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|Harshness on Television Delivers Some detrimental Impacts for Children
2 - There is an inclining level of harshness that has been seen on television. There is a view that...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 29, 2016 / sharfina - Feb 1, 2016
|Colour in Ads. Manufacturers and retail companies know how to make people purchase their products.
2 - Hi Dynaranjani!! Personally, I find your essay quite attractive. However, I am a little bit confused by the study...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016 / Mardy17 - Feb 1, 2016
|Manufacturers and retail companies use colour as an effective way to attract the number of customers
2 - HI Fina..i am going to give you another form of introduction In order to attract more customers, an...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Feb 1, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Feb 1, 2016
|Super Screen movies adverts - GRE on 3rd Feb, Suggest improvements and rate(?/6) the argument essay.
2 - ...is the reason behind low footfall for IN the previous year. In my opinion, better if this two...
Writing Feedbackarunv - Jan 30, 2016 / dynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016
|Becoming familiar with a foreign language at primary school gives more advantages for children
3 - Nowadays (this word is already used in many writing, just try to be different), as children are part of...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 28, 2016 / Saputra Putra - Jan 31, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : THE INFLUENCE OF SOPHISTICATED MEDIA on people in a relationship
3 - (Try to use hook in beginning of your sentence, so people will be more interest) It is generally assumed...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 29, 2016 / Saputra Putra - Jan 31, 2016
|The frantic beat of a broken heart
4 - Hi! This is an introductory paragraph for a short story I am currently doing. I am thankful for the...
Writing FeedbackMajesticInnogen - Jan 30, 2016 / MajesticInnogen - Jan 31, 2016
|The Percentage of Visitors in Several Australian Destinations
2 - Hey Fariz10, I found many grammar mistakes and incorrect sentence structure in your writing. I suggest don't use complicate...
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 31, 2016 / Ethanchen1998 - Jan 31, 2016
|Decisions should not be influenced by emotions - proper logic and reasoning behind it is necessary
2 - Hey Keerhana, I have found some simple grammar mistakes. In your writing, you made statements and conclusions too quickly,...
Writing Feedbackhelloworld2016 - Jan 31, 2016 / Ethanchen1998 - Jan 31, 2016
|task 1 - The Percentage of Places Visited by Different People in Australia
4 - Hi Wahyu, In my opinion, the first and second paragraphs have delivered the point of the chart, but there...
Writing Feedbackwahyutri13 - Jan 30, 2016 / fariz10 - Jan 31, 2016
|Number of people aged 65 and more amids USA, Sweden, and Japan for over a century.
Writing Feedbackridzkiekky - Jan 30, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 31, 2016
|( TPO 5 ) things they like to do ? things they should do ?
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Jan 30, 2016 / Saharnaz - Jan 31, 2016
|People are extremely straightforward in creating a close relationship and maintain it in a good way
3 - Muhammad, when you give an example such as Eid Mubarak and Christmas, in support of the discussion that implies...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 29, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 31, 2016
|(TOEFL) Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.
2 - Comments: I think your grammar is almost perfect. My major concern is about your writing style. I find that...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Jan 30, 2016 / sntinn - Jan 31, 2016
|We should adopt a prudent attitude towards new comrades and rely on proved friends
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Jan 28, 2016 / cinrb2312 - Jan 31, 2016
|Worldwide sales of video games in dollars - IELTS Writing Task 1 Practice on 2016-01-18
2 - Hi! There are a few misspellings in this paper such as platform and handheld but I am going to...
Writing Feedbackweirdquark - Jan 30, 2016 / puykcyt - Jan 30, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: YOUNG PEOPLE SHOULD TAKE A JOB BETWEEN SCHOOL AND UNIVERSITY
4 - uncommon chunking word. quote=Riiskacha03]Having a job after graduate from school will help them their mature and...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 29, 2016 / tiaDS - Jan 30, 2016
|Compare And Contrast Study English in Dominic Place and Abroad
3 - Hey, well done. But, if you are preparing GRE,TOEFL you should increase your words per sentence since its a...
Writing Feedbacknguyenvannam - Jan 30, 2016 / AAORA - Jan 30, 2016
|'obsolete ways of thinking and acting' - Progress should be the aim of any great society.
