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|Economic inequality is increasing in many countries. Unequal distribution of income.
Writing FeedbackDiandin16 - Apr 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 5, 2016
|Closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities
2 - let me to paraphrase your conclusion paragraph: In my view, it is only about how [...] healthy competition...
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Apr 3, 2016 / Diandin16 - Apr 5, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Are there more advantages or disadvantages to visiting new places?
2 - Travelling is a process of getting one place to another. Moreover, there is popular saying, "the world is a...
Writing FeedbackLa Baso - Apr 4, 2016 / LaPolo11 - Apr 5, 2016
|The proportion of British people who saw the film in forth age groups on two decades after 1990
2 - instead of fourth age groups, it should be four age groups. the second sentence should be; most viewers were...
Writing Feedbackwahyu - Apr 4, 2016 / Peter_Tim - Apr 5, 2016
|IELTS 1: the percentage of public community and prosperity in 8 different areas in the worldwide
2 - Hello Lily, ..i would like to attempt to correct your essay so that it can be better than before..hopefully,...
Writing Feedbacklily89 - Apr 4, 2016 / ANSOR99 - Apr 5, 2016
|Several museums have regulated a policy that the visitors are supposed to pay money for museum entra
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Apr 4, 2016 / ANSOR99 - Apr 5, 2016
|The increase of population causes humanity problem
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 29, 2016 / fardan10 - Apr 5, 2016
|Writing IELTS 1: Cinema attendance pattern which occured amidst the four of age groups in the UK
3 - Hi Fudla, your essay is actually clear and very informative. I like the way you push your effort to...
Writing FeedbackHadiyati Fudla - Apr 4, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 4, 2016
|The cycle's life of salmon which is species of large fish
NEW - The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. The diagrams...
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|The table illustrated the comparison of the budget output of Australian households (1991-2001)
NEW - Writing Task 1 (the graph is below) The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family...
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|China has the greatest number of population in the world, while United States is the richest country
2 - What app bro LaPolo, your essay is good, i have suggestions to your introduction paragraph. you could use...
Writing FeedbackLaPolo11 - Apr 4, 2016 / wahyu - Apr 4, 2016
|People needs to change their daily routine, habits, because obesity is now a major global epidemic.
NEW - Obesity is now a mayor global epidemic. what can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem ? ...
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|IELTS TASK 1 - Global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.
2 - The bar chart illustrates about waiting people life and ... this is unclear and tend to be confusing ...
Writing Feedbackdina79 - Apr 4, 2016 / LaPolo11 - Apr 4, 2016
|The cycle of the salmon in diverse habitats and stages
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|The Criminals Lead People To Stay At Home...___...IELTS Task 2
2 - In this modern era , many kinds of crime have occuredoccurred in the society specifically robbering or stealing in...
Writing FeedbackANSOR99 - Apr 4, 2016 / LaPolo11 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS 1: the wealth in a country versus population proportions in various regions of the world
3 - - The presented bar chart presented highlights - of information - and countedis measured in percentages. - wealth...
Writing Feedbackfardan10 - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1: Cinema visitors description in the Great Britain in 2 decades
Writing Feedbackichanpants89 - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 e-book as an additional format and it can not replace the presence of a printed book
2 - Hi Dian, you have made a precise argument here in your essay and and it's written fairly well. You...
Writing FeedbackDiandin16 - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|The best alernative to prevent crime - 'apply a stringent penalties'
2 - Hi Hadiyati, I would like to share my thoughts on the first two paragraphs of your essay. 1st...
Writing FeedbackHadiyati Fudla - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|To solve the fear of crime problem. What official has done is not sufficient to restrict it.
Writing Feedbackbastian20 - Apr 4, 2016 / suxiaojing - Apr 4, 2016
|Salmon put their eggs in the upper river which has slow moving currents - facts from this fish life
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|The statistics data about cinema visitors based on different age groups in the United Kingdom
2 - Bastian, you have a good potential to write an outstanding a piece of writing. I like the way you...
