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|Analysis for painting: Post du Garde by Hubert Robert
2 - Jingwen, you may want to explain why Robert merely used the name of the bridge for his painting. There...
Writing FeedbackAnniemanjo - Oct 27, 2018 / Holt - Oct 28, 2018
|The modern life has negative impacts on children's lifestyle
3 - Nguyne, this essay just failed to get a passing score in an actual test setting. Remember, the TA score...
Writing FeedbackMaruMaru - Oct 27, 2018 / Holt - Oct 28, 2018
|The mass media have a major influence on our day-to-day life today
Writing Feedbacksaturn - Oct 27, 2018 / Red Moon - Oct 28, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Is punishment a good way to teach children good manner?
6 - It seems that you repeat many time the phrase "right and wrong", you should change it with another expression....
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Oct 23, 2018 / MaruMaru - Oct 27, 2018
|Your opinion do you think governments or individuals can make significant changes in society.
2 - I can't get a clear message in paragraph 2, probably you can elaborate more by using examples to confirm...
Writing FeedbackEmanrageh - Oct 26, 2018 / vania - Oct 27, 2018
|Free choice of subjects to study - IELTS writing task 2 assistance
2 - Suraj, there is a lack of clarity in the essay that you presented. That is because you are not...
Writing FeedbackSurajp - Oct 26, 2018 / Holt - Oct 27, 2018
|Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or not?
4 - thank you for your valuable feedback. you really inspire me to write more. thank you so much for your...
Writing Feedbackngannguyenftu - Oct 25, 2018 / ngannguyenftu - Oct 26, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Should university students' study orientation
3 - Ronia, this is a discussion of 2 public points of view along with your personal point of view. You...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Oct 26, 2018 / Holt - Oct 26, 2018
|Candidates' academic qualities, rather than their social skills, become the primary employers choice
2 - Can, your opinion about this being a negative development should have been given in the opening paraphrase and restated...
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Oct 25, 2018 / Holt - Oct 26, 2018
|IELTS TASK1 - Fairtrade coffee and bananas in five countries
2 - according to my experience in IELTS preparation test, the first thing that you can do is paraphrasing the table...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Oct 26, 2018 / vania - Oct 26, 2018
|Writing task 1: Oil use of major consumer
3 - Tien, the main problem you will have with this essay is that your GRA score will be failing and...
Writing FeedbackTienane - Oct 25, 2018 / Holt - Oct 26, 2018
|Nurses, doctors and teachers do not earn enough money and they deserve more
3 - Hello, I think you can combine your 2,3 paragraph into one paragraph. And you can shorten your essay a...
Writing FeedbackAntoniaFrederica - Oct 22, 2018 / ronia85516 - Oct 26, 2018
|Ho I solve a problem - release my emotion first, then find out what is the main cause of the problem
4 - Thank you @Holt for your advice. Then, how about the examples that I use in the body paragraph? Are...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Oct 22, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 25, 2018
|Prison may be a good solution for criminals, but there are also some alternative methods
3 - I'm not sure why 260 words is the golden mark but this response is way too short. Your argument...
Writing Feedbackdaisyna2405 - Oct 24, 2018 / Underleveled - Oct 24, 2018
|Every year, more computers are used for instruction in classroom. Is this good or bad?
2 - general feedback: it will be good if you can paraphrase the question with some details about your oponion, and...
Writing Feedbackejmonstar - Oct 23, 2018 / hichamsamma - Oct 24, 2018
|In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. Positive or negative?
2 - Trinh, your essay is severely under developed in terms of proper discussion. Your prompt paraphrase is incomplete and your...
Writing Feedbacktasluco - Oct 24, 2018 / Holt - Oct 24, 2018
|Teachers at Fatoni University - writing skills practice
4 - Afnan, this presentation is asking you to describe someone from your past. Therefore you should be using the past...
Writing FeedbackPhoenix_nt - Oct 23, 2018 / Holt - Oct 24, 2018
|IELTS TASK1 - Which of Australian household elements use the biggest amount of energy?
3 - Ronia, the Task 1 essay always scores its best when the essay is presented in 4 paragraphs with 3-5...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Oct 23, 2018 / Holt - Oct 24, 2018
|Finnbuild Report ( Explanation about an excursion on a Building Fair in Helsinki-Finland )
2 - Hi, here are my suggestions: ... aim was to experience and explore a building industry exhibition that was...
