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|TASK 2: Do Working in Particular Work Beneficial for Children?
2 - These days and ages , children involved in any kind of paid works are prohibited in some countries, while...
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 20, 2016 / irhame - Feb 20, 2016
|Common for a great number of children in lots of nations to involve in different kind of occupations
2 - ...the others think that(...)to work gives merits such as(...)they necessarily need to pay more attention to their education ...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 20, 2016 / nuni11 - Feb 20, 2016
|Sending the drug users to rehabilitation will heal them - jailing such people is not a solution
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 20, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 20, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: Grandparents are the best nurturer for children's growth
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 20, 2016
|Drug users rehabilitation is highly acceptable as their case can be resolved in that way.
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 20, 2016
|Although locating addicts in prison can alter their bad habit, this solution is not full enough.
2 - Jail limits the chance for users to access drugs. This is becauseTHEY ARE TIGHTLY CONTROLLED BY THE OFFICIALS IN...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 20, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : MOVING THE INDUSTRIAL CENTER TO SUBURBS AREAS
3 - Hi Mardy, upon reading and understanding your essay, I must say that you are able to create a good...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 20, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 children should be entrusted to childcare centre or parents
2 - Some considered childcare centerCENTRE as the best place ..., but others argue that grandparents is ARE the better one....
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016 / Mardy17 - Feb 20, 2016
|Societies argue that people using drugs are better being jailed than delivering them to the rehab.
3 - Hi Bunglon11 Thank you for focusing me again about the supporting explanation... Now, I can see it is...
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 20, 2016 / indah_hai - Feb 20, 2016
|Government spending on public services? Facilitating art is not a money waste too.
2 - I have read your opening paragraph of your essay, i found that there should be rewrite, let me try...
Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016 / Diqon - Feb 20, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 children should only focus on their study or not
2 - Some would argue that children should focus on their study, while others think ... While working children is are...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016 / Bunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016
|There are many factors for the crime rate increase among underaged people
2 - The number of teens who involve in criminal case hashave risen around the world. The most significant excuse...
Writing FeedbackLinda91 - Feb 3, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Feb 20, 2016
|DO THE COLOURS INFLUENCE THE PURCHASING DECISION? IELTS Task 2
2 - Hello there... here are some corrections for you: In my point of view - In my view This consideration...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 20, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Feb 20, 2016
|Children appearance of working in a company is a big deal nowadays for some countries.
2 - -----Employing children is illegal for some- are illegal -----especially confident way, than the possibility to have better future is...
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 20, 2016 / Subhasis - Feb 20, 2016
|Students can receive useful skills while working - but is a paid work really beneficial for a child?
2 - Some would argue that children who are occupied isARE forbidden ... ... basic knowledge in school which will...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 19, 2016 / Mardy17 - Feb 20, 2016
|Cell phones have some benefits, but they increase car accidents. TOEFL integrated essay
2 - However, the speaker doubts this idea by affirming that the use of cell phones on highways saveshas saved many...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Feb 19, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Feb 19, 2016
|Why do so many people want to study in English? Is it such an important international language?
Writing Feedbackabdulhaq - Feb 19, 2016 / abdulhaq - Feb 19, 2016
|False, deceptive advertising - strategies to deceive consumers
2 - The following are the corrections that I think should be applied to the text: 1. 'there has been...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Feb 19, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Feb 19, 2016
|IELTS- TASK 2-More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life
Writing Feedbackravenet - Feb 18, 2016 / ravenet - Feb 19, 2016
|Power of media can influence reader perception and their viewpoint; too much celebrities in TV
Writing Feedbackdcho23 - Feb 18, 2016 / aniani - Feb 19, 2016
|Improving social-media equipment in this era has an impact on communication among human beings
3 - Hi ADIE08, Let me check your essay Improving social media equipment device in globalization era ... ...
Writing FeedbackADIE08 - Feb 18, 2016 / Bunglon11 - Feb 18, 2016
|Innovation distinguishes between a leader and a follower - personal, local, or national
4 - If you follow in footstep of another company or person you will never generate any impact; or you will...
