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|[IELTS TASK 2] - ARTS AND SCIENCE; unique traits of arts vs science and technology
3 - Thank you for the suggestions, I appreciate your help :D I should really think about your idea about "arts...
Writing Feedbacklamnhathuy - Mar 20, 2019 / lamnhathuy - Mar 20, 2019
|News comparison case study - a bombing attack in the UK
2 - I like your writing style; thoughtful and to the point (you could be a reporter :). I'm not sure...
Writing Feedbackxxxu021 - Mar 18, 2019 / Rich Monte - Mar 20, 2019
|SOCIAL MEDIA AND OTHER REASONS INFLUENCE COMMUNICATION
2 - You've got a very good point about using the "old-fashioned" communication (like letters); people would generally be able to...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 19, 2019 / Rich Monte - Mar 20, 2019
|[IELTS] People should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet.
3 - Personally, I think you should include passive voice in some of your sentences to avoid repetition. For example: First,...
Writing Feedbackbuimingduc - Mar 20, 2019 / lamnhathuy - Mar 20, 2019
|Two sides of debate - CBEST: Technology contribution to the modern life
2 - hi @jakepkdt This is my suggestion for your writing: 1.The technology serves to ... society and economy...
Writing Feedbackjakepkdt - Mar 15, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 20, 2019
|Universities function is providing the knowledge and skills required in a workplace / employer
Writing Feedbackidontwannabeyou - Mar 19, 2019 / idontwannabeyou - Mar 19, 2019
|Packaged food benefit society
Writing Feedbackdust1205 - Mar 19, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 19, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: The better selection for improving life quality in developing countries
2 - Obviously, people are happier when ... => i just think the sentence is unnecessary, to replace, you can mention...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 18, 2019 / Hammy - Mar 19, 2019
|The problems and solutions to increasing life expectancy
3 - in my opinion, i don't agree with you that your essay talked about a general view which means including...
Writing FeedbackThao Hien - Mar 16, 2019 / Hammy - Mar 19, 2019
|How to define and achieve happiness
3 - @Ekaputri17 I think you've written a strong essay overall. I can only suggest that you don't need to put...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 17, 2019 / coke - Mar 18, 2019
|[IETLS Writing] the advantages of the government's spending on university fees
2 - It would be better if you explain your point of view first rather than you explain the opposite sides....
Writing Feedbackanhtu - Mar 17, 2019 / danggraini - Mar 18, 2019
|IELTS2 - the power of advertising and the real needs of the society in which they are sold
2 - Hy @Leon2501 Overall your ideas are good, you only need to make it simple and well-organized In my...
Writing FeedbackLeon2501 - Mar 17, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 17, 2019
|It is argued that preventing problems relevant to health is more crucial than curing these problems
3 - Phan, you have not followed the discussion requirements for this essay. This happened because you went in a different...
Writing FeedbackHuyngoc168 - Mar 14, 2019 / Holt - Mar 17, 2019
|Nurses are a critical part of healthcare and make up the largest section of the health profession
2 - Sydnea, what is the whole point of this paper? It is a highly informative research paper that failed to...
Writing Feedbacksydmarie - Mar 13, 2019 / Holt - Mar 17, 2019
|Writing task 2 (Fixing punishment and prison time)
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 14, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 16, 2019
|Creativity and Entrepreneurship - young people are more creative than the old in business
2 - Hi @Sanazhemmati, I supposed you were writing a short essay for language tests like TOEFL or IELTS. Following this...
Writing FeedbackSanazhemmati - Mar 14, 2019 / liuzhengxian - Mar 16, 2019
|Most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is very important
2 - good arrangement furniture -> well-arranged need money for fulfilling -> to fulfill this forces them continuing -> to continue...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 16, 2019 / ngothanhnam2211 - Mar 16, 2019
|Rates of recidivism are still high - reasons of this phenomenon and possible solutions
2 - Hy @crystlho In my opinion, your solutions do not tackle the causes of the problems which you are...
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Mar 14, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 15, 2019
|It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects
Writing Feedbacktranthanh1992 - Mar 12, 2019 / peacock34 - Mar 15, 2019
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Giving judges the access to past police record of a defendant
5 - Tran, I find that my students find it easier to create a paraphrase when they have 4 instead of...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Mar 10, 2019 / Holt - Mar 14, 2019
|Exercising - A Natural Way to Help Your Health
3 - Dong, since this is not an extent essay, your agreement should not be presented as a measured response. It...
Writing Feedbackddoris - Mar 12, 2019 / Holt - Mar 14, 2019
|Children suffer more pressure from academic, social and commercial aspects
3 - Le, unfortunately, all of the reviews int he world will not be able to help this essay in its...