Writing Feedbackarmin_karmisin - Oct 14, 2018 / TJLuschen - Oct 23, 2018
|The data concerning on the numbers of males and females who graduated in university in Canada
Writing Feedbacknellawatyahmad26 - Oct 8, 2018 / vsim2018 - Oct 23, 2018
|writing task 2: Some people think modern technology is making people more sociable while ...
5 - Hi, I found out that your main problem is the structure of your essay. I'm now also preparing for...
Writing Feedbackhichamsamma - Oct 19, 2018 / ronia85516 - Oct 23, 2018
|The number of house husbands has been increasing while some mothers are becoming the breadwinners
2 - Hi, in your first paragraph, I cannot understand what is your main point. It seems to me that you...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Oct 21, 2018 / vietduccan - Oct 22, 2018
|Government should control our lives and cities - IELTS essay!!
3 - Dear @BaoBaoHG, I think you need to include the prompt of this essay so others could give the...
Writing FeedbackBaoBaoHG - Oct 21, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 22, 2018
|Ielts Writing part 2 - As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely ...
2 - Nguyen, actually, you will not get a very low score for this essay, you will automatically get a failing...
Writing FeedbackMaruMaru - Oct 21, 2018 / Holt - Oct 22, 2018
|The place that I recommend in Taiwan
4 - Dear @yiyunm6, In describing a place, we need to encourage readers to feel the same as ours. As...
Writing Feedbackyiyunm6 - Oct 18, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 21, 2018
|Online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus - Ielts2
Writing FeedbackQuyenPham - Oct 19, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 21, 2018
|ANIMAL EXPERIMENT - DISCUSSION AND OPINION ESSAY
2 - @trangmuel your opening paraphrase lacks a reference to the discussion instruction. What you did was give your opinion at...
Writing Feedbacktrangmuel - Oct 20, 2018 / Holt - Oct 21, 2018
|Single sex schools vs mixed schools. Writing task 2 - opinion/argument essay
3 - thanx i will take an account your opinion, i wrote this with samples from worldwide because i was taught...
Writing FeedbackTeymurov - Oct 19, 2018 / Teymurov - Oct 20, 2018
|Writing IELTS task 2 - should we increase the age of retirement?
2 - Nguyen, let's start with the parts of this essay that you got right. The two reasoning paragraphs in the...
Writing Feedbacknttv - Oct 19, 2018 / Holt - Oct 20, 2018
|Some people believe the range of technology is increasing the gap between people. Argument essay
3 - Thank you. your opinion is very important for me, i will consider it and will try to improve my...
Writing FeedbackTeymurov - Oct 15, 2018 / Teymurov - Oct 19, 2018
|IELTS task 2 - 'The Internet' and smartphones essay
4 - @Elvin First I wish you to get higher score in your real exam. Secondly your this essay has poor...
Writing FeedbackElvin - Oct 3, 2018 / Teymurov - Oct 19, 2018
|Comparing two maps in constructed tourism island
NEW - changes in some areas of an island The figures compares the previous condition to the developed area of...
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|Violent Video games affect children by psychologically desensitizing them, also trigger aggression
2 - I don't understand why you want to ban violent video-games ONLY in Canada, you can mention the entire world...
Writing Feedbackarianataylor - Oct 16, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Oct 19, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1 : the percentage of women in poverty and poverty rates by sexs and ages.
2 - Reni, first up, you must make sure to identify the type of charts that are provided in the summary...
Writing FeedbackReni Ratna Sari - Oct 19, 2018 / Holt - Oct 19, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1: The pictures show the conventional manufactured chocolate production.
2 - While you did write more than the minimum 150 word count, a task 1 essay always scores best when...
Writing Feedbacksznnis25 - Oct 19, 2018 / Holt - Oct 19, 2018
|Writing IELTS Task 1 : Process of Chocolate
2 - 3th sentese: The first is manual process which usually use(s) a farmer skill and secondly processed by machine and...
Writing Feedbackayyubjbr - Oct 19, 2018 / Rudi Nirwantono - Oct 19, 2018
|Investing in schools and teachers or supplying computers and Internet access? IELTS2
Writing Feedbacktrancongminh997 - Oct 18, 2018 / trancongminh997 - Oct 19, 2018
|Marriages and divorces in the USA - Writing Task 1 for IELTS (Graph)
NEW - Hi Everyone! I need your feedback in term of writing ielts task 1 (Task Achievement, Lexical Resources, Cohesion and...
Writing Feedbackannisaelda13 - Oct 19, 2018 / — -
|IELTS Task 1: Geothermal Power Plant
NEW - Hai guys, I need your FEEDBACK IN TERM OF WRITTING TASK 1 (TASK ACHIEVEMENT, COHERENCE AND COHENSION, LEXICAL RESOURCE,...
