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|Money is the only motivation at work why people prefer working in the same company for many years
3 - People do need money to survive (work) to get money . Some people believe that the the (the) main...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Feb 1, 2016 / Linda91 - Feb 2, 2016
|The benefits and drawbacks of the holiday at Fairmont Island are illustrated in the charts.
3 - Hi Mbak Wahyu, here some suggestions, especially for overview. The data set isWAS obtained from surveyyou could paraphrase...
Writing Feedbackwahyutri13 - Feb 2, 2016 / fijarakbar25 - Feb 2, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : CAN OUTFIT APPEARANCE SHOWS SOMEONE'S CHARACTER?
3 - Mardy, the prompt clearly states that you must indicate your personal opinion on the topic, aside from presenting the...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 2, 2016
|The total of money spent on books in four countries between 1995 & 2005 experienced upward tendency
NEW - The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995...
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|Untalented Children in artistic learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school
2 - Sharfina, you mention that a child should be pulled out of art classes in order to help them avoid...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Feb 2, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 2, 2016
|Artistic talent is important in order to learn non-academic subject.
2 - I can't point out what the purpose of this sentence. I will argue that non-academic subject bringing...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Feb 1, 2016 / erin24 - Feb 2, 2016
|The pie charts inform about the most common advantages and disadvatages of Fairmont Island.
NEW - The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvatages of Fairmont Island, according to a survey of...
Writing Feedbacksholihin84 - Feb 2, 2016 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2 : NON ART-SKILLED STUDENTS LEARN HOW TO PAINT AND DRAW
2 - Teaching such students about painting and drawing requires much more time and patience. 1. It was confuse sentence. ...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016 / sholihin84 - Feb 2, 2016
|Pupils should pay more attention to their lectures in the class
3 - In brief, although some pupils ARE more comfortable if they study at A university with the internet based courses...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Feb 1, 2016 / swara86 - Feb 2, 2016
|IELTS TAS 1 a plenty of travel makers utilizing three main airports in New York City
2 - This then witnessed a gradual incline from ... This trend witnessed a little increase from 1996 to 1999....
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 1, 2016 / Diqon - Feb 2, 2016
|'LaGuardia was the most popular' - TASK 1: The number of travelers using airports in New York city
2 - A breakdown of the number of people [....] who visit john. F Kennedy airport. the bar chart informs...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 1, 2016 / Diqon - Feb 2, 2016
|It is generally thought that employees are choosing their jobs based on an offered income
2 - albeit they have high salary Virtually supportersproponents working environment ? environmental work People are likely leaveleaving...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Feb 1, 2016 / sharfina - Feb 2, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 : MONEY is an essential motivation at work but not the only one.
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 1, 2016
|Color has tendency to alter human's mood
2 - Color has A tendency to alter human's mood. In any case, this influence people HEALTH recovery their health in...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Feb 1, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Feb 1, 2016
|Colors come to manufactures and retail companies' goods in order to attract purchasers
3 - Hi Saputera, what such a brilliant idea, however you need to give a more detailed elaboration to support your...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Feb 1, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Feb 1, 2016
|With the exception in 2009, The US had the highest sale number of hybrid transportation
4 - Overall, it can obviously be seen that with the exception in OF 2009, which was the highest number...
Writing Feedbackputri22 - Feb 1, 2016 / aflah15 - Feb 1, 2016
|TASK 1: Annual Total Passengers in Three Major Airports
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 1, 2016 / dynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016
|The number of hybrid cars sale in Japan stood at 50.000 in 2006 then increased sharply to 340.000
4 - Hi, dcho. Let me give you some suggestions, Consider to paraphrase the question to put in your...
Writing Feedbackdcho23 - Feb 1, 2016 / nuni11 - Feb 1, 2016
|Interview plays an important role in recruitment of organization
2 - than it may well become possibleBE THE RIGHT PATH to get potential workerS . However, the idea of...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Feb 1, 2016 / pikul - Feb 1, 2016
|1992 survey: television was popular in the evenings while radio were listened in the morning
Writing FeedbackKirsty - Jan 30, 2016 / Kirsty - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: COLOUR EFFECT ON PEOPLE LIVES - particularly on patiens and workers
Writing Feedbackpikul - Feb 1, 2016 / angga93 - Feb 1, 2016
|I strongly believe that inventors play the same significant role as doctors. IELTS TASK 2
3 - Alifah, I would like to share my thoughts and corrections for your essay. As you have noticed, there are...