Writing FeedbackAAORA - Jan 30, 2016 / sntinn - Jan 30, 2016
|Receiving the formal education at young age can benefit young population
Writing Feedbacksntinn - Jan 27, 2016 / AAORA - Jan 30, 2016
|People should be more independent from modern technologies to protect their ability to think
3 - Hello ajulyav Given task requires to what extent do you agree or disagree. It means that you should...
Writing Feedbackajulyav - Jan 29, 2016 / irhame - Jan 30, 2016
|The Percentage of Varies Residents in Australia who Visit Some Places
2 - The bar chart describes a THE percentage of varies VARIOUS citizenS in Australia who came WENT to some places....
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 29, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 29, 2016
|Changes in the proportion of different people who visit Zoo, Library, Theatre, and Cinema
2 - Hello, i quite understand the structure of your essay , and i clearly see that it is highly build...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk31 - Jan 29, 2016 / mennaemad - Jan 29, 2016
|TV programs, which contain extreme force action, hold negative effects on children's interaction
Writing Feedbackwahyutri13 - Jan 29, 2016 / mennaemad - Jan 29, 2016
|'teen brawls, raping, and deviant behaviour' -Violance On Television And Children's Behaviour
2 - In this advance ADVANCED technology era, television is ... I strongly agree that it is affected to the...
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 29, 2016 / amrillahmk31 - Jan 29, 2016
|There is no excuse for authorities to restrict the unpaid public rights-education and healthcare.
2 - Sholihin, first things first. Your opening statement is confused, does not use the correct word descriptors for your essay...
Writing Feedbacksholihin84 - Jan 29, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 29, 2016
|The influence of violence scenes in television for children and their behavior
2 - Hi Miftah, You have several advance words on your essay, However, I see that your conclusion is not...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk31 - Jan 29, 2016 / fariz10 - Jan 29, 2016
|Electronic media, through their services, can create a great relation between people
2 - advanced technology takes a significant part in human's life, since it encourages people harmful for their reciprocal lives, since...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Jan 29, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 29, 2016
|Prejudice of Personality by Experience : Can We?
3 - ... clothes which are worn by inhabitants PEOPLE represent their true colors CHARACTERS... This essay will discuss...
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Jan 28, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 29, 2016
|Media needs to air a program reporting ordinary people which has more value for everyone
2 - media have a pivotal role for inhabitants → in ordinary people which (who) have more valuable lesson...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 29, 2016 / Crystal812 - Jan 29, 2016
|Writing Task 2: Most successful inventions do not rely on complicated technology.
Writing Feedbackswara86 - Jan 28, 2016 / Crystal812 - Jan 29, 2016
|Lecture points and statement about cars; Integrated Writing Task & Independent Writing Task of TPO 4
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|The happiness of people with "married" status is clearly greater than another in the all age group
2 - ... in particular the blissfulness of PEOPLE who have married ... ... people with married status is clearly greater...
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Jan 29, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Jan 29, 2016
|Recently, some people prefer to build new job field instead of involving themselves in a company
2 - Hi Awe!! I would like to highlight the thesis statement on your writing. ... Even though there are...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 29, 2016 / Mardy17 - Jan 29, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - THE IMPORTANCE OF TAKING A JOB AFTER GRADUATED IN HIGH SCHOOL
4 - I will give you a hand.. Actually you do not define clearly the young people that you discuss in...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 27, 2016 / aflah15 - Jan 29, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 having a job prior entering to university has many benefits
6 - Let me give you some suggestion.. :) Some people say that having a job prior BEFORE entering to university......
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Jan 27, 2016 / awe_28 - Jan 29, 2016
|The formal training for the children is good to develop their attitude and behaviour in the future
2 - Details: The formal training such as formal public school becomes a choice for many people to enroll their...
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 28, 2016 / Crystal812 - Jan 28, 2016
|Children Should Begin To Learn Foreign Language At Primary School Rather than Secondary School
2 - In contemporary era, learning foreign language is an update trend for young children. As such, some convince learning...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Jan 28, 2016 / irhame - Jan 28, 2016
|It believes that children should be taught to be good parents at their ages.