Writing Feedbackerlanggaid - Oct 19, 2018 / — -
|Common App essay about my experience volunteering in a hospital and how it influenced me
Writing FeedbackGuest - Oct 17, 2018 / rupsajina - Oct 18, 2018
|Fish and meats consumption - Preparing to take IELTS for school requirement - Task 1 essay
4 - @Holt Thank you. I have noted your suggestion and will redo it again in next essay to get better...
Writing FeedbackKrystalCho89 - Oct 12, 2018 / KrystalCho89 - Oct 18, 2018
|Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer.
2 - Owning a business that means they could can follow their passion, find work motivation from interest be self-motivated, as...
Writing Feedbackzuzuzela - Oct 15, 2018 / rupsajina - Oct 18, 2018
|Today younger generations are getting married and have kids after the age of 30
2 - Kapil, you must learn to understand the different prompt discussion requirements of the Task 2 essays. All of these...
Writing Feedbackkapil098 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Living with your parents, the advantages
2 - Hi Faradina. It is a great essay with an apparent three reasons why people should live with their parents....
Writing FeedbackFaradina - Oct 16, 2018 / Elvin - Oct 18, 2018
|Composition 101 Informative Essay (no outside sources allowed - writing about stress management)
2 - Keyla, this is a very good topic for discussion and your approach is highly interesting. The problem that I...
Writing Feedbackeuphoric33 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others ...
2 - Jagpreet. your TA score for this essay will not be enough to help you get a passing score overall....
Writing FeedbackRandhawa294 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|A professional baseball player
2 - Rafiq, you are getting your English terms mixed up in this essay. The correct sentence is "Many people dream...
Writing FeedbackRafiq313 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Nha Trang - DESCRIBE A WELL-KNOWN DESTINATION YOU HAVE VISITED
5 - @lahoaithu I don't really find this essay interesting in a creative manner. You are just narrating your experience there,...
Writing Feedbacklahoaithu - Oct 16, 2018 / Holt - Oct 17, 2018
|Sports can be bridge to peace and understanding between countries and societes
2 - Tran, you have a good prompt paraphrase but your response to the question is missing. What is your measured...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Oct 16, 2018 / Holt - Oct 17, 2018
|There is a different approach on how the organization gives promotion to their employees.
3 - Thank you @Holt! I always learn something valuable from your comments. Hopefully I can improve my score in the...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Oct 15, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 16, 2018
|Problems with student behavior. What causes this and how to react.
2 - Nguyen, your approach to the prompt paraphrase / thesis statement is incorrect. The other problem, is that you added...
Writing Feedbacknguyenuyen450 - Oct 15, 2018 / Holt - Oct 16, 2018
|Motor use. Problems and solutions. IELTS task 2
3 - Dear @sillyman2000, I think in this kind of essay, you need to write properly the reasons completed with...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Oct 6, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 15, 2018
|Some people prefer to live in horizontal cities, while others choose a high-rise buildings
Writing Feedbackleanh - Oct 5, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 15, 2018
|Sources of energy - IELTS 2: Problems and Solutions Essay
3 - Dung, you are not being asked to justify the reasons for using alternative energy sources in this essay. The...
Writing Feedbacknhancau12345 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018
|Social media and personal information (ielts)
3 - You did not provide the full prompt of this task, so it makes it difficult to see whether you...
Writing Feedbackjolin552039 - Oct 13, 2018 / Xti02 - Oct 13, 2018
|Practical intelligence or academic intelligence? IELTS writing task 2.
2 - Hoang, the best solution to your word count situation is to stop writing run on sentences as you are...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018
|Family's closeness - IELTS 2: Problems and Solutions Essay
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Oct 12, 2018 / vietduccan - Oct 12, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2 - different perspectives on changes
2 - Zi Xuan, the reason that you failed this test is really simple. You failed to follow the discussion requirements...
Writing FeedbackAnn05 - Oct 10, 2018 / Holt - Oct 11, 2018
|Is it possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment? Ielts
3 - Trung, this is a failed Task 2 essay. The reason that this essay will receive a failing score is...
Writing FeedbackCentral6497 - Oct 9, 2018 / Holt - Oct 10, 2018
|How energy is used in Australia and the greenhouse gas emissions in total
3 - Tom, you need to learn to better separate you paragraphs in order to create a clear presentation of the...
Writing FeedbackTommyzuklin - Oct 8, 2018 / Holt - Oct 9, 2018
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