Writing Feedbackputri22 - Feb 1, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 1, 2016
|Each occupation has different roles and functions in the society; inventors vs doctors essay
Writing Feedbackmita23 - Feb 1, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 1, 2016
|The bar chart illustrates the alteration of the global sales of hybrid vehicles - four-year period
2 - Mita, you need to improve the composition of your opening statement. As a report overview, you are expected to...
Writing Feedbackmita23 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|TASK2: Computer games may bring negative effect for children. In reverse, these games are valuable.
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Feb 1, 2016 / mita23 - Feb 1, 2016
|From the whole world music, traditional one is genuinely meaningful and should be preserved.
2 - Rahmat, your opening statement would have been helped by the presentation of a pro and con opinion regarding the...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|Violence and crime increase among teenagers as a consequence of playing violent games?
Writing Feedbackthaolf - Feb 1, 2016 / thaolf - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS writing task 2: my view about the usefulness of doctors versus inventors
2 - Angga, you have a pretty good essay discussion going here. The examples that you used are relevant and easily...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|Nowadays, e-learning becomes one of popular studying methods at university
2 - Fariz, please complete your opening statement by indicating your personal opinion regarding the topic statement. It is a requirement...
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|Most employers interview candidates before hiring them
2 - Sharfina, watch out for those tricky capitalization problems. Only proper nouns should be capitalized so the word Job doesn't...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|Some people argue that the great device to communicate people should be internet
3 - Siti, I have a question for you. Why are you discussing the ability of the internet to keep people...
Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|The source shows the sale of hybrid vehicles in the world from 2006 to 2009
4 - Adie, while your discussion is concise and can be appreciated for its distinct length and information style, you were...
Writing FeedbackADIE08 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|Would the international student exchange be beneficial for all teenage school students?
2 - Hi Akbar, I thought you have problems with grammar. I found some gramatical error on your essay. In...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Feb 1, 2016 / fariz10 - Feb 1, 2016
|DISCUSSION ABOUT INTERNET BASED COURSE AND ATTENDING LECTURE IN UNIVERSITY
2 - _______influenced many aspect of human life (human's life)______ : possessive for human = human's _______specifically (at) education field_______...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Feb 1, 2016 / angga93 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 : IS JOB INTERVIEW THE BEST METHOD OF HIRING NEW WORKER?
2 - Dear dynaranjani, I personally find that your basic writing elements are quite good. However, after reading for the first...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016 / sntinn - Feb 1, 2016
|PROPORTION OF FOSSIL FUELS CONSUMPTION IN THE US AND THE UK
2 - Your understanding of the chart is quite evident. As always, there are just certain confusing times in your essay...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|Doctors and inventors should collaborate in many aspects to bring community better life and future
4 - ...Some people think that inventors have biga significant role in community, (...) that doctors have biggermore significant role in...
Writing FeedbackLinda91 - Feb 1, 2016 / sir99 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2: HIRING NEW EMPLOYEES - is the interview process necessary?
2 - ... to find out a suitable employees... plural noun ...important while deciding new workers. i think it is better...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Feb 1, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS2: Inventors vs Doctors - both professions have the same significant role in people's lives.
2 - Dwi, you can strengthen your opening statement by giving the reader an overview of the reasons that you will...
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Feb 1, 2016 / vangiespen - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS - 20 minutes task - the sale of hybrid vehicles in global
2 - You should try to compare more about the figures since it extremely important for the high score.. The...
Writing FeedbackLinda91 - Feb 1, 2016 / pikul - Feb 1, 2016
|The year of 2009 saw a dramatic increase in Japan's sale of hybrid vehicles
3 - Halo @wulan nice to read your writing it good, but i will give some suggestion in order to discuss...