Writing Feedbackbastian20 - Apr 4, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 4, 2016
|After 4 years in Lower River, salmons fry will grow into smolts which have size roughly 12-15 cm
Writing FeedbackYusri31 - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|CHARTS the age and gender of single-occupant households as well as how many bedrooms in their houses
Writing Feedbackcl50803 - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|This species originally hatch in fresh water, then live in the sea when it grows. The life of salmon
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|The growth of salmon begin when eggs from adult salmon laid out at small stones under the reeds
Writing FeedbackTrisulastri - Apr 4, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|Salmon Life Cycle. It lives in upper-river which move slowly as an egg for 5 until 6 months.
2 - Yonathan, I like the way that you developed this report summary. You were very informative and clear in depicting...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Apr 4, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS TASK I: the satisfaction of spending money - in shops, restaurants, and design (New Zealand)
Writing Feedbackfardan10 - Apr 3, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|Taks 1 : the employees according to their gender in the Great Britain
3 - Lapolo, you have a problem in your second body paragraph. It was too short and contained 'shop listings'. You...
Writing FeedbackLaPolo11 - Apr 3, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 4, 2016
|Does Charging Tourist For Admission Has More Merits Than Demerits?
3 - Hi Yonathan! Nice writing! Let me try to give some alternatives. 1. Because society is already know that...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Apr 4, 2016 / Hadiyati Fudla - Apr 4, 2016
|From the chart: Native Australia experienced the largest number entering Movie Theater at 70%
2 - Hi Desty, kindly find a few corrections below. - places that were visited - amongst theatre, -...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Apr 3, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 4, 2016
|Many citizens should pay admission to visit museum. Money is spent eg. for rebuilding the facility.
3 - To sum up, by charging the museums, there are many steads that people get rather than loss . I...
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Apr 4, 2016 / rahmat248 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: Whether crime prevention should be done or not.
3 - It causes many folk that/which are too frightened to leave However, concerning to other individuals who ...===== you...
Writing Feedbackichanpants89 - Apr 4, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 4, 2016
|A fixed punishment delivers some benefits for human being - IELTS TASK 2.
3 - hiii There are some benefits and a drawback of having a fixed penalty. , however you mentioned demerit...
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 3, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 4, 2016
|The advantages gain by museums when charging visitors for admission
2 - Some may find that museums as sacred places where ancient. However, who did you mean by some? the word...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Apr 4, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 4, 2016
|The consideration of entrance fee in some museums
2 - Please check your phrase: Ultimately, the collected money from admission charge, (do not use comma since it one unity...
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Apr 4, 2016 / fardan10 - Apr 4, 2016
|Museums are supposed to be affordable to all people
2 - , intrinsically the disadvantages of charging ... the words all in all are good words, nonetheless, these...
Writing FeedbackYusri31 - Apr 4, 2016 / LaPolo11 - Apr 4, 2016
|Charging people for admission to the museums; original writing, 40 minutes
3 - Therefore, it needs support from others to maintain (preserve) its function as educational tool. I have read your...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Apr 4, 2016 / fardan10 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: The rich and poor nations have the gap after that what the cause and solution the case
Writing Feedbackdina79 - Apr 3, 2016 / LaPolo11 - Apr 4, 2016
|Railway passengers in the U.K. In 1950, the National train stood at top rank with 1,000 users
2 - HI, here my correction for your writing: A break down of the passengers in the three kinds of...
Writing Feedbackfardan10 - Apr 4, 2016 / tiraatira11 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 Government should introduce new technologies or offer free education to improve life
2 - In my view, the first body paragraph lack of coherence. The task is about technology introduction to improve people's...
Writing FeedbackElvis_S - Apr 4, 2016 / angga93 - Apr 4, 2016
|The life cycle of salmon marine creature - big size of fish in river and in ocean habitat
NEW - The diagrams inform the life cycle of salmon marine creature as big size of fish. At the first glance...
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|Tourism can cause some problems in socio-culture due to its bad influence.