Writing FeedbackLeduythaiduong - Mar 12, 2019 / Holt - Mar 14, 2019
|IELTS 2: In many schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects and boys choose science
2 - hey, I have some advices may be helpful for you ! u use some inappropriate words and expressions like...
Writing Feedbackhuyenltt - Mar 11, 2019 / julggo44 - Mar 13, 2019
|IELTS Task 2- Advantages and Disadvantages of Nursing homes for the Elderly
2 - Dear Spartan, I would like to have some comments on your writing as follows: 1) Strengths: You have answered...
Writing Feedbackspartan1 - Mar 11, 2019 / crystlho - Mar 13, 2019
|WATER POLUTION - a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment
3 - I think IELTS examiners won't check for plagiarism in the real test as the examples given by test takers...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 11, 2019 / coke - Mar 13, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 Writing: Discuss about studying in groups and studying alone.
2 - Hy @coke, I am also still learning, and I just want to give advice based on my recent knowledge...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 11, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 12, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?
2 - Hello writingbuddy888 I think your 2nd body only lists 3 ideas on why social media is advantageous. You need...
Writing Feedbackwritingbuddy888 - Mar 11, 2019 / coke - Mar 11, 2019
|Ielts task2 - Should government give more financial support to local film industries?
2 - Please include the whole question in your post next time. Word count is 193 which is way too far...
Writing Feedbackbenice - Mar 11, 2019 / coke - Mar 11, 2019
|Writing task 2- responsibility of the goverment of the poor nations and the rich nations
3 - Diep, kindly remember that there is a difference between UK and US English when it comes to spelling certain...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Mar 10, 2019 / Holt - Mar 11, 2019
|Essay about the future effects of computer technology advancements.
3 - Pronob, You did a great job in presenting the Task Accuracy requirements of the first paragraph. It strictly adheres...
Writing FeedbackPrch - Mar 10, 2019 / Holt - Mar 11, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 Writing: Printing newspaper and magazines will cease to occur in the near future
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 9, 2019 / coke - Mar 10, 2019
|People have lost their night sleep. Why is night sleep distorted? Impact on society & individuals
Writing Feedbacksumitbabel0101 - Mar 9, 2019 / Holt - Mar 10, 2019
|The hard copy version of newspapers & magazines has been in great threat toward the printed version
Writing FeedbackJames777 - Mar 9, 2019 / James777 - Mar 10, 2019
|Review My Essay task 2 : implementing strictly noise controls
2 - Minh, before I delve into the composition problems of your I would like to show you the simpler problems...
Writing FeedbackMinhHuong96 - Mar 9, 2019 / Holt - Mar 10, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 Writing : Charging with people for admission is a positive way to maintain a museum
3 - Pei, I cannot give this essay a passing score because it will automatically receive a failing score of 1....
Writing Feedbackwedward8780 - Mar 9, 2019 / Holt - Mar 10, 2019
|Topic - Animals not anymore as a food source, or a "product"
2 - Zombu, this is an extent response essay. That means that you cannot just "lean towards" an opinion, you actually...
Writing Feedbackzombu11 - Mar 8, 2019 / Holt - Mar 9, 2019
|Children's free time must include educational activities
3 - Jasur, the direct question essay must be discussed from a single point of view. Not a comparative point of...
Writing FeedbackJas8086 - Mar 8, 2019 / Holt - Mar 9, 2019
|IELTS Writing task 2: Studying subjects that we do not like is a complete waste of time
2 - Hello angella1706, You need to state your position on whether or not studying uninteresting subjects is a waste...
Writing Feedbackangella1706 - Mar 8, 2019 / coke - Mar 9, 2019
|WORK CONDITIONS AND TIME TOPIC. THE TEST IN 2-3-2019.
2 - Hello dinhphong, Firstly, the prompt has never mentioned any trend in making alterations of works so I think...
Writing Feedbackdinhphong - Mar 5, 2019 / coke - Mar 9, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Why national leaders should spend more money on public transportation
2 - Nguyen, your essay does not follow the discussion prompt as it is provided. This is a 5 paragraph essay...
Writing Feedbacknguyenxuandinhpq - Mar 7, 2019 / Holt - Mar 8, 2019
|Have classmates much bigger impact on a child's success at school? What about parents influence?
3 - Bich, the term is "influence" not influent. Also, is this an IELTS Task 2 essay? Or was this just...
Writing Feedbackbichloan - Mar 7, 2019 / Holt - Mar 8, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2 - Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language
3 - Crystal, all of your reasoning paragraphs only present talking points but no actual explanation of the talking points. These...
