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|[TOEFL IBT: Task 2] Compare yourself today and yourself five years ago
4 - Nuradia, while I can sense the effort that you have placed in the writing of this essay, I am...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Aug 24, 2018 / Holt - Aug 25, 2018
|Writing task 1 in IELTS (the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010)
5 - Tran, there are a number of inconsistencies in your presentation due to lack of information. The problem started with...
Writing Feedbackbovalenca - Aug 24, 2018 / Holt - Aug 25, 2018
|Questbridge - "What are your career goals" question, and two 35-word essays. Help Requested
3 - Thank you so much for your feedback. I am in the process of revising, and possibly restarting, each of...
Writing FeedbackBlackSkyrim - Aug 23, 2018 / BlackSkyrim - Aug 24, 2018
|IELTS task 2 - Increasing tourism for inhabitants, environment and economy
3 - Dear @Tan0295, You need to post the complete prompt, so that we can comment your essay in proper...
Writing FeedbackTan0295 - Aug 20, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Aug 24, 2018
|[GRE : Argument] Adams Realty or Fitch Realty - which from those real estates companies are better?
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Aug 21, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Aug 24, 2018
|The honesty is the most crucial thing in a good relationship
Writing Feedbackjam92 - Aug 23, 2018 / jam92 - Aug 24, 2018
|Response for a memorandum from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants
2 - Hi Chen, your essay can possibly score a 5 with this type of writing. You clearly understood the assigned...
Writing Feedbackessay61107 - Aug 23, 2018 / Holt - Aug 24, 2018
|In order to attract good students, many universities spend a lot of money in society activities.
5 - Vate, the essay is not asking whether you believe one point of view is convincing or not. The essay...
Writing FeedbackVateye - Aug 23, 2018 / Holt - Aug 24, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - is celebration vital? Are people spend too much on it?
5 - @Holt thanks for the comments. Now I realize that I might be off topic and will receive lower mark...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 22, 2018 / smally01 - Aug 23, 2018
|IELTS: What can governments do to encourage children to eat a healthier diet?
2 - you should give examples or further explain by illustrations with each measure. and you should briefly state mentioned measures...
Writing Feedbackptnlytqnho - Aug 23, 2018 / adirnarmak - Aug 23, 2018
|CBEST: The Contribution Technology Has Made to Modern Life Has Been Positive
2 - Jane, while you are doing your practice tests, you can use a thesaurus to vary your word choices. This...
Writing Feedbacknaegajjasae - Aug 22, 2018 / Holt - Aug 23, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - Environment protection, the job for individual or the government?
2 - Believe it or not, if not for the problematic sentence structures in your essay, you actually managed to develop...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 22, 2018 / Holt - Aug 23, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1-RECYCLING RATES OF SELECTED MATERIAL IN A PARTICULAR COUNTRY
2 - Remember to include commas when you are listing the names such as "paper, cardboard, and glassware" instead of "paper...
Writing Feedbackkripa5 - Aug 22, 2018 / naegajjasae - Aug 22, 2018
|Aging population is good or bad for society (Let task 2)
4 - I'm glad to see your essential feedback. I will try to use words that have accurate meaning. I'm confusing...
Writing FeedbackTracytrinh1998 - Aug 21, 2018 / Tracytrinh1998 - Aug 22, 2018
|CBEST: How Did The Rejection Affect You? Bank credit refusal.
3 - Dear @Holt, Thank you for your thoughtful feedback. I will work on the sentence structure along with the...
Writing Feedbacknaegajjasae - Aug 21, 2018 / naegajjasae - Aug 22, 2018
|Students are more likely to be successful in their life if they continue their studies - IETLS topic
5 - @jerryhoang1991 In general, your ideas is quite good. But I have a feedback for you: you should be careful...
Writing Feedbackjerryhoang1991 - Aug 21, 2018 / Tracytrinh1998 - Aug 22, 2018
|Some athletes are a good models for teenagers and children, others may not provide a proper example
Writing Feedbackalex97 - Aug 21, 2018 / Audrey01 - Aug 22, 2018
|A complain letter about poor service, problem with ordered food, steps to satisfy your needs
2 - Han, this letter does not appropriately express the situation that led to your dissatisfaction with the food service. You...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Aug 21, 2018 / Holt - Aug 22, 2018
|The importance of allocating certain percentage of high-level position in companies to women
4 - Good morning, Although I could see what is the point that you were trying to make, questions were...
