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|The changes which have occurred in West Park Secondary School,
2 - Hi miss Nida, I have read your good writing, but, let me give my opinion about your writing :)...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 23, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 23, 2016
|It is very troublesome for people to have a healthy lifestyle in the modern era. (IELTS Task 2)
3 - Hi i have read you writing, and found some unsuitable word or sentence. Let me give you some suggestion....
Writing Feedbackanita11 - Feb 28, 2016 / The Everest - Mar 23, 2016
|It can be noticed that most of the air from the basement flow into the house. IELTS Task
2 - illustrates how the circulationillustrates the circulation or illustrates how the air circulates in a house. flows thru maybe you...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 23, 2016 / cirora - Mar 23, 2016
|The development of West Park secondary school since its contraction in 1950
Writing FeedbackTrisulastri - Mar 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|Method of losing heat and wasting energy by transferring air
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|Water Cycle Base on The Location Where It is Dropped
2 - Hi Yonathan, I would like to help modify your essay, to start, your overall analysis is good, however, it...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|The air flows out and into the house thus causing inefficient consuming energy on heater operating
2 - - The diagram informsillustrates the ways - of air flowing -thusthat caused - inefficient consumingconsumption of energy on -...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|IELTS task 1: New buildings arrangement - West Park Secondary School maps
2 - 30 years interval Overall, the school area had been expanded immensely. The area of the school block had...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 22, 2016 / The Everest - Mar 23, 2016
|Several ways of heat loss and energy waste in a house due to the airflow in building - IELTS
2 - Dear angga93,I hope you find the suggestion below helpful. If I make any mistake, please correct me and thanks....
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 22, 2016 / iDella - Mar 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - Comparison of Energy Production
3 - Hi, Desty. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me, if I...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 15, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - The Demographic Growth in US State of Oregon
3 - Hi, Adrian. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me if I...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 15, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|According to the diagram, air leaks into the house through several indoor-outdoor connections
2 - The diagram reveals how air circulation in a house--> how air circulate the heat is lost from a roomthan...
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 23, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 23, 2016
|Air Circulation Inside The House Can Waste Energy and Cause Heat Loss.
3 - Hi, Mr Yonathan I would like to suggest you. The air circulation, such as air leaking into [...]...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 22, 2016 / tiraatira11 - Mar 23, 2016
|Reuse of rainwater through several treatments
2 - The diagram informs the recycling system of rain water to be hygienehygienic, needs adjective water used domestically in people...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 23, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 23, 2016
|The percentage of citizen access to recent technology in Britain throughout eight years.
3 - Hi Wahyu. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me if I...
Writing FeedbackWahyunia_wns - Mar 22, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|Cigarette smoking brings dire effect not only to the smokers but also to all people around them
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 21, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Nowadays, its is quite common for young people to have a break year before going university. IELTS2
4 - Hy Wenyun, here my comment. check it, i may wrong. thanks Nowadays, its is --> improper using of...
Writing Feedbackwenyun - Mar 21, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|IELTS task 1: Water treatment for household use
NEW - The diagram shows how rainwater is reused. ... The diagram illustrates the process of water treatment for household...
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|Land usage differences over the time of period in the West Park Secondary School
2 - The changingchanges of West Park Secondary School area between 1950 and 2010 is shown by the maps and it...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 22, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|West Park Secondary School construction during 3 decades
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 22, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|After reading a passage about Chinese 13-5
Writing Feedbackpitehu - Mar 22, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Mar 22, 2016
|The Diagram of Precipitation Flows
NEW - The diagram illustrates regarding to reuse of precipitation which are maintaining to hold in two different places. Although it...
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|IELTS TASK 1 The data of consumer disbursing on several different items in European Countries
4 - hy RIZKA, here my comment. check it, i may wrong. thanks The table provides the data of consumer...
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 14, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|[Task 1] - Map - The developments of Stokeford, a Riverside Town, in Almost a Decade
3 - Hello Adrian, i found that your writing has an interesting point of view, the lost of farmland. However, it...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 14, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|The three products Consumption in China during 1985 to 2010 - fishes are the most popular
4 - Hy lita, i didn't find any big mistakes on your essay, i just give a suggestion and some correction....
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 15, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 22, 2016
|The diagram show how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up to date weather forecasting
2 - Hello Soe Htet Aung, you should create at least 3 sentences for each paragraph. I try to modify your...
Writing FeedbackThe Everest - Mar 22, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 22, 2016
|Apparent differences between populations in Yemen and Italy - IELTS Task 1
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Mar 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 22, 2016
|Better to be a home student using a computer or study in the traditional way - attending schools?
Writing Feedbackdiemthuy - Mar 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 22, 2016
|My favorite author: J.K.Rowling (nowadays, the best writer)
2 - Hey, Varlamow, That's an interesting topic. Did you come up with the idea by yourself? I appreciate authors...
Writing FeedbackVarlamow - Mar 21, 2016 / Chan Dara - Mar 22, 2016
|"Aloha!" your on this island ! ( I want help about the Descriptive essay about Hawaii. )
Writing Feedbacklo0olo0o24 - Mar 19, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|There are some certain things in this world which we simply should not try to understand
Writing Feedbackgiligrp - Mar 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|Scientific research today attempts to go too far. (ielts task 2)
5 - People try to answer every question that the universe hasin the universe But my point of view is...
