing FeedbackGian16 - Sep 13, 2016 / FirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 15, 2016
|IELTS task 1 The diagram illustrates the change of food consumption in China in quarter century
4 - Hi arisandy14, Can I offer you a little suggestion " fish was the most popular (what popular?) with...
Writing Feedbackarisandy14 - Sep 13, 2016 / VK WSSH - Sep 15, 2016
|The amounts of meat, salt, and fish consumed in China, starting from 1985 to 2010
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Sep 13, 2016 / eddies - Sep 15, 2016
|Why you should experience a home stay in Thailand?
3 - Hi Almajid, we're on the same boat, I mean I'm still learning to compose better writing as well. So...
Writing FeedbackALMAJID14 - Sep 14, 2016 / Fitri12 - Sep 15, 2016
|After Africa's Sahara Desert, the next great desert is Taklimakan Desert
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 14, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 15, 2016
|Most Violent Crimes Are Wrongly Linked to Mental Illness - Summary article
3 - Many news talks[singular/plural issue] about person who has mental health problem wasthat responsible tofor committing violence. However, the...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 14, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 14, 2016
|An increasing temperature on the planet can have domino-falling effects for the future of Earth
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Sep 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 14, 2016
|We must be able to listen to the signal of body, because it is better than any doctors.
3 - Lissa Rankin, founder of (...) and mental illness, comes up [past simple is suggested since this event had fully...
Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 14, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 14, 2016
|Student books: international visitors to New Zealand: reason for visit
Writing FeedbackMita22 - Sep 14, 2016 / BAMS14 - Sep 14, 2016
|How many people became a fitness center members some years ago?
2 - Hi Shandy, below are my thoughts on your analysis. - women becomingbecame members of the fitness -...
Writing Feedbackarisandy14 - Sep 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 14, 2016
|Several holiday makers in New Zealand prefer to do such activities like walking, sightseeing, etc.
3 - Hi ALMAJID14, please find a few suggestions below in order to enhance your essay. "The bar chart illustrates...
Writing FeedbackALMAJID14 - Sep 14, 2016 / DmitryB - Sep 14, 2016
|Birds generally travel to higher latitudes of the Northern Hemisphere to breed during a warm seasons
2 - Hi Rizaldo, please find a few suggestions below in order to enhance your essay. - but the renowned...
Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 14, 2016
|Al Gore - how the behavior of people can effect the climate crisis?
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 14, 2016
|A global mobilization is required in order to tackle the Climate Crisis issue
2 - Hello Most of the sentences must be rewritten to sound better (and to make more sense). One of...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 14, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 14, 2016
|Most Young American Can't Pass a Test on Global Affairs -- Can You? Summery for an Article
3 - I do appreciate your writing, i see in your writing, simple sentence but every single sentence has coherence. ...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 13, 2016 / ALMAJID14 - Sep 14, 2016
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