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|Immigrants deal with a number of undesirable issues when trying to adapt with the new society
2 - Hello @zhongruansg, good to see you I have a few feedbacks, hope that helps 1) Task response: For...
Writing Feedbackzhongruansg - Aug 13, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 13, 2018
|The questions of whether people should be paid excessive wages is controversial issue in the world
2 - Elnur, the way I teach my students to write these essays is to have them avoid writing a comprehensive...
Writing Feedbackelnur uncle - Aug 12, 2018 / Holt - Aug 13, 2018
|IELTS 2 - should teenagers do part-time jobs? Both side of the views and my opinion
3 - Hi Eddy, thanks for your comments. It is true that my opening paragraph is fail to IELTS requirement. ...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 12, 2018 / smally01 - Aug 12, 2018
|It is possible to prevent and solve the problems connected with living in a foreign country
3 - Hi Holt, Thank you so much for your feedback. I will write again and focus on speaking a foreign...
Writing FeedbackNinawj - Aug 11, 2018 / Ninawj - Aug 12, 2018
|IELTS wirting task2 subjects for university students to study
2 - 1. In the first sentence of your opening paragraph, you said you agree with this statement. But in the...
Writing Feedbacknehs311014 - Aug 11, 2018 / TriceLiu - Aug 12, 2018
|ielts writing task 2 - ILLEGAL TO REJECT JOB'S APPLICANTS BASED ON THEIR AGE
3 - @zahranatsir I think that your got the great opening ,however, there are some mistakes in the main paragraphs. 1."On...
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018 / nehs311014 - Aug 11, 2018
|The average amount of Vietnamese people who studied in France, Russia and in the USA (2000 - 2015)
2 - Dang, you have written too many words for this essay. Remember that editing time is required in order to...
Writing Feedbackdesunkid - Aug 10, 2018 / Holt - Aug 11, 2018
|Data of Trenton-Mercer Airport, Paying Passengers in New Jersey.
3 - Hoang, you have to remember that the Task 1 essay has a standard format that you have to follow...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 10, 2018 / Holt - Aug 11, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - posting comments on product or service to the internet, is it good or bad?
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 9, 2018 / smally01 - Aug 10, 2018
|Agriculture development didn't solved the hunger problem over the world
Writing Feedbacknehs311014 - Aug 9, 2018 / nehs311014 - Aug 10, 2018
|Traditional and international music are two forms that are completely different
2 - Hi @HKad2210 For the Introduction, you should state your intention clearly (e.g: Music plays an important roles in the...
Writing FeedbackHKad2210 - Aug 10, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 10, 2018
|Banning of private cars and permitting public vehicles in city centers.
4 - Hello. I think you need to fully understand what the prompt says first, and next time, try to outline...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Aug 8, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 10, 2018
|Writing task 2 IELTS. These days people in some countries are living in a "throw-away" society
3 - You are doing yourself a disservice by not practicing under time constraints. Since you did not write this essay...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 9, 2018 / Holt - Aug 10, 2018
|Many countries spend a lot of money in the arts. Some people think investment in ....IELTS writing
3 - Kevin, you have the body of the essay correct. You used the perfect reference phrases to indicate which side...
Writing Feedbacklovearya - Aug 9, 2018 / Holt - Aug 10, 2018
|Challenging life in a country where we need to communicate via foreign language
4 - @TriceLiu Thank you so much. I will be more careful about the basic rule and the organization of me...
Writing Feedbackkiki94094 - Aug 7, 2018 / kiki94094 - Aug 9, 2018
|(WRITING IELTS TASK 2) Spending too much money on national celebrations. Agree or disagree?
2 - Quyen, you have misunderstood the prompt discussion instruction. You are not being asked for your opinion regarding the need...
Writing Feedbacktuquyen1910 - Aug 8, 2018 / Holt - Aug 9, 2018
|The popularity of reading news online means crisis for printed newspapers
3 - Shurui, I am impressed with the improvement in your writing. You have shown a tremendous amount of growth with...
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Aug 8, 2018 / Holt - Aug 9, 2018
|People think wearing stylish clothing is important. Positive or negative development?
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Aug 7, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 9, 2018
|INTRODUCE MY JOB AND FAMILY
3 - you're right, my English is very simple. Thanks for your corrections and recommendations. @jalp The family is something...