Writing FeedbackBita12 - Aug 19, 2018 / naegajjasae - Aug 21, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: A lot of Buildings Are Now Being Built With An Open Plan Design
4 - @dimdim02 Hi, I have some feedback to your essay. In your introduction, it is not clear sentences because it...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Aug 9, 2018 / jerryhoang1991 - Aug 21, 2018
|To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Aug 19, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Aug 21, 2018
|CBEST Writing: The rapidly increasing prices have the biggest impact on low-paid people
3 - Jane, since you did not provide a proper prompt statement for this essay, it is impossible to assess your...
Writing Feedbacknaegajjasae - Aug 20, 2018 / Holt - Aug 21, 2018
|Computer can sometimes give some positive effects on youngsters, but more likely it brings harm
3 - Hi, Your vocabulary in this essay impressed me but your tone of debating confused me. There is a very...
Writing Feedbackngchiii - Aug 20, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Aug 21, 2018
|IELTS: How to promote equality of opportunity for men and women in the workplace?
5 - @Ptnly, how to write your essay depending on the topic instruction given rather using the same formula of writing...
Writing Feedbackptnlytqnho - Aug 19, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 21, 2018
|Do you agree as computers translate quickly and accurately, learning languages is a waste of time?
4 - Hi @Soulpancake, in your essay i think that you should write the sentences longer and use more complex sentences....
Writing Feedbacksoulpancake - Aug 20, 2018 / jerryhoang1991 - Aug 21, 2018
|The line graph illustrates figures for global meetings in three different capital cities 1980-2010
2 - Nguyen, I do not think that you wrote this essay under time pressure practice settings. That is because you...
Writing FeedbackHanhNguyen - Aug 20, 2018 / Holt - Aug 21, 2018
|Before entering college many young people are advised that a year working or traveling is good thing
3 - Hi, your paragraph contains lots of spelling and jumbled grammatical structures. As I see you have difficulties in typing...
Writing FeedbackHana Hutabarat - Aug 19, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 20, 2018
|High school graduates are encouraged to start working or traveling rather than entering University
5 - Hi Fuad, I was given special permission to come back and respond to your questions. Your reasoning is good....
Writing Feedbackfuad hadi - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 20, 2018
|IELTS writing task 1. Different genres of transport used to commute in a European city.
3 - Hai @sillyman2000 I think that your essay is well-developed. but I want to give few advices, hope it...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 16, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Aug 19, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: A plan for changes to a school site over 20 years.
2 - Moon, you did a good job in discussing the changes that will be forthcoming to the school. Even your...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 19, 2018
|MY random writing to improve writing mainly Grammar and sentence structure
2 - Sunii, as far as creative writing goes, this is a pretty decent written presentation. I can feel your heart...
Writing Feedbacksgc908 - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 19, 2018
|Task 2: Traditional culture with money-making purpose. Discuss both views and give opinion
2 - Linh, your opening paragraph made my head spin. It was so wordy and needlessly complicated that you ended up...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 19, 2018
|Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below
3 - The given line graph illustrates reveals You should remove one of them, because they are both verbs between...
Writing Feedbackphamkhatu - Aug 17, 2018 / fuad hadi - Aug 18, 2018
|The graphs compared Japan and Malaysia in terms of five categories of average family expenses - 2010
3 - Phuc, you have not written enough words to portray a complete analysis of the pie charts. Do not aim...
Writing FeedbackVan Phuc Bui - Aug 17, 2018 / Holt - Aug 18, 2018
|IELTS Writing task 2- Should newcomers follow new country's traditions?
4 - I think your tone is more proper with creative essay, not academic one. And you need to explain deeply...
Writing Feedbackcarolinenguyen18 - Aug 14, 2018 / Linh Dieu - Aug 18, 2018
|Once children start school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social developmen
2 - Hi Bach I find your essay is quite potential about lexicon, but you are lacking detail topic so it...
Writing Feedbackbach53h - Aug 17, 2018 / Linh Dieu - Aug 18, 2018
|Some people prefer to keep on their job while others change it often without much hesitation
3 - Ngo, it appears to me that you were uncertain about how to approach this type of essay writing. I...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Aug 17, 2018 / Holt - Aug 18, 2018
|Vacation or vacations to school children? Discussion essay.
4 - @Shurui and @Holt, thank you for the pieces of insightful advice! I will put those words into practice....
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Aug 16, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 17, 2018
|UK graduates and postgraduates participating in four different kinds of jobs after finishing college
3 - @Minh2903 Paraphrase: number of UK graduates and postgraduates in terms of ( work they did /4 different...
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 16, 2018 / emilakam - Aug 17, 2018
|Plenty of authorities in the world consider economic progress is their first priority. IELTS2
5 - Hi Red Moon Your essay is quite sufficient about both reasoning and structure, but I think when you shift...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Aug 13, 2018 / Linh Dieu - Aug 17, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 - Art education in high school?
