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|Contrast people of your age with those of your parents' generation; beliefs, values, goals... etc.
5 - I agree with Meyani and besides that, the 4th paragrath ('Finally' one) seems too short. It feels like you...
Writing Feedbackbottles - Mar 15, 2016 / chelsea17 - Mar 19, 2016
|The main objective of university education
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 16, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 18, 2016
|The main goal of universities: to link students for their own value or prepare them for a future job
2 - hi Siti, the problem I find with your essay is choosing the wrong words. Secondly, I understand the prompt...
Writing Feedbacksiti hamsyah - Mar 17, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 17, 2016
|Living in a large city has certain advantages over living in a small town. Urbanization role
NEW - We cannot simply deny the immensely important role of the urbanization in raising our living standards. Consequentially, there are...
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|Debates on punishment to children - Ielts academic writing task
4 - Hello kuanchinchin, Let me give you some opinions on your essay. 1). Your first paragraph is too...
Writing Feedbackkuanchinchin - Mar 15, 2016 / bottles - Mar 17, 2016
|Transfer Essay: Page "87" of your autobiography: "I am a pencil"
2 - Hi Ttina, Your story is very touching. You also have strong writing skills, and you are able to...
Writing Feedbackttina - Mar 16, 2016 / JuanSebastianR - Mar 17, 2016
|To broadcast celebrities news or informations about some ordinary people?
NEW - The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers....
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|My discovery of my love, Astronomy - for Stanford summer on intellectual vitality. critique required
3 - I would love more feedback guys? Justin like really meant like as I didn't have lots passion for astronomy...
Writing FeedbackRitvik123 - Mar 15, 2016 / Ritvik123 - Mar 17, 2016
|TOEFL for immigration purpose - to be or not to be independent?
Writing Feedbackkjiajing92 - Mar 16, 2016 / ttina - Mar 16, 2016
|'three kinds of treatments applied' - The process of recycling the rain water.
Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Task 1- Process of reuse rainwater - recycling method
2 - Hi Desty, I would like to share my insights on your analysis by enhancing the sentences if needed. ...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|Recommendation letter from my professor to the University of Edinburgh on continuing master degree
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Mar 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 16, 2016
|The usage of energy in USA started from 1980 to 2030 - The energy outlook
2 - The graph illustrates from energy [...] pattern over the period as a whole. A breakdown of proportion of...
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 15, 2016 / irhame - Mar 16, 2016
|Some say, government funding help fluorish arts; others that it threatens it's integrity - GRE issue
3 - Hello Ban I suggest you to make some variations in your writing by putting compound and complex senteces in...
Writing FeedbackBan123 - Mar 15, 2016 / Desty22 - Mar 15, 2016
|A recent study in 1997 and 2006 representing the communication skills in work (IELTS Task 1)
3 - Hello Anita Let me give my opinion about your essay Pay attention to your 1st paragraph. You should...
Writing Feedbackanita11 - Feb 27, 2016 / adrian21 - Mar 15, 2016
|Task 1- The Develoment in Eastminster from 1999 to 2009
2 - Hi Lita, after reading and understanding your analysis, I must say uou did quiet a good job, the analysis...
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|The alteration of town centre over three hundreds of year - writing ielts task 1
2 - Hi Hani, I would like to share my insights with a focus on the last paragraph of the analysis....
Writing Feedbackhanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 15, 2016
|In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computer
3 - Good start! You need to expand your answer and to organize it into at least three paragraphs! ...
Writing Feedbackunibuti - Mar 12, 2016 / EF_Carol - Mar 15, 2016
|Nowadays, children have less pressure than the past age and more of the life-advancing opportunities
2 - Hello angga93 You should consider applying a few stylistic corrections to the text. They are as follows: in...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 14, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Mar 15, 2016
|Task 1- Comparison kind of movies watched in UK and US
4 - The bar chart illustrates the number of film films watched in England and Australia in 2001, categorized by US,...
Writing FeedbackDesty22 - Mar 14, 2016 / Lita27 - Mar 14, 2016
|The international food such as fast food is more enjoyed by majority of people than local culinary
NEW - In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on...
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|I believe that modern cuisine brings the extinction of traditional meal.
2 - Hello Nisa, I have some advice related to your introduction and conclusion. First of all, in introduction, you did...