Writing Feedbackasepmylocal - Aug 9, 2018 / asepmylocal - Aug 9, 2018
|Study of genetics recently has enormous role in this era - IELTS 2
2 - Intro: paraphrase of the prompt and your opinion. You did not mention your opinion on this. The 'key'...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Aug 6, 2018 / jalp - Aug 8, 2018
|Ielts task 2: should charity organizations only help their citizens or anyone who in need?
5 - Min, in actuality, your essay is considered partially correct in response. It is partially correct and would be scored...
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 7, 2018 / Holt - Aug 8, 2018
|Having Children Later in Life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development
3 - Shurui, this paper is almost perfect in presentation and that, is not a good thing. Why is this not...
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Aug 7, 2018 / Holt - Aug 8, 2018
|The majority of UK students speak at least one other language in addition to English
3 - Hello @Holt Thank you so much for the feedback. It's extremely helpful and I'm so glad that I found...
Writing Feedbackmsyoshino - Jul 26, 2018 / msyoshino - Aug 7, 2018
|IELTS WRITNG TASK 1: The process of producing coffee and preparing for sale
2 - Moon, you can present a cleaner, concise, and thorough opening summary if you do not separate your statements into...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: The graph shows the information about the UK birth rate from 1973 to 2008.
4 - Thank you all for the details review, I would correct and define my writing based on your feedbacks....
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 6, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 7, 2018
|The downsides of purchasing various products at cheaper prices - Ielts2
3 - Thank you so much for your detailed review, my aim for Writing is around 7.5, but it seems that...
Writing FeedbackMinh2903 - Aug 6, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 7, 2018
|Writing task 2 IELTS. Rising temperature globally on the Earth
3 - Hoang, this is a direct response essay. So your thesis statement at the end of the 3 paraphrased sentences...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|Writing task 2: economic growth - environment protection
3 - Hi Bui, you failed to address the prompt partially. The better version of the first paragraph would be: ...
Writing Feedbackthuhabk - Aug 6, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 7, 2018
|TOEFL: the ability to maintain friendships with old friends vs. the ability to make new friends?
2 - Hi Natasha, the question offers you the option to choose one of two responses. You either write a response...
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TECHONOLOGY DEVELOPMENT (POSITIVE/NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT)
3 - @TriceLiu thankyou for your advise and i am looking forward for your advises on my upcoming writing :)...
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018 / zahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018
|Social network usage has caused a variety of contradictory effects on the whole community
3 - Hi chubby! Here's my advises related to your writing. 1. This statement of your essay seems to indicate...
Writing Feedbackchubbyngo07 - Aug 6, 2018 / zahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018
|Production off Co2 and other greenhouse gas has a heating effects on the atmosphere
3 - Tam, you have written only 240 words indicating that you are short of the minimum word count by 10...
Writing FeedbackVu Tammm26 - Aug 6, 2018 / Holt - Aug 7, 2018
|Argument between funding new railway lines and existing public transport
3 - HI AWESOME! Here's some suggestion for your writing: 1. You better eliminate Some societies in and directly say...
Writing Feedbackfauzansdr - Aug 6, 2018 / zahranatsir - Aug 7, 2018
|Big controversy whether employees should switch their jobs regularly or not
3 - Dear Holt, a great thanks to you! You give me extremely valuable comments. Would you mind giving me additional...
Writing Feedbackdongnguyenrobo - Aug 5, 2018 / dongnguyenrobo - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 : Discuss about physical activities and logical subjects
Writing FeedbackPhoenix Nguyen - Aug 5, 2018 / Phoenix Nguyen - Aug 6, 2018
|It's a big argument regarding opinion if a part-time job while study at university is worthy or not
4 - @TriceLiu I really thanks for your help. I read it carefully. You gave me some words to describe my...
Writing Feedbacklehuuquyen - Aug 1, 2018 / lehuuquyen - Aug 6, 2018
|Maps indicate the modifications Queen Mary Hospital has undergone since its establishment in 1960
4 - @TungfromVN my teacher said that was the academic structure, aim to lengthen your essay =)))) you shouldn't understand the...
Writing Feedbackducanhdo22 - Aug 4, 2018 / ducanhdo22 - Aug 6, 2018
|Integrating countries into solving environmental problems or fixing it each one separately
3 - I think some sentences in your essay are unclear so I suggest some amendments on them. For example: ...
Writing FeedbackVanchu3108 - Aug 5, 2018 / thuhabk - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK1: ESSAY ABOUT UK BIRTH RATE IN WOMEN AT 6 AGE GROUPS
4 - I think the overall writing is very good, however, you should pay more attention to the plural form, for...