Writing Feedbackwulanbila16 - Feb 1, 2016 / Arundyna - Feb 1, 2016
|Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel
3 - #Colour in workplace is less important. It does not completely (complete) influencing performance of worker. #For example, In...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Feb 1, 2016 / Linda91 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS 2 - Positives Versus Negatives of Computer Games for Children
2 - ...but they will have a negative sideeffect in their social lives... They have several targets in games in...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Feb 1, 2016 / wulanbila16 - Feb 1, 2016
|Colour as a powerful weapon against people's uninfluenced shopping decisions - IELTS TASK 2
4 - #Colour is a powerful tool that is used to great effect by manufacturers (manufacture) and retail companies (company) when...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Feb 1, 2016 / Linda91 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 : rates of petrol consumption as per incomes characteristics in the US and the UK
4 - Many thanks for the corrections of my writing. I still have to practise a lot, especially in where to...
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Feb 1, 2016 / ichatea07 - Feb 1, 2016
|TASK 1: The USA and The UK Expenditure of Petrol
Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 1, 2016 / wulanbila16 - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 whether internet is the best means to search information or not
NEW - It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 1, 2016 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2 - DOES COLOUR AFFECT ON PRODUCTIVITY AND PEOPLE'S HEALTH?
3 - First of all , nice job on the arguements the first argument is particularly strong. However, you might need...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Jan 31, 2016 / Samuelsam123 - Feb 1, 2016
|(TOEFL) Is it more important to learn facts from factual experiences?
Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Feb 1, 2016 / sntinn - Feb 1, 2016
|IELTS2: INTERNET - EXCELLENT MEANS OF COMMUNICATION but not be the best place to find information.
2 - Most people are standing on their ownthoughts saying internet is a good way to communicate Internet can be...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 1, 2016 / Crystal812 - Feb 1, 2016
|Harshness on Television Delivers Some detrimental Impacts for Children
2 - There is an inclining level of harshness that has been seen on television. There is a view that...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 29, 2016 / sharfina - Feb 1, 2016
|Colour in Ads. Manufacturers and retail companies know how to make people purchase their products.
2 - Hi Dynaranjani!! Personally, I find your essay quite attractive. However, I am a little bit confused by the study...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016 / Mardy17 - Feb 1, 2016
|Manufacturers and retail companies use colour as an effective way to attract the number of customers
2 - HI Fina..i am going to give you another form of introduction In order to attract more customers, an...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Feb 1, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Feb 1, 2016
|Super Screen movies adverts - GRE on 3rd Feb, Suggest improvements and rate(?/6) the argument essay.
2 - ...is the reason behind low footfall for IN the previous year. In my opinion, better if this two...
Writing Feedbackarunv - Jan 30, 2016 / dynaranjani - Feb 1, 2016
|Becoming familiar with a foreign language at primary school gives more advantages for children
3 - Nowadays (this word is already used in many writing, just try to be different), as children are part of...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 28, 2016 / Saputra Putra - Jan 31, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : THE INFLUENCE OF SOPHISTICATED MEDIA on people in a relationship
3 - (Try to use hook in beginning of your sentence, so people will be more interest) It is generally assumed...
Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Jan 29, 2016 / Saputra Putra - Jan 31, 2016
|The frantic beat of a broken heart
4 - Hi! This is an introductory paragraph for a short story I am currently doing. I am thankful for the...
Writing FeedbackMajesticInnogen - Jan 30, 2016 / MajesticInnogen - Jan 31, 2016
|The Percentage of Visitors in Several Australian Destinations
2 - Hey Fariz10, I found many grammar mistakes and incorrect sentence structure in your writing. I suggest don't use complicate...
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 31, 2016 / Ethanchen1998 - Jan 31, 2016
|Decisions should not be influenced by emotions - proper logic and reasoning behind it is necessary
2 - Hey Keerhana, I have found some simple grammar mistakes. In your writing, you made statements and conclusions too quickly,...
Writing Feedbackhelloworld2016 - Jan 31, 2016 / Ethanchen1998 - Jan 31, 2016
|task 1 - The Percentage of Places Visited by Different People in Australia
4 - Hi Wahyu, In my opinion, the first and second paragraphs have delivered the point of the chart, but there...
Writing Feedbackwahyutri13 - Jan 30, 2016 / fariz10 - Jan 31, 2016
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