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 18, 2016 / The Everest - Mar 21, 2016
|To understand all the matter connected with the scientific research and to avoid some damage
Writing Feedbacksiti hamsyah - Mar 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|Simply raise the price of petrol can not fulfil the long-term goal to reduce traffic and pollution
8 - Hi Chelsea, first of all, your positive mantra towards the remarks on your essay will get you somewhere someday,...
Writing Feedbackchelsea17 - Mar 17, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 21, 2016
|The comparison of overseas students who graduated from universities in Canada.
2 - Hi Diqon, In my opinion you need to improve a little the structure of your essay. I don't know...
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Mar 19, 2016 / Anerena - Mar 21, 2016
|The reasons for choosing certain courses and how they should be paid - Ielts
2 - interesting in subject you need to put interest as a noun/subject. whereas 40 % of them answeredanswering for...
Writing FeedbackThe Everest - Mar 20, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 20, 2016
|IELTS Taks 2 _ Are sport facilities less useful to maintain public health?
2 - Hello wulanbila16 I applied a few corrections to the text that is sounds much better: Nowadays, more...
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Mar 19, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Mar 19, 2016
|Contrast people of your age with those of your parents' generation; beliefs, values, goals... etc.
5 - I agree with Meyani and besides that, the 4th paragrath ('Finally' one) seems too short. It feels like you...
Writing Feedbackbottles - Mar 15, 2016 / chelsea17 - Mar 19, 2016
|The main objective of university education
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 16, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 18, 2016
|The main goal of universities: to link students for their own value or prepare them for a future job
2 - hi Siti, the problem I find with your essay is choosing the wrong words. Secondly, I understand the prompt...
Writing Feedbacksiti hamsyah - Mar 17, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 17, 2016
|Living in a large city has certain advantages over living in a small town. Urbanization role
NEW - We cannot simply deny the immensely important role of the urbanization in raising our living standards. Consequentially, there are...
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|Transfer Essay: Page "87" of your autobiography: "I am a pencil"
2 - Hi Ttina, Your story is very touching. You also have strong writing skills, and you are able to...
Writing Feedbackttina - Mar 16, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Mar 17, 2016
|To broadcast celebrities news or informations about some ordinary people?
NEW - The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers....
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|My discovery of my love, Astronomy - for Stanford summer on intellectual vitality. critique required
3 - I would love more feedback guys? Justin like really meant like as I didn't have lots passion for astronomy...
Writing FeedbackRitvik123 - Mar 15, 2016 / Ritvik123 - Mar 17, 2016
|TOEFL for immigration purpose - to be or not to be independent?
Writing Feedbackkjiajing92 - Mar 16, 2016 / ttina - Mar 16, 2016
|'three kinds of treatments applied' - The process of recycling the rain water.
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Task 1- Process of reuse rainwater - recycling method
2 - Hi Desty, I would like to share my insights on your analysis by enhancing the sentences if needed. ...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Recommendation letter from my professor to the University of Edinburgh on continuing master degree
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|The usage of energy in USA started from 1980 to 2030 - The energy outlook
2 - The graph illustrates from energy [...] pattern over the period as a whole. A breakdown of proportion of...
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 15, 2016 / irhame - Mar 16, 2016
|Some say, government funding help fluorish arts; others that it threatens it's integrity - GRE issue
3 - Hello Ban I suggest you to make some variations in your writing by putting compound and complex senteces in...
Writing FeedbackBan123 - Mar 15, 2016 / Desty22 - Mar 15, 2016
|A recent study in 1997 and 2006 representing the communication skills in work (IELTS Task 1)
3 - Hello Anita Let me give my opinion about your essay Pay attention to your 1st paragraph. You should...
Writing Feedbackanita11 - Feb 27, 2016 / adrian21 - Mar 15, 2016
|Task 1- The Develoment in Eastminster from 1999 to 2009
2 - Hi Lita, after reading and understanding your analysis, I must say uou did quiet a good job, the analysis...
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|The alteration of town centre over three hundreds of year - writing ielts task 1
2 - Hi Hani, I would like to share my insights with a focus on the last paragraph of the analysis....
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computer
3 - Good start! You need to expand your answer and to organize it into at least three paragraphs! ...
Writing Feedbackunibuti - Mar 12, 2016 / EF_Carol - Mar 15, 2016
|Nowadays, children have less pressure than the past age and more of the life-advancing opportunities
2 - Hello angga93 You should consider applying a few stylistic corrections to the text. They are as follows: in...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 14, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Mar 15, 2016
|Task 1- Comparison kind of movies watched in UK and US
4 - The bar chart illustrates the number of film films watched in England and Australia in 2001, categorized by US,...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 14, 2016 / Lita27 - Mar 14, 2016
|The international food such as fast food is more enjoyed by majority of people than local culinary
NEW - In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on...
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|I believe that modern cuisine brings the extinction of traditional meal.
2 - Hello Nisa, I have some advice related to your introduction and conclusion. First of all, in introduction, you did...
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 14, 2016 / yonathan66 - Mar 14, 2016
|It is better for children to grow up in big cities rather than in a countryside - more opportunities
3 - hello abigail, let me comment your essay. In the introduction, I conclude you more explain in the way you...
Writing Feedbackabigail anderson - Mar 12, 2016 / hanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016
|Task 2 - Children Get More Pressure in This Era
2 - Hello Inastia. Your writing is good. I want to check your writing. Please correct me, if I have mistakes...
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