Writing Feedbackvodat1512002 - Jul 26, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TOPIC ABOUT NEWS AND QUALITIES OF JOURNALISTS
3 - Vo, your total approach to the essay is wrong. You turned a direct question essay into an opinion essay,...
Writing Feedbackvothuong - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Children watching TV instead of doing active things
2 - Duong, excellent work in merging your 2 reasons for why kids prefer to watch TV. You also did a...
Writing Feedbackdghhnh - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|Ielts Writing Task 1: The graph shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
3 - Huynh, if you review the graph notes, you will see that there is a clear indication of the measurements...
Writing Feedbackduchuynhtan - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|Experiences of official travel
Writing Feedbackasepmylocal - Aug 2, 2018 / asepmylocal - Aug 6, 2018
|Writing task 1: Illustration of Dubai Gold sales over four quarters of the year 2002
NEW - the gold demand in Dubai The given line graph exhibits the gold consumption of Dubai over four quarters...
Writing Feedbackloanyuzu - Aug 6, 2018 / — -
|Ielts, Task2 - the critical environmental problems should be worked upon by all countries united
Writing FeedbackAditya0211 - Aug 1, 2018 / Aditya0211 - Aug 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Information sharing. Should or shouldn't?
2 - Anh, the approach to this essay requires you to discuss the public opinion regarding the sharing of information with...
Writing Feedbacktieuanhanh - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|Newcomers in a foreign country - should they obey local rules and customs?
3 - Nghiep. your essay is not responding to the question being asked of you in the essay. For this extent...
Writing FeedbackNavy Captain - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|TOEFL Independent Writing-having fun playing game or doing thing with HW
2 - Lilo, you have written a level 3 essay presentation. You have some difficulty in forming sentences that have an...
Writing Feedbackliloyeh - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|The levels of unemployment among young people between 1993 and 2012 in England
6 - Hi Holt. Thanks a lot for your help. I extremely appreciate your enthusiasm. 😊❤ I'm going to note it...
Writing FeedbackLAKHANH - Aug 2, 2018 / LAKHANH - Aug 4, 2018
|A rise in price of petrol is the most effective method to tackle the growth of traffic congestion
3 - Gnyuen, for an extent essay, you do not need to discuss the opposing point of view. This exam wants...
Writing FeedbackJasonQuan - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|People's motivation to work in the state-run sector in the country of Bananala during 1995-2010.
2 - Tra, it is extremely difficult to review your paper because you did not properly upload the image. It doesn't...
Writing Feedbacktheblacktea - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Printed newspaper vs Online newspaper. What will be more important?
3 - Phuong, your response automatically failed the Task Accuracy considerations. That means your essay is not properly addressing the prompt...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|ENG 102 Final Research paper-Law enforcement leadership, why imminent change may not be the answer.
2 - Kurt, I am highly confused by the way that you are presenting this paper. Are you presenting a study...
Writing FeedbackKurtbu - Aug 4, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|Parents need to learn how to be skillful in looking after their children
Writing FeedbackTungfromVN - Aug 3, 2018 / TungfromVN - Aug 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Printed books vs Electronical books - what brings the future?
5 - Thank you Red Moon, problems with time management. After 40 minutes I have no time at all to double...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 3, 2018
|Topic relates with recycling system, could you check up my essay? Is that appropriate?
Writing FeedbackNurislam1404 - Jul 31, 2018 / Nurislam1404 - Aug 2, 2018
|More and more animal species are becoming extince by human activies in land and sea.
4 - @TriceLiu and @Holt Thank you very much for your advice. I look forward to receiving your further advice on...
Writing Feedbackthuhabk - Aug 1, 2018 / thuhabk - Aug 2, 2018
|Genetic Editing for Cystic Fibrosis Argumentative Essay for ENG 102
2 - a critic fibrosis decribe about the ruthless disease which happened in 1962. The story which explan about a young...
Writing Feedbackhmkane - Jul 28, 2018 / asepmylocal - Aug 2, 2018
|The population of major cities is rising sharply and continually - evaluate this trend
3 - @HoaBui There is a missing element in your research presentation. You have covered the existing problems and the suggested...
Writing FeedbackHoaBui - Aug 1, 2018 / Holt - Aug 2, 2018
|The pie charts below describes how six regions in the world utilized water with unalike purpose
Writing Feedbacklynn1601 - Jul 20, 2018 / lynn1601 - Aug 2, 2018
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