Writing Feedbackdomisuri - Feb 17, 2016 / mita23 - Feb 18, 2016
|"Don't seek happiness where you lost it." TOEFL: Satisfaction of owning something
3 - Hello, few corrections which I think should be there. Obviously , human is born with natural curiosity -...
Writing FeedbackMianmian - Feb 18, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Feb 18, 2016
|Tour guides travel - places full of people and time limitations
2 - ..development of people's perceptions about traveling. Just in As recently as 2015, there were millions of visitors were...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Feb 18, 2016 / EF_Kevin - Feb 18, 2016
|'More you sweat in your training less you bleed in war' - GRE ISSUE WRITING on children with talents
Writing Feedbacknav3057 - Feb 18, 2016 / Mianmian - Feb 18, 2016
|The development of people's perception of living in society results in the changes of managing money
10 - I'm sorry that you have lost your direction, but keep going, keep trying. That's the only way you're going...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Feb 15, 2016 / Hiddengrace - Feb 18, 2016
|Getting married to a person who is different from me is better. TOEFL independent essay
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Feb 15, 2016 / NourNour - Feb 17, 2016
|Some people think that computers are more of a hindrance than help in today's society
2 - Hi Ahmad It is widely known that computers can be found everywhere nowadays, and occasionally they are an...
Writing Feedbacksir99 - Feb 16, 2016 / AmitJ - Feb 17, 2016
|A process which is from IELTS examination first part
4 - There are two diagrams so u have to write ,The diagrams illustrate and start with a word 'overall' when...
Writing Feedbackelvis_pelvis - Feb 15, 2016 / ammus1 - Feb 16, 2016
|If you get a chance to change something in my society which one you prefer ?
Writing Feedbacksword_maruf - Feb 12, 2016 / luyurong - Feb 15, 2016
|Why should we learning English? Write paragraph about 140 words
2 - Hi Nguyen, let me share a few strokes to boost your essay. - Learning English is very important...
Writing Feedbacknguyenvn - Feb 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 15, 2016
|Rich children tend to acquire their needs and desires much easier than poor children and are happier
2 - First paragraph - It is generally believed that rich children are generally happier than those from poorer families....
Writing FeedbackRachael2615 - Feb 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 15, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: Choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past
2 - In my point of view, this issue could bring real drawbacksHAS DETRIMENTAL EFFECTS AS A RESULT OF PREFERRING ISOLATIONfor...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Feb 15, 2016 / majid11 - Feb 15, 2016
|About a comment. I want to wrote this a newspaper comment section but I am not sure on my grammar.
Writing Feedbackgustavo turan - Feb 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 15, 2016
|Media pay excessive concern to the celebrities' lives like actors, singers, or footballers
2 - media have to hold their principle like cover both sides as the important one （two verbs in one...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk31 - Feb 13, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 14, 2016
|Essay about young adults wanting independence and living alone or with their parents
Writing FeedbackRachelG - Feb 12, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 14, 2016
|"The Real World" - Essay - agree or disagree whether parents are the best teachers or not
4 - ... parents are still give GIVING their best advice, but children may not accept it. ... friend's advice...
Writing FeedbackRachelG - Feb 12, 2016 / amrillahmk31 - Feb 13, 2016
|TOEFL TSK: The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts and uncles) is still important nowadays
6 - Thank you！...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Feb 12, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 13, 2016
|At what age should kids begin their formal education: at four years old or 7 years old instead?
2 - Your passage is almost perfect. Could you pay attention to some details? It is true that education is...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 4, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 12, 2016
|By 2004, People preferred to buy more chicken than other meats. Fish and meat consumed - IELTS
4 - oh I see, thank you so much for the explanation. Now I know between the introduction and overview must...
Writing FeedbackHervin - Feb 6, 2016 / Hervin - Feb 11, 2016
|Is it better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects? Or the specialization has more value
2 - improved some of the grammar Within the last few decades , there has been an unprecedented development in...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Feb 11, 2016 / waqametu - Feb 11, 2016
|Animal-assisted therapy is beneficial. TOEFL integrated essay
2 - You have written one paragraph to summarize lecture and other to summarize reading. Instead, try to write some points...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Feb 9, 2016 / ameefuletra - Feb 10, 2016
|'adolescents should comprehend the reasons of going abroad' - Gap Year, Advantages and Disadvantages
NEW - Hi, dear fellows from Essay Forum, I have just figured out this website and, as I am studying for...