2 - Hello Adiclara I will try to give to you some suggestions to improve your writing 1. INTRODUCTION...
Writing Feedbackadeclara - Apr 3, 2016 / Yusri31 - Apr 4, 2016
|Helping the young generation be ready to face the globalization era is the task of education sector.
2 - Hi, Nelarizka. here my comments. check it, i may wrong. keep writing It is important for the students...
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 3, 2016 / RAY93 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1. Four places visited by three different people migrants living in Australia
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 3, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS writing Task 2 : The media in people's lives and politicians
2 - Hello lily89 I rewrote some sentences/applied corrections so that the text sounds better (stylistically): almost society. almost...
Writing Feedbacklily89 - Apr 3, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Apr 4, 2016
|Can we get more knowledge about the whole world only by television broadcasts or movies?
2 - Please check your phrase below: by watching enermous documenters(documenter is subject, it is suitable with documentary ) film,...
Writing FeedbackMasfufah - Apr 3, 2016 / fardan10 - Apr 4, 2016
|Increasing a large number of flight is widely known in whole world. What is the effect of this?
2 - Hi, lily89. here my comments which i focused on your body paragraphs. keep writing Several communities especially traveler, businessman,...
Writing Feedbacklily89 - Apr 3, 2016 / RAY93 - Apr 4, 2016
|Writing Task 2: In order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing
2 - Please check your phrase in paragragh one below: On the one hand,(it is inapropriate to present your main...
Writing FeedbackMasfufah - Apr 3, 2016 / fardan10 - Apr 4, 2016
|IELTS 2 : Rich vs Poor Nations - income achievement gap has been growing for at least fifty years
2 - The heterogeneous HETEROGENITY(heterogenous is adjective, only noun can be attributed by article THE) in different social-economy family (alternative phrase:...
Writing Feedbacklily89 - Apr 3, 2016 / fardan10 - Apr 4, 2016
|Issue price of stuff about the which are relatively inexpensive
Writing Feedbackrahmat248 - Apr 1, 2016 / yonathan66 - Apr 4, 2016
|The massive usage of electronic media has a drawback on the society's private relationships.
2 - which caused hardtransitive, need object people personal relationship it has created another problems need to face by...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 28, 2016 / nurannisaputry92 - Apr 3, 2016
|Some people argue that those who live in apartment tower is far from social life; IELTS
2 - Hi Miss Adeclara, I have read your essay. Let me give you suggestions for your writing. Thank you. ...
Writing Feedbackadeclara - Apr 3, 2016 / yonathan66 - Apr 3, 2016
|The pie chart presented the plus points and problems the most general categories of Fairmont Islands
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Apr 3, 2016 / Sawsana - Apr 3, 2016
|Almost a half of the Fairmont Island disbenefits come from high cost living
2 - It's a quite good but you need to give a taste use the adjectives ,connectors such first and foremost,...
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Apr 3, 2016 / Sawsana - Apr 3, 2016
|The general merits and demerits of visiting Fairmont Island; expensive living cost was complained
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 3, 2016 / Sawsana - Apr 3, 2016
|IELTS TASK I: cell-pone market share - upward trend in Nokia, Motorola, and Sony Ericsson.
2 - the topic says: selecting and reporting the main features. so except for you analysis to which sell phone brand's...
Writing Feedbackfardan10 - Apr 3, 2016 / xutong - Apr 3, 2016
|Task 1 : mobile phone manufacture for two consecutive years (2005 and 2006)
2 - Hi is this a report listed under an excel chart? I don't really understand this essay. Because to me,...
Writing FeedbackLaPolo11 - Apr 3, 2016 / xutong - Apr 3, 2016
|It is clear for me that the increasing percentage of overweight among children is parents' mistakes
2 - In these days, the rate of overweight in children shows the increasing trend. This convinces some people to consider...
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 3, 2016 / adeclara - Apr 3, 2016
|Early education boosts creativity, although it can bring detrimental effect on mentality development
4 - As it is commonly understood, Some communities in some territorial suggest (...) years old due to enhance the development...
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