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Mar 6, 2019 / Holt - Mar 7, 2019
|Some people think instead of preventing climate change, we should find ways to live with it. Agree?
2 - Doung. the word "are" is used to denote the plural form of "is". The term "evidence" is in singular...
Writing Feedbackduonghoang - Mar 6, 2019 / Holt - Mar 7, 2019
|Social media (Advantages and Disadvantages)
3 - Zoheb, nice name, just a quick observation. On the third paragraph, second sentence, you doubled the "our". Doubling words...
Writing FeedbackYopi - Mar 3, 2019 / buckmore - Mar 6, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: LEFT WALLET WITH A FRIEND DURING HOLIDAY.
2 - Dear Harman8484, Please don't use "i". You should use capital letter "I" in stead. As far asI remember the...
Writing FeedbackHarman8484 - Mar 3, 2019 / crystlho - Mar 6, 2019
|The water consumption rates divided into industrial use, agricultural use and domestic use
3 - Thank you very much for your feedback. I'm sorry I don't know how to post image because it is...
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Feb 11, 2019 / crystlho - Mar 6, 2019
|Writing task 1: Compare the access differences to the city hospital in 2007 and three years later
2 - Thu, your essay meets the word count but not the paragraph count. Each comparison points for the two maps...
Writing Feedbackoutofblue - Mar 5, 2019 / Holt - Mar 6, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 - Foreign languages not only for travellers or abroad workers
2 - Ashraf, your essay did not address the prompt discussion correctly. One only has to compare the original discussion instruction...
Writing Feedbacknokia1995 - Mar 4, 2019 / Holt - Mar 5, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - ANIMAL ADOPTIONS
3 - Thanks a lot Ms Rose. I'm very grateful when receiving your feedback. I will be more careful and try...
Writing Feedbackthaole181 - Mar 3, 2019 / thaole181 - Mar 5, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2: Too much fast foods consumed and higher tax as some solution
2 - Hong, this was a very well written essay until you had to write the concluding paragraph. The concluding paragraph...
Writing Feedbackyirapyirap - Mar 3, 2019 / Holt - Mar 4, 2019
|IELTS: no government restrictions for creative artists and their work
3 - Asit, you have written 347 words. You dedicate all of your time to writing the task, and no time...
Writing Feedbackasitit490 - Mar 3, 2019 / Holt - Mar 4, 2019
|The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offense?
Writing FeedbackChrissmccandless - Mar 2, 2019 / Chrissmccandless - Mar 4, 2019
|IELTS writing task 1. How to build your own water clock.
3 - Ngo, you must remember that the Task 1 essay requires a total of 4 paragraphs, not 4. You have...
Writing Feedbackngothanhnam2211 - Mar 2, 2019 / Holt - Mar 3, 2019
|Nowadays children are more undisciplined because their parents are more busy with their career.
3 - Knobs, your opening paraphrase is confusing. It does not make sense. Although you provided a proper extent response to...
Writing FeedbackHAOss - Mar 2, 2019 / Holt - Mar 3, 2019
|Ielts task 2: many people try to look younger than their age, causes and opinion
3 - Osha, try to use descriptive adjectives instead of general reference adjectives to help heighten the clarity of your work....
Writing FeedbackOsha - Mar 1, 2019 / Holt - Mar 3, 2019
|Write traffic jams and housing problem (IELTS)
3 - Seethal, while the examiner will accept US spelling for certain words, you are still taking a British English based...
Writing Feedbackseethal - Mar 1, 2019 / Holt - Mar 3, 2019
|Ielts task 2: people sleep less than before, causes and effects
5 - In the second paragraph, you started off with a discussion regarding how social media keeps people awake. Then, without...
Writing FeedbackOsha - Feb 27, 2019 / Holt - Mar 2, 2019
|Some people believe that a rising petrol price is the best way to deal with traffic and pollution.
2 - Please try to write a minimum of three sentences for your opening paraphrase and summary conclusion paragraphs. The 3...
Writing FeedbackLarissa Linh - Feb 28, 2019 / Holt - Mar 1, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2 - Advertisements - drawbacks and benefits
3 - Truc, this is not a comparison essay. This is a single opinion essay whose response is based upon one...
Writing FeedbackTrcQynh - Feb 28, 2019 / Holt - Mar 1, 2019
|Write a short paragraph about the problems associated with an increase in the usage of car.
2 - Hi Quang. Since you did not specify whether this paragraph should be written UK or US English, I decided...
Writing FeedbackKenss - Feb 28, 2019 / Holt - Mar 1, 2019
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