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|The Level of Three Predominant Exports in Southland
3 - and THEY ARE is measured in the billions of pounds. it can be obviously seen that THE international...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 8, 2016 / NourNour - Feb 9, 2016
|The impact of advances in technology on office workers productivity- TOEFL integrated essay
5 - It is okey Louise :) I find all the feedbacks in this forum beneficial especially yours. I understand that...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Feb 5, 2016 / NourNour - Feb 9, 2016
|Division of schools in the United States. TOEFL integrated essay
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|In many countries, the life expectancy is used as indicators to monitor the health of population
5 - Andri, it will be in your best interest to revise the whole essay that you have written. A number...
Writing Feedbackdcho23 - Feb 9, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 9, 2016
|Good health is one of the crucial life components. Pros and cons of the medical care improvement.
2 - Anita, when you say "living increase and life expectancy", you actually mean the same thing, which is a longer...
Writing Feedbackanita11 - Feb 9, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 9, 2016
|People are living longer due to medical care - is it a positive trend?
3 - Mita, look out for the words that you use. Make sure that you use the proper word to describe...
Writing Feedbackmita23 - Feb 9, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 9, 2016
|The proportion of monthly temperatures and the averages number of hours of sunshine per year
Writing Feedbackputri22 - Feb 9, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 9, 2016
|New York - lowest temperatures monthly, but longest hours of sunshine comparing to London and others
2 - ... average time of sunshine annually over a twelve-month period, from January to December, located in three...
Writing Feedbackmita23 - Feb 9, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 9, 2016
|Over the 50-year period, the women role has transformed in several countries.
4 - Hallo wahyutri, i think; it is better for your conclusion to follow the pattern, like writing the closing which...
Writing Feedbackwahyutri13 - Feb 8, 2016 / anita11 - Feb 9, 2016
|Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime, indicated in varied-variables
3 - ... perceived 2010/11; and actual 2010/11, are rangked as the followers ... ... noticeable account in which the actual...
Writing Feedbacksholihin84 - Feb 8, 2016 / mita23 - Feb 9, 2016
|TASk 2: Computer can easily do all the basic and advanced calculations
3 - I believe that focus on learning basic mathematics is very important to children because they will ... i think...
Writing Feedbackswara86 - Feb 7, 2016 / mita23 - Feb 9, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - People live longer due to the improving of medical care
2 - Your essay is very repetitive. i suggest you use an example to improve essay. Japan is a great example,...
Writing Feedbackputri22 - Feb 9, 2016 / waqametu - Feb 9, 2016
|Agree or disagree: Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
5 - Hello Crystal, Your essay is smooth and can be followed easily. However, I would suggest that you add...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Feb 3, 2016 / daisylad - Feb 9, 2016
|Modern communication gives great tools to connect people but it's less personal than direct relation
4 - Dear Wahyu, I appreciate your fruitful advice. Certainly, I regret the example of advantages is weak although some...
Writing FeedbackOSM - Jan 29, 2016 / OSM - Feb 8, 2016
|It's no longer a dream today. SPACE EXPLORATION WITH NATIONAL PRIDE RATHER THAN INTERNATIONAL EFFORT
2 - Tau, from reading your essay, I can see that you wrote it after having read the other essays here...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Feb 8, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 8, 2016
|Obedience, an undesirable, yet unavoidable human feature?
3 - Thank you very much for you feedback. It shall b taken seriously. I will surely readjust the introduction and...
Writing Feedbackyahyasafe7 - Feb 8, 2016 / yahyasafe7 - Feb 8, 2016
|'a bunch of people who felt danger' - The Percentage of Crime in 2009 to 2011
2 - Fariz, most of the essay formatting is correct and acceptable. However, you failed to follow the correct essay format...
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Feb 8, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 8, 2016
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