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 14, 2016 / yonathan66 - Mar 14, 2016
|It is better for children to grow up in big cities rather than in a countryside - more opportunities
3 - hello abigail, let me comment your essay. In the introduction, I conclude you more explain in the way you...
Writing Feedbackabigail anderson - Mar 12, 2016 / hanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016
|Task 2 - Children Get More Pressure in This Era
2 - Hello Inastia. Your writing is good. I want to check your writing. Please correct me, if I have mistakes...
Writing FeedbackInastia47 - Mar 14, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 14, 2016
|People do not have to bother to cook complex meals because of their unhealthy fast foods
3 - Hallo Miss Nida, I have read your good essay, let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 14, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 14, 2016
|IELTS Task1: The figure shows demographic trends in Scotland
3 - The line figure illustrates three kinds ... you may see other introduction styles: An illustration of demographic...
Writing Feedbackrannie604 - Feb 28, 2016 / Lita27 - Mar 14, 2016
|Healthy lifestyle is possible for people
2 - Over time, a healthy lifestyle has [...] could be possible to realize it. Hello, i have some suggestion...
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 14, 2016 / yonathan66 - Mar 14, 2016
|'hindrance for national identity'; International fast food replaces traditional foods
NEW - In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 14, 2016 / — -
|Original writing (ą 25 minutes): Bulgarian expatriates' education levels
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 14, 2016 / nelarizka79 - Mar 14, 2016
|Task 1- How to Recycle Your Old Newspaper to a Valuable New Paper
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 14, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 14, 2016
|[IELTS Writing Task 1] A comparison of money spent on three common fast foods in the UK in 1990
2 - Hi Lita, first of all, I'd like to share my thoughts on the way your analysis is written, not...
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 14, 2016
|The consumption cost of individuals in several items in five various countries during 2012
2 - Hani, first thing that I notice in your analysis is the use of punctuation marks, instead of using a...
Writing Feedbackhanimeilita97 - Mar 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 14, 2016
|The Number of Purchases on Hamburger, Fish & Chips and Pizza in UK, Classified by Income in 1990
2 - The number of purchases on the hamburger, fish & chips and pizza in the UK, classified by income in...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 13, 2016 / Lita27 - Mar 14, 2016
|According to the diagram, the heat comes out to the upstairs through several media.
3 - Hai putri22, you may consider this alternative answer. I grouped the diagram based on floors in the house, first...
Writing Feedbackputri22 - Feb 28, 2016 / Lita27 - Mar 14, 2016
|People Costs on Certain Needs in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002
2 - Well, this body paragraph has covered what is being discussed in the overview, but I think you need a...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 13, 2016 / hanimps97 - Mar 14, 2016
|Travelling is a sweet escape from stressful life - and the best is sharing joy with a loving family
5 - Hi Kimgrey, Here are the corrections I would suggest: Many workers allotted timeMany people allocate time for...
Writing FeedbackKimgrey - Mar 9, 2016 / Ethan M - Mar 14, 2016
|The Production Process of Hydro-Electric Energy
2 - It is important to note that [...] energies are converted into electrical energy. Overall, some steps are taken in...
Writing Feedbackadrian21 - Mar 13, 2016 / eddies - Mar 13, 2016
|National Consumer Expenses Proportion in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002
2 - The figure forA comparison of national consumer expenses in five selected countries, categorized by budgeting priority, is presented in...
Writing FeedbackLita27 - Mar 13, 2016 / eddies - Mar 13, 2016
|[ielts] Right now, many countries are exploited remote areas for more resources. Adv vs Disadv
3 - hello @themirror Let me give my opinion about your writing be careful with structure in a sentence....
Writing Feedbackthemirror - Mar 11, 2016 / adrian21 - Mar 13, 2016
|The expense on five kinds of entertainment including cinema, video, music, publishing and television
3 - Hello Tran, this is my suggestion for you : The provided bar chart illustrates about the expenses...
Writing Feedbacktrantrungmy1097 - Mar 8, 2016 / hanimeilita97 - Mar 13, 2016
|Toefl: people are allowed to join politics
2 - Write "with the passage of time" in place of "as the time passes by" and *since* the last few...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Mar 9, 2016 / Rabia91 - Mar 10, 2016
|TOEFL: The statement talking about the education goal and teaching people how to educate themselves.