2 - - Confusing sentence, not a good comparison for a parallel sentence. - *themselves* - Responding to an essay...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk31 - Jan 28, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jan 28, 2016
|It would be better to introduce the foreign language in primary school rather than in secondary
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 28, 2016 / swara86 - Jan 28, 2016
|The Advantages and Disadvantages of Taught Foreign Language to Children at Primary School
Writing FeedbackPey28 - Jan 28, 2016 / swara86 - Jan 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - MASS MEDIA SHOULD PAY MORE ATTENTION TO ORDINARY PEOPLE
4 - Your paragraph in support of your point of view regarding the media attention being showered on celebrities explains your...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Jan 28, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 28, 2016
|Many people prefer to open their own job field rather than enroll to a corporation or organisation
2 - Although this may brings a de merit, as wepeople need longer time to earn money(...)starting a business has some...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 28, 2016 / nuni11 - Jan 28, 2016
|[IELTS TASK WRITING] The Comparison of Economic and Social Indicators of Four States
3 - You did not format the report summary properly. When you write yout thesis statement, you must provide a description...
Writing Feedbacksholihin84 - Jan 28, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 28, 2016
|A report on the poor conditions of the school cafeteria
2 - Hello Pine, Your solution in this case is awesome. You may need a plan to realize your solutions and...
Writing FeedbackPinkyTune - Jan 28, 2016 / wahyutri13 - Jan 28, 2016
|Topic: Rewards & Productivity (Integrated Writing) Need guidance. My test is 2 weeks away from today
3 - Umm, my essay is for TOEFL ibt test, Writing Section Question 1- Integrated Writing I really don't think that...
Writing Feedbackcyrussth - Jan 28, 2016 / cyrussth - Jan 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: The advantages and disadvantages of taking a job between school and university
6 - Working for a while provides a large opportunity for young people you cannot use for a while here,...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Jan 28, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 28, 2016
|Encouraged sense of competition and taught to co-operate become more useful adults
NEW - Question: Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who...
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|'level of blissfulness' - IELTS TASK 1 : HAPPINESS RATING CHARTS
3 - ... information about the blissfulness HAPPINESS level of individuals who have ARE EITHER married and OR still single, ...group,...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 28, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 28, 2016
|Some claims that planting the idea of competition in children's life is an obligation
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 27, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 28, 2016
|Both parents and schools hold the roles for children healthy lifestyle
2 - Prompt: Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both of schools and parents are responsible for solving this...
Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Jan 28, 2016 / sntinn - Jan 28, 2016
|It is assumed that children should learn foreign language at primary school than secondary school
NEW - QUESTION: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school...
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|The cause of unhealthy lifestyle among youth generation
2 - ... parents and teachers are to help HELPING their children's lifestyle. ... for instance, teachers are more likely to...
Writing Feedbackdesgit33 - Jan 28, 2016 / amrillahmk31 - Jan 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: SOME ORGANISATIONS BELIEVE THAT THEIR EMPLOYEES SHOULD DRESS SMARTLY
2 - On the other side others believe that their worker WORKERS "it applies to all" have ... ... determine someone's...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 28, 2016 / amrillahmk31 - Jan 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 : CAREER RELATIONSHIP AMONG WORKERS - officers' responses
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Jan 27, 2016 / ichatea07 - Jan 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - School Should Provide Formal Training For Students To Be Good Parents
4 - I like the intersting idea in your passage. However, there may be a few grammer mistakes. itmay beappears...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Jan 27, 2016 / Crystal812 - Jan 28, 2016
|The obligation of official training for children, to become proper parents, is not working.
3 - While the essay you present is based on logic, you have not considered one very important piece of information...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 27, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2016
|Archaeology essay for my cousework
2 - Archaeological studies can objectively reveal and explain the stages of culture in a particular region Trowulan and contiguity and...
Writing Feedbackmasyhudi - Jan 26, 2016 / CollegeMe - Jan 27, 2016
|Technology devices brings merits toward the users, particularly on their personal relationships
2 - Make sure that you use the correct words to describe certain aspects of the essay. For example, use the...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 22, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2016
|Essay about encouraged young people to work or travel between studies
4 - Thank you for your explanation and example. I will try to make that point in the future essay....
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