3 - Tam, your paper has not properly discussed the prompt requirements. This is an agree or disagree essay that you...
Writing Feedbacktamcsp - Aug 16, 2018 / Holt - Aug 17, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: A BAN ON ALL FORMS OF ADVERTISING? SHOULD OR SHOULD NOT?
4 - Ngo, your prompt paraphrase is not proper. I say that because a properly paraphrased prompt will explain the subject,...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Aug 16, 2018 / Holt - Aug 17, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: number of girls enrolled per 100 boys in different level of school education
3 - One way to limit your word count is to avoid the repetition of information throughout the essay. You often...
Writing Feedbackemilakam - Aug 16, 2018 / Holt - Aug 17, 2018
|Ielts task 1: The population and its birth rate and death rates in an area in the UK.
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 16, 2018 / tamcsp - Aug 16, 2018
|IELTS writing task 1. Survey about suitable age for granting certain rights.
4 - I have some suggestion for your essay: Firstly, the overview seems to be missing, you should conclude more...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 15, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 16, 2018
|IELTS writing task 1 Description of a town centre and making comparsion after a development plan
3 - Here are some of my suggestion: _You should avoid using " a bunch of...", it might sound informal to...
Writing FeedbackJohnNg - Aug 14, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 16, 2018
|The line graph represents the measure of elder people aged 65 and over in USA, Sweden and Japan
3 - Here are some of my suggestions: _"Overall, all three countries demonstrate an upward trend" instead of "..show increasing...
Writing Feedbackemilakam - Jul 29, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 16, 2018
|The rate of males and females in 6 age groups in Australia, who were engaged in physical exercises
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 15, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 16, 2018
|It is better for elder to live with their offsprings rather than in an club for old people
5 - Your essay contained so many grammatical errors as well as weird and unnatural sentences. Therefore I find it really...
Writing Feedbacklozzol - Aug 13, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 15, 2018
|Sports Playing A Role In The Civil Rights Movement
Writing FeedbackNatewoods - Aug 14, 2018 / Holt - Aug 15, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2, "Whether learning a foreign language should be a compulsory subject at school or not?"
4 - Hi. Next time, you need to provide the Task question, as it is unclear whether you were writing a...
Writing Feedbackbunnytiger01 - Aug 13, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 15, 2018
|Ielts writing task 2: why many people still go hungry although the advance made in agriculture
5 - Hi, welcome to the forum! Hope my suggestions could help: First of all, use clear, native expressions. Readers...
Writing Feedbackoanhkieu208 - Aug 14, 2018 / TriceLiu - Aug 15, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1 :The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan
3 - Shao, this is a very good assessment of the two plans that you presented. It is clear and considers...
Writing FeedbackRogerscup - Aug 14, 2018 / Holt - Aug 15, 2018
|IELT Task 2: Building function or exterior design? Which is more important?
2 - you should avoid using "we" and "you" or "us", because, in ielts writing, you have to write in formal...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Aug 14, 2018 / oanhkieu208 - Aug 14, 2018
|The proportion of modern applications' domestic utilization in the UK from 1996 to 2003
3 - Tuong, there are several missing elements in your presentation that you need to address as a part of your...
Writing Feedbacktuongvy - Aug 13, 2018 / Holt - Aug 14, 2018
|Building and its appearances - the exterior look is not so important as usefulness?
Writing Feedbackjalp - Aug 13, 2018 / jalp - Aug 14, 2018
|It is definetely a big challenge for a person to live in a country speaking with foreign language
2 - There are many grammar mistakes in your writing, I think you should pay more attention to those: It...
Writing Feedbackjoyyeh - Aug 14, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 14, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2: High sales is a result of powerful advertising, not real needs of society.
2 - Hi, I have some suggestions for your essay. Overall, your essay is very good and easy to read. Your...
Writing Feedbackdaominhhang - Aug 10, 2018 / Red Moon - Aug 13, 2018
|Ielts, Task2, Countryside or city, Discuss both sides + Opinion
4 - You did very well but ,my from my perspective, there still exist somethings that may exacerbate your essay :...
Writing FeedbackAditya0211 - Aug 11, 2018 / zhongruansg - Aug 13, 2018
|Immigrants deal with a number of undesirable issues when trying to adapt with the new society
2 - Hello @zhongruansg, good to see you I have a few feedbacks, hope that helps 1) Task response: For...
Writing Feedbackzhongruansg - Aug 13, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 13, 2018
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