Writing Feedbacktim912104a - Mar 10, 2016 / Hanan1999 - Mar 10, 2016
|Why do some cultivated people read everything from books to the Internet sites?
Writing Feedbackmroank2010 - Mar 6, 2016 / mroank2010 - Mar 9, 2016
|Cyber bullying has always been an issue in my life
Writing Feedbackkbratcher1 - Mar 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 8, 2016
|The dramatic increase in the proportion of older people (65 and over) in three countries.
Writing FeedbackJasper_ngoc - Mar 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 8, 2016
|TOEFL: the statement that teenagers nowadays do not spend enough time in helping their communities.
2 - Hi Menglu. I think you have enough points in elaborating your essay. However, I believe you should change your...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Mar 7, 2016 / Lynn88Mr - Mar 7, 2016
|Give suggestion: can clothes indicate human's character?
3 - Thanks for your explanation. I still need an assistance for improving my writing skill. Yes, I need more...
Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Feb 28, 2016 / Bunglon11 - Mar 6, 2016
|TOEFL TASK: children prepare for adult life → do a part-time job
2 - Hello Below are some stylistic adjustments that I think you should apply to the text: of people's...
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Mar 6, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Mar 6, 2016
|"It's not beauty if it can be removed with a wet kleenex." - A humble opinion essay
3 - Hi Doga, I enjoyed reading your essay, I find the argument to be making its point, it's not merely...
Writing Feedbackdogaaslaner - Mar 3, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 4, 2016
|Different people have different opinion about standard for imitation - role models for youngsters
3 - Ksenia, first of all, what I noticed on your essay is that you have your paragraphs in small fragments...
Writing FeedbackMaximama - Mar 3, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 4, 2016
|Writing Task 1: total population of old people in three different countries
5 - HI Mita, I understand that you have gathered quiet a few remarks and modifications done in your essay and...
Writing Feedbackmita23 - Feb 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 4, 2016
|There are also passion and hobby which should be taken into consideration at work, not only money
2 - Hi Mifta, I did the editing part for your essay including grammar and language. However, your essay lacks the...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk31 - Feb 29, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Mar 2, 2016
|Hybrid cars sale trend in Japan increased significantly from 2006-2009
3 - Hi Anita, it's good to know that our insights help in enhancing your essay. For future writing reference, please...
Writing Feedbackanita11 - Feb 2, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 2, 2016
|Contributions of scientists and artists to society - comparison
4 - Hi, you write very well for a 30 minutes essay. I believe you should have a balance points when...
Writing FeedbackJay2016 - Mar 1, 2016 / Lynn88Mr - Mar 2, 2016
|Most governments allocate a considerable portion of their budget on space exploration.
2 - Considering this is an essay for undergraduate student, it is pretty much shorter than what I had expected. Is...
Writing FeedbackJay2016 - Mar 2, 2016 / Lynn88Mr - Mar 2, 2016
|ISSUE OF IMPORTANCE - UT APP ESSAY; Our failing education system!
2 - Hi. You have such an interesting essay. In this type of essay where you would state facts and examples,...
Writing Feedbacknicholai - Feb 28, 2016 / Lynn88Mr - Mar 2, 2016
|The importance and meaning of international education - avoiding conflicts between people
2 - Hi. From your title, I believe your essay has deviated from the main point which is how education can...
Writing Feedbackjehona mustafa - Feb 29, 2016 / Lynn88Mr - Mar 2, 2016
|Running business is one of many jobs option which people can choose. Money is crucial?
2 - Hey, Mita. your writing is good. I want to highlight one thing which is try to take the previous...
Writing Feedbackmita23 - Feb 28, 2016 / NourNour - Mar 1, 2016
|It is evident that the business has to search the profit to maintain the production and pay a salary
2 - The introduction requires a little change. *To begin, Making money is the aim of the private business. ...
Writing Feedbackanita11 - Feb 28, 2016 / Jay2016 - Mar 1, 2016
|Majority of employees had very good relationships not only with their supervisor (2005-2009)
2 - Alifah, on this analysis, you have written it fairly well, you made sure that the facts and figures shown...
Writing Feedbackputri22 - Feb 28, